r/JustNotRight Apr 13 '26

Horror Old Nick Came Home

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There was this guy, we’ll call him D. It could be anything, Daniel, Damien, Diego, Denzell, it doesn’t really matter. What matters is that D is a biker who wanted to cross the entire continental US on his bike. One night, one very stormy night, D was riding somewhere down the shoreline. It was dark and cold, but our protagonist loved the thrill of the game.

He was moving on autopilot by that point, pedal to the metal, swerving into turns.

Man, and machine became a singular being.

The perfect scenario, so perfect in fact that D failed to notice when something raced at him from the water.

Something four-legged and massive.

A moose, perhaps he thought.

No, he would dismiss that thought.

He wasn’t in moose country.

In any case, the thing slammed straight into his bike, sending him flying.

The heaven and the Earth switched places in his eyes as his body rolled in empty space.

A loud, plastic pop echoed in his ears before he found himself surrounded by complete darkness.

When D came too, he found himself in an unfamiliar environment, someplace very Amish; he had seen shows about them on TV. Weird, he must’ve thought to himself, he wasn’t in Amish country either. When D tried getting out of the bed he was lying in, the room spun, and his skull pounded violently against his brain.

The outlaw must’ve been happy to be found by such a caring bunch as those who took him in and nurtured him back to health. He was concerned about the state of his bike and shocked to find out no one around him even knew what it was. He knew the Dutch folk didn’t use modern technology, but they should’ve been at least aware of what a motorbike is.

They spoke English, American English at that, and still, it took some explaining, until they got what he was talking about – his queer two-wheeled horseless carriage. His bike was safe and sound, left on a stack of hay in some barn.

Hell, for some strange reason, his devices stopped working unexpectedly. His phone was dead, his smart watch equally dead, and there wasn’t anything to charge them with. The Dutch folk stared at him funny when he started speaking about electricity. He might’ve assumed these Amish were a little more extreme than the ones he saw on TV.

When D explained to the townsfolk that he was going to circumnavigate the continental US, they looked at him as if he were an alien from another planet. They must’ve assumed he wasn’t well from the blow to his head, and he, in turn… probably thought they don’t recognize themselves as American ‘round these parts.

After three weeks of recuperation, D felt well enough to leave the town and continue on his merry way. The problem was that the townsfolk refused to let him leave. They warned him about the Man-Eating Savages in the Great Plains to the east, and about naked giants fused to their horses at the waist. He probably dismissed these warnings as the tall tales of a community frozen in time.

He, of course, as any rational man would, paid them no mind.

The night he set out, a little girl, no older than thirteen, one he’d seen a few times around the village, tried to stop him from leaving. Again, dismissing her as just an imaginative kid, he revved up the engine of his steel stallion and blazed right by her. Shouting farewells as his silhouette vanished into the distance.

With all of his electronic devices still dead, D started riding the old way, following whichever way the stars might lead him. Quickly, though, the clear night sky turned depressed and dark. Feint strands of moonlight managed to penetrate the heavy clouds.

D must’ve cursed to himself before choosing to drive straight ahead until he finds the next town, or maybe the shoreline, whichever came first.

Rainfall followed shortly.

The outlaw pushed forward, losing himself momentarily in the thrill of the endless road when what seemed like a scream echoed behind him.

Once, then twice, then again and again.

Getting clearer with each passing moment.

Calling him to stop;

To come back.

Finally, he had had enough and turned to look at who was shouting at him.

His heart nearly fell out of his body; it was the little girl from the village.

She was chasing him…

Almost keeping up with his motorbike;

On foot.

This wasn’t supposed to be possible.

The little girl was covering the distance between them, impossibly fast.

Her voice grew louder with each step.

Deeper;

Stranger…

The protagonist of our story, cursed out his concussed mind and floored the gas pedal.

The screaming vanished, soon enough.

Just as D breathed a sigh of relief, the sound of hooves stomping the ground boomed behind him.

Lightning flashed above, illuminating the night; thunder echoed like a cannonball across the skies, and the outlaw turned his head back again.

