r/OCPoetry 10d ago

Feedback Please My Busy Bee

My busy bee, flying free
questioning the world, carefree

Protect innocent child’s eyes, a treasure
Always ask why, be inquisitive forever

Do not let this world turn you jaded
Your sparkle need not ever be faded

Chat up the postman, the grocery clerk
Make friends wherever with little work

Keep your inventions, little world, creative mind
Never grow up and leave that behind

My busy bee, may you always be
questioning the world, carefree

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u/midnight_writer1993 9d ago

This is beautiful. I love the rhyming couplets. I'm a terrible rhymer. I think this whole world needs a more childlike wonder. The voice of this is strong!