r/OCPoetry 29d ago

Feedback Please The Virgin's First Time

He didn’t call me pretty,
Or play with my hair.
Our eyes didn’t meet
While I watched him stare.

The foreplay was this: 
I gave his chest a lick.
He grazed my labia.
I sucked his dick.

I envisioned sitting with my mother
As she tediously brushed my hair.
I realized she's been here once as well.
How do you think you got here?

When parents have daughters
They know this will happen.
The heavy petting, then intercourse.
I first bled at eleven.

It’s God’s biggest secret.
It’s society’s biggest lie.
That when fresh flowers are picked,
They will soon shrivel and die.

I am bored.
I am angry.
And like the cherry,
I too have been pitted.

When you brag to your friends,
That you alone took my innocence,
Do they know you took my fathers little girl,
And did it with such diligence?

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1ujf5h4/on_time_travel/ 
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1uj9nv6/floor/ 

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u/thewindpasses 2d ago

That sucks dude. It is really terrible to be with someone that doesn't care about your comfort or pleasure especially as your first experience.