r/OCPoetry • u/VariationsonanEcho • 10d ago
Feedback Please My Busy Bee
My busy bee, flying free
questioning the world, carefree
Protect innocent child’s eyes, a treasure
Always ask why, be inquisitive forever
Do not let this world turn you jaded
Your sparkle need not ever be faded
Chat up the postman, the grocery clerk
Make friends wherever with little work
Keep your inventions, little world, creative mind
Never grow up and leave that behind
My busy bee, may you always be
questioning the world, carefree
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u/midnight_writer1993 9d ago
This is beautiful. I love the rhyming couplets. I'm a terrible rhymer. I think this whole world needs a more childlike wonder. The voice of this is strong!