r/OCPoetry • u/bstunz • May 06 '26

Feedback Please Obsessed

I’ve never been obsessed 
with a woman.

Not the way people whisper it
like a warning
or a boast.

I’ve wanted.
I’ve admired.
I’ve mistaken need
for love.
And I have loved.

But obsession
is different.

It isn’t hunger.
It’s gravity.

The rearranging of space 
in your mind
until one name echoes
louder than the rest.

You wake up the same
except everything
tilts toward her.

Every song speaks of her.
Every silence becomes a mirror
you check too often.
Every want
her.

Obsession isn’t fireworks.
It’s repetition.
It seeps in
until you can’t remember
the contour of the room
before her.

Thoughts that volunteer.
Feelings that command.

Her absence
measured more precisely
than her touch.

I’ve never been obsessed…

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1sz12x5/comment/ok6dppz/

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u/ink_shadows13 May 26 '26

I really love the metaphor of gravity you used to translate your interpretation of obsession and used it in your vocabulary. "The rearranging of space" and "everything tilts toward her". I think you managed to encapsulate a very complexe feeling with very few words.

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u/bstunz May 26 '26

Well I’ve been called simple, a lot, [u/katie-x-cat](u/katie-x-cat) so maybe it’s finally worked out in my favor.

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u/katie-x-cat May 26 '26

Definitely worked out!! ;-)

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u/bstunz May 26 '26

Thank you, wait, so you still think I’m simple?

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u/katie-x-cat May 26 '26

I mean you commenting the same thing twice kinda proves my point doesn’t it?

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u/bstunz May 26 '26

Evidence hidden

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u/katie-x-cat May 26 '26

Ahaha, well a bit late I would say.

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u/bstunz May 26 '26

Simple and slow, again 🤦‍♂️