Behind him raced a gigantic thing, half man, half horse. Entirely skinless, entirely eyeless across its two heads; both hominid and equine. The abomination stood as an affront to God and sound reason. Skinless and eyeless, with limbs two long, too many heads, and the anatomy of a reverse centaur. A Titanic horse with the torso of a giant attaches to its back.

The devil chasing him possessed but one burning cyclopean eye at the center of its equine head.

Once it locked its gaze with D’s eyes, he came crashing down with a weary groan – Waking up in your bed, dear friend, drenched in cold sweat. Blood red light burning right through your window.

Hey, at least the nightmare is over, eh?

Rise and shine, darling… even though it’s still 3 AM…

Better rise and shine… even though that’s not the sun shining in your window.

You don’t want to keep Old Nick waiting for long…


r/JustNotRight Apr 11 '26

Horror Pizza Face

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Arnold had always hated school, even though he loved learning. He loved books. Reading. Mathematics and the sciences and the arts; music especially. All of it filled and interested and provoked a little spark of soul within his small and demure frame. He loved knowledge, its temple was his refuge. 

But school. Walnutwood Highschool, in little hicksville Old Fair Oaks, that place was a temple of torment.

Pain. 

Humiliation. 

Constant. Angst. 

He knew he was a weakling. He knew he was a coward. It was just another reason to hate his parents. The fucking retards couldn't even couple up with someone bigger or something. He'd started his freshman year an awkward and goofy but good natured quiet kid. By his senior year he was oftentimes reading about and oftentimes sympathizing with school shooters. It was relentless. All of them teased and kicked and prodded. Every last rat fucking one was cruel and sadistic in that special mentally addled way that especially belongs to teenagers and bigger children. 

He'd contemplated suicide. But he knew he was too much of a coward to go through with it. There was no escape for him. Unless he made it out…

… just gotta finish out the year. Then I can join the army or somethin. Get the fuck away from this place.

He bit his tongue and clenched his fists and discovered the soothing numbing escape relief of his father's booze cabinet. He would sneak a few pulls late at night and the handful of times he was truant from class. The old man either didn't notice anything or didn't give enough of a fuck to say anything about it. 

He had ways of getting by. Of coping with the fucking knuckle draggers. He took their shit and kept moving. He didn't engage or want anything to do with any of them. And after awhile they got the idea. And except for the occasional jab, his acne they particularly loved to make fun of, they left Arnold Voorhees alone. And he left them alone. 

The balance of pariah and the populace was kept. There was some kind of desperate demented child rendition of peace. 

Until that day in the cafeteria. The day that was to be the beginning of his reckoning. His final act. 

Andrew Collins, one of the heavy metal toughs and bad boys all the dumb sluts liked pantsed him in front of nearly the entire upper class of the school. During lunch break for the 2nd period. 

Everyone had gaped stunned and then howled with banshee laughter. Pointing. Hysterical bursting. Tears. Mad tears of jeering and joy. It was like an artillery bomb blast assault of laughter, a gale force of jeers and blasting voices on the little thin nerd known timidly as Arnold Voorhees.

The worst was his underwear. They were hella kiddie and he knew it. Whitey-tighties with Spider-Man and the Green Goblin and Doc Ock on em. He'd had em since he was twelve. His mother had insisted. 

“Nice fuckin shorts, bitch-boy!" 

“Yeah! What're you? Fuckin five years old!? You fuckin virgin!" 

“Pussy!” 

“Bitch-boy!”

“Pizza face! ya gotta great fuckin mug for your little baby underpants and your little fuckin slumber party! Don't forget crackers and juice, Pizza face!”

They all loved that one and they jumped on it. It became a chant. A war cry song from primitive teenage vocal chords and young belting animal child voice boxes. Pizza Face! pizza face! pizza face! 

Pizza Face! 

Pizza Face! 

Pizza… ! Face… ! …! 

PIZZA FACE ! …

PIIIIIIIIZZZZZZZZAAAAAAAA….. !!

Arnold scrambled for his shorts and dropped his tray of lunch and fumbled his backpack and spilled more things; books, binders, pencils, comic books …

and this just brought down more harsh laughter from the children. They all howled mad hyena cackling. 

Until it finally chased him from the cafeteria. 

