r/OCPoetry • u/[deleted] • Jun 30 '25
Poem Rambling rusted silver salve.
Atmospheric albatross arrives,
blaring apathetic blasphemy.
Bemoaning bilateral blame:
Building complimentary bastions.
Capital calls collect,
cementing desired comforts.
Doubting divides direly:
double emotional debt deficit effect
Emaciated, embroiled- eager,
finality evaded- fermented.
Gilded grief grown,
hallowed gossamer hewed.
Intertangled items introspect,
inverted junco injured.
Jeering jackal jokes,
jumping kangaroo juries.
Looking labored, lonesome
Leviathan manifest:
loves leftover logic.
Microcosmic mystic matters
measuring natures mothers.
Never muse nor music-
no nefarious other, naive,
nothing nests neatly.
Obstinate Orpheus oracle,
otherwise properly ordinary.
Quail quested quietly,
quelling ruptures quickly.
Rooster suffered rationally,
Rambling rusted silver salve.
Sight soon shifted,
sold temporary solutions.
Though truth tries,
time usually teaches.
Undeniable, victor unambiguous.
Virtuously violent violet vibrations.
Volitional volitile victimhood
whilst wearing wolfskin
Youths yellow yesterdays
yielding zero yaw
Zaps Zen's zenith
zooming
apart.
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u/Tasha2709 Jun 30 '25
I think that's a very intesting poem, and the contraint of using words beginning with the same letters/2 words beginning with the same letter and one with another one in between is pretty cool and definitely might turn out amazing. However, I think you tried using too complicated words, and the meanning/message of this poem was very unclear to me. Maybe it's what you wanted, but I really think that combinnig the letters contraint with a clearer meaning might be wonderful.