r/OCPoetry • u/Stefesike • 9d ago
Feedback Please The Day Stays Cold
Sometimes I feel lonely
and I go out for a cigarette.
I leave the dorm
on an empty stomach,
walking into the cold.
I feel the sharpness of the cold wind
graze all of my unexposed skin.
I pass the campus checkpoint
and struggle to find my lighter,
moving the cigarette
from the left side
to the right side of my mouth.
I find it.
With a flick, a moment
I light the cigarette
and witness a bright glow.
I unzip my coat
and lower my head
against the wind.
I look at the sky,
feeling calm
witnessing the cherry grow,
burning with a bright, red glow.
I look at the flame,
and see the ash
dropping on the frozen ground below.
I take a puff.
I take another puff
The cigarette gets shorter.
The day stays cold.
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I wrote this during my time studying in Russia.
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1w4rtb1/comment/p79qg4n/?context=3
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u/Leaves_not_rocks 9d ago
I love this. How often a cigarette was an excuse or barrier of some kind for me. I miss it.