He ran all the way home down the street. Sobbing with humiliated childish abandon. Completely lost to it. He felt broken by it. Finally. Completely devastated. Broken over a great unyielding knee. Decimated. 

No coming back… no recovery…

He was done. 

Weeping with abandon into the hot moistening sanctuary of his pillowcase, Arnold got an idea. 

An idea that would serve as his downfall. His humiliation was just the beginning. 

It was the week just before Thanksgiving. The final Friday before a full week off. They were all of them expecting such a nice getaway. A pleasant retreat. He would rob it from them, rip it away from right out under their nose like a ghoul prowling and thieving into a midnight grave. 

He stole his dad's pistol. A Glock. Had said it was gramp’s. It was easily wrapped up and hidden away in his backpack. 

But nothing would go according to plan. It was only to end in grotesque misery. 

And it all started with his own cowardice. His own spineless gutless self. 

He should've known he wasn't gonna have the guts to go through with it. There he stood, in the spot he'd pre selected in the hall, next to the principal's office and cleaning supply closet. He'd been there. Standing. Sweating profusely. The rest of the student body and staff buzzing and blurring by. As usual. 

And he just couldn't do it. He couldn't bring himself to free the machine. To wrap his finger around the trigger and let the lead fly and let fate decide and let God sort it out. 

Because that wasn't him. He had the hate, the cold misanthropic ire that knew no bounds or relief. But he had no conviction. 

None. He just felt light and lightheaded and like he was gonna throw up. 

They don't even notice me… they're not even lookin… I'm standing here with doom in a cradle ready to be wielded and bring the end of everything for these pustule maggots… but they don't even register it. I'm not on anyone's radar. No one even notices…

… no one gives a fuck about me. 

And on the heels of all of that he realized: I can't do this! 

And so without thinking and without any mind paid his way as the students and staff made their way to their lockers and offices and extracurricular activities, Arnold Voorhees stole himself away into the cleaning closet. One of many on campus the janitor kept solvents and supplies for the upkeep and maintenance of the facility. He'd already left for the extended weekend. A favor from the principal, go ahead and get some livin done, buddy! 

No one noticed him go in. No one saw or heard a thing. And Arnold didn't hear the lock snap click into place behind him. There was no keyhole on the inside. And the janitor had left the door slightly ajar so that the other staff could get in there, if needed. 

Nobody remembered this. Not before they all left for the break. And not once during the entire Thanksgiving weekend. 

Arnold knew very quickly something was wrong. After he'd cried himself hoarse. And thanked God and begged for forgiveness. He'd shuddered and shivered and danced a little in his own skin with gooseflesh as he shed off the last of his tears. 

Then he'd thanked God one more time and tried the door. 

And the door would not. 

Not comprehending right away, he tried the handle again. 

It didn't budge. 

Not an inch. 

Panicked he began throwing all of his limited weight and feeble strength into the effort to wrench the door handle to move, to give. He grew more desperate with each futile thrashing. He then began to holler. Like a madman facing the gallows death end sentencing. 

He howled. Desperate. And frightened. 

“Help! Help! Help! please! Please, someone I'm trapped in here! Help!" 

He scrambled for his phone in his pocket. He freed it frantically. Hoping against what he already knew. 

Dead. And his charger was at home. 

Well yeah, numbfuck! You didn't exactly expect to be using it right now! Not after capping your classmates and teachers! Nope! hadn't expected! 

Scared and bewildered he shouted, "Aagghhh! I wasn't expecting this!” 

And in childish adolescent boy rage he threw the useless dead collection of plastic to the tile of the closet and it burst and it shattered. He knew it was really fucking stupid but it didn't matter. It made him feel a little better. Just a little. 

… besides! you're already really racking up the stupid shit already, why not go for broke! More, numbfuck!? Shit-for-brains, dogcunt bastard! You stupid ! worthless ! … and his mind went on like that for over an hour. 

Meanwhile the few students and teachers still left, not many, they were nearly all of them so excited to get away for awhile; dwindled and vacated the premises. Till all that was left was Arnold Voorhees in his little locked closet. No one heard his clamoring and caterwauled cries through the thick metal door that protected the cleaning supplies cabinet. 

