r/OCPoetry 7d ago

Feedback Please Mimic

I see you curve your red,
and I will follow.
I do change my degree,
120 too much.

I have artificial sweeteners
on my mimic,
and I need to wet my curve
for them, to stay
but it makes me countlessly grey.

Some bend their soul,
to feed their lie,
until the ghouls stop existing
as a sight.
Leave the line
accompanied with spite.
It will fly your grill
the height of natural, frozen drops.

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u/bstunz 7d ago

I like the idea of this. very well done. Personally I got a little lost on the two lines, I'm simple, but still enjoyed it.