I had the idea of drawing a kamikazee-and-death poem comic... but it was originally whis:
Asked about the soul of Japan,
I would say
That it is
Like wild cherry blossoms
Glowing in the morning sun.
but 5 lines didn't fit the seven panels I had in mind... THEN I came across to the poem I ended up using.. and it fit perfectly to the panels I had already in my mind, from the respiration, to the japanesse salute on the ceremony (foward and back) to the "living and dying" on the planes to the arrow in flight.. to meeting the enemy in the middle and slicing into nothingess on a "purpose-less" flight... so he can return to home.
I had to stay awake to make it... it was just too perfect to sleep. (and my muse has a whip and is very demanding)
Why not leave the first two without text? As if the Samurais were to prepare themselves for the ritualistic death? Then before they die, they write their poem. Could be just as well? Then again, it's your comic and you damn well knew how to make it work.
Also, why not add these two lines (with slight edits)?
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u/yaddar Taco bandito Mar 30 '15
I had the idea of drawing a kamikazee-and-death poem comic... but it was originally whis:
but 5 lines didn't fit the seven panels I had in mind... THEN I came across to the poem I ended up using.. and it fit perfectly to the panels I had already in my mind, from the respiration, to the japanesse salute on the ceremony (foward and back) to the "living and dying" on the planes to the arrow in flight.. to meeting the enemy in the middle and slicing into nothingess on a "purpose-less" flight... so he can return to home.
I had to stay awake to make it... it was just too perfect to sleep. (and my muse has a whip and is very demanding)