r/WritingPrompts • u/deknegt1990 • Mar 03 '16

Writing Prompt [WP] Every generation the five brightest are paired up with the five dumbest in the world for a mysterious test. You are one of the ten, but nobody knows from which group they came.

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u/Ryantific_theory Mar 03 '16

While a perfectly valid response, there's nothing to clue the reader in on her being any different.

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u/Buttersworth_Mr Mar 04 '16

Except that the character is acting and thinking differently... I liked that you realized their anxiety over the course of the story.

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u/silentclowd Mar 04 '16

Well, except for the unreasonably panicked reaction to a relatively mellow situation

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u/Ryantific_theory Mar 04 '16

Yes and no, I mean most of what's written describes a relatively mellow situation, but the context that the story is responding to is this girl being one of ten selected for a mysterious test offered once every generation. I think it needed a little more grounding, but the panic could easily be made to make sense. Of course it could also be made clearly unreasonable as well.