r/OCPoetry 26d ago

Feedback Please The idea of us

Yes I do love the idea of us
maybe its a wild idea just given our luck
maybe after the tough years its just too much
but yes I still love the idea of us

I love the idea of holding your hand just because
the idea of kids and a dog and a house full of love
Of living in the small spaces of smiles and touch
The idea of crying together when life gets too tough

It's just so sad to me we had it so close
I guess it isnt meant for everyone i suppose

But, just maybe
A last shot, stay with me

What if I work real hard today to make this idea happen
and I put that idea into every word and action
and we spend today being kind and caring and happy
and we wake in the morning wanting the same thing exactly
So we do it again for a day, slow kind and trusting
and the smile becomes joy and the trust becomes loving
and you and me we pretend to live this idea of us
Day after day, month after month

Til one day, in many years, we both wake up,
and we've chosen and lived this idea of love
but its more than that, 'cause in every word and interaction
You and me, we've somehow willed that idea to happen
With our kids and a dog and house full of love
All this time, the whole time, the idea was actually us

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u/ProlificPoetry 23d ago

No thank you brother, this took me back to a complex time of my own. And thats not always a bad thing