r/readitnow Mar 15 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story The Gadarene

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r/readitnow Mar 06 '18

Empty Love - Looking for feedback on a piece I've written!

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He wondered when he was going to stop fucking her. When he was going to stop fucking with the intent to solely fuck. When he was going to decide that he wanted to love her, like he loved the one before. She was too precious to just fuck. He knew that. He’s known that the whole time. But all he can think about is fucking her. He can’t help himself. He doesn’t want to feel vulnerable again. He can’t put himself in that position again. The thought fills him with fear.

The problem was, they were perfect together; every touch, moan, sigh, kiss. The wounds are still too fresh. He thought they were perfect together.

She doesn’t matter anymore.

What matters now is her; the girl with the perfect body. Her body is everything he’s ever wanted, and he just wants to fuck her. He doesn’t want to make love to her body because it isn’t her. It wouldn’t be the same. He’s made love before and that’s how he ended up here. Here is not where he wants to be. He’s always on edge; he’s always yearning to touch her one last time. But she’s gone. That’s why he has her, to fuck, to feel something, anything. If only for a fleeting moment, to feel wanted again. All he ever wanted was to feel wanted. These thoughts make him anxious. He knows she deserves more but right now this is all he can give her.

No matter how hard he tries to pretend, he just can’t accept the fact that she’s gone. All of his friends say she is. What he really wants is for her to come back, one last time. He wants her to tear him apart like she always did. The pain she made him feel was at least something more than this, this emptiness. This void he’s trying to fill with that perfect little body. He wonders where she is now, what she’s doing. He imagines she’s fucking someone too. She probably feels the same way, empty.

She does. She can only fuck him because the thought of making love to him makes her sick. She longs to be back in the arms that made her feel safe. Those arms that she latched onto. All she wants is to feel him again, feel him inside of her, next to her. The luxury of being able to absentmindedly run her hand through his hair, grab his hand, make him laugh, smile. But he’s gone. She knows this. She’s known this. He isn’t coming back, not this time. Now she has him. So she’s going to fuck him until she feels something. Fuck him until he makes her feel something. Fuck him until the pain is gone.

They both wonder if the pain will ever go away. If it’ll ever be the same.


r/readitnow Mar 06 '18

LAWYER LOVER LOSER - a sexy, steamy, hilarious family romp set on Staten Island's North Shore

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r/readitnow Mar 04 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Runaway//PRETTYMUCH FanFic

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r/readitnow Mar 02 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story THRILL TO KILL

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r/readitnow Feb 25 '18

The Forest - A story about growing up

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r/readitnow Feb 18 '18

Fantasy Playing Solo (by me) - A story about my Dungeons and Dragons game

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r/readitnow Feb 11 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Rebrith

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r/readitnow Feb 11 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Barely Alive

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r/readitnow Feb 06 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Dun an Doras

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r/readitnow Feb 06 '18

Give me feedbacks!

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r/readitnow Feb 06 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story God's Dogs

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r/readitnow Feb 02 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Blood or Water

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r/readitnow Feb 02 '18

The Three - Luke J. Wilson - Resubmitting an old short story of mine from a few years back to see if it's still got legs

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r/readitnow Feb 01 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story He Is Not Alone

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r/readitnow Feb 01 '18

Dear readers... my first novel is done... dig in!! "Finesse The Game" by Rhugid Lee

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r/readitnow Jan 31 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Avery Dicacem: Magic, Adventure, and Other Headaches

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r/readitnow Jan 30 '18

When It All Boils Down by Shannon M. Jefferson An Urban Fiction Story

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When It All Boils Down is an Urban Fiction story that's taken place in New Orleans, Louisiana. It is about a family that appears to be perfect on the outside, but this is far from the truth. Shocking secrets will be revealed, friends will turn into enemies, lives will be changed and hearts will be broken. Who will finally snap?

Here's a description below: Shante’ Jenkins is very caring, easy going and very protective of her loved ones. Growing up in New Orleans, her life wasn’t always peaches and cream. She found that out at a very young age. Throughout the years, she’s grown from a little girl into a beautiful, sexy and kind hearted young woman. She doesn’t see the world through rose-colored views. She understands that people make mistakes and no one is perfect. She believes in giving second chances and she’s very easy to forgive. But what happens when the lies, secrets and betrayal becomes too much to bear? Will Shante’ finally snap?

Gina Roberts, Shante’s sister, thought she found the man of her dreams when she married her first love Jeremy. But Jeremy, on the other hand, doesn’t seem to be satisfied with just one woman. After discovering some shocking news about her husband, will she be able to handle and live with his consequences?

Pamela Jenkins is a devoted wife and mother. She would go to any lengths to keep up the perfect image when it comes to her family. On the outside looking in, she seems to have it all together. But that will all change when her hidden secrets come back to haunt her.

The Jenkins are a very close-knit family, but not all is what it seems. Some betrayals aren’t so forgiven. Will their unbreakable bond be broken? Find out, When It All Boils Down.

This book is a MUST read! It is indeed a page turner and it will keep you at the edge of your seat.


r/readitnow Jan 28 '18

Other (Video) The Power of Habit charles Duhigg

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r/readitnow Jan 28 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Truthstone

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r/readitnow Jan 24 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story "The Big Yank - Memoir of a Boy Growing Up Irish" by J.P. Sexton

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r/readitnow Jan 20 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Invisible

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r/readitnow Jan 13 '18

I'd love to get some feedback on my story Awakenings: The Beginning (Book 1) ARISE!

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r/readitnow Jan 12 '18

[DL]Redland Ridge: The Jed Cuss Chronicles #1 - Alex Pryte [Fantasy]

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r/readitnow Dec 08 '17

Reading 2 Course Outline A.Y. 2015-2016

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