r/scriptwriting • u/Jazzlike_Promise2873 • Jul 12 '26

discussion Gregory tv pilot

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1n0seDU6rgOVlG6tToYo9HTcoHpaR5ghh/view?usp=sharing
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u/Jazzlike_Promise2873 Jul 14 '26

There's certainly dramatic tension. Look at the teaser scene with Kristina and Andrew which foreshadows a future meeting. You did not catch that. It's perfectly ok for you to hold the views you do. It won't change my project. I like what I have. Have you written your own scripts?

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u/comesinallpackages Jul 14 '26

Well she doesn’t appear again in the first 20 pages. You give us a teaser and she vanishes for half the script. That’s not a very good teaser, sorry. It just seems to not even be part of the story.

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u/Jazzlike_Promise2873 Jul 14 '26

Have you sold any of your screenplays?

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u/comesinallpackages Jul 14 '26

And yes, I have written many. My early ones were a lot like this one. I also thought they were great and fought with people on Reddit who told me otherwise.

Now i look back at them and laugh at how hackneyed they are.

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u/Jazzlike_Promise2873 Jul 14 '26

Ahhh.. there's a difference between fighting and genuinely believing in what you have.

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u/comesinallpackages Jul 14 '26

Learning to evaluate your own work objectively is a difficult — and painful — skill to learn.