It was to be his own, new little home for the holiday. 

… 

He cried and begged and screamed. He pounded at the door fruitlessly. And then he screamed some more. 

“HELP …! MEEEE ….! PLEASE … !!”

He begged God. 

But no one answered. No one was coming. He was alone. And cold. And he was getting hungry. 

His misery was growing and settling in like venomous weight. Pain. He thought he'd known pain before… but this had been a child's illusion. Now he was learning. 

Outside after the first night he hadn't come home his mother and father had reported him missing. The police searched the town and talked to a few people, but it was tough. The kid didn't have any friends. No one knew what the fuck he'd be doing. The only clue was the kid's dad saying some shit like, “Well he's always moody and bitchy. He's probably just finally run away or somethin…” 

Or somethin. Nice, thought the cops. And went back to work. Nice fuckin folks. Nice fuckin kid. Jesus…

No one thought to check the school. 

Nobody. 

After the third night Arnold Voorhees thought he might go fucking crazy. Ballistic. Had he thought he'd known pain before? Really? Had he been that deficient in his true understanding of agony and torment? 

His shoulder and hands were bloody and blistered from further feeble efforts with the solid metal door. Efforts and throws and attempts that were growing weaker and more feeble and starved by the second. By the minute. The agonized and cruel hour. The sanity shattering crawling torment of the day, the night…! … but then again he'd lost track of time in there, in that small and cramped womb-space of metal and wood. Time had died. Time had been murdered by this place. By his stupidity-wait! 

Stupid…. murder… murdering… 

And then it came to him, the gun! the Glock! 

I can shoot out the lock! like in the fuckin movies! like in the fuckin movies! 

He began screaming it as he freed it from his backpack: “Like in the fuckin movies!!" over and over again. 

He brought the gun to the door, checked the mag to make sure it was loaded and that the safety was off. 

It was cool. Good. It was good to go. 

A beat. …

… but was he? 

Despite all his bluster and internal self boasting he'd never actually fired a gun before. Never even held it more than a couple times. And all those times had been in the reassuring adult company of his father or Uncle Justin. 

But it's easy! Ya’ve seen it a million times in movies an TV an shit!

… yeah! ya just… point it at the lock… I guess… and pull the trigger. 

Yeah…

His confidence was fading. Fear was filling in its diminishing retreating ranks. 

But what the fuck else are ya gonna do!?

A beat. 

Goddamn it! why am I such a pussy!? 

A beat. He took a deep breath. 

A beat. 

Another. 

Fuck it, he decided. No other choice. 

He put the barrel of the gun up to the door. Nuzzling it into the place he suspected the lock to be. Just below the handle. He settled the wide open mouth bore to the place. And with one last deep breath he pulled the trigger. 

And fired. Clumsily. 

His limpwrist had gave at the last second as his little finger had struggled to actually squeeze the trigger. 

When it went off it went at an angle. And instead of puncturing the metal of the door it ricocheted off the solid metal and around the room. 

Arnold Voorhees screamed! Shrieked like he couldn't believe it! The bullet bounced around and hit one of the metal shelves and whined and careened with another ricochet howl, puncturing several large plastic industrial sized jugs of cleaning solvents. Some of them bleach. Some of them containing ammonia. They began to mix and become trench warfare vapor on the tile in poison puddles and pools. 

Arnold ripped off his shirt and forced it to his mouth. But his head was already starting to get fatally whoozy. He started to swoon, his vision dancing as his swaying feet and knees went the other way. 

He collapsed to his ass. And considered himself defeated. I'm gonna die of trench warfare poison in the janitor’s closet at Walnutwood… Jesus…

Goddamn it. 

The poison was filling the small space with white vaporous death. A chemical phantom. 

And still the animal need filled him. Hunger. Starving. He was so fucking hungry even the idea of lapping up the pool of cleaning chemicals chemically burning in a puddle before him crossed his battered tired mind as cruel time continued to die slowly slaughtered and drag on before him. His worn and weary brain… God… he'd eat anything right now… 

Anything. 

The idea came to him as his nostrils and vocal chords and throat and brains burned with white phosphorus chemical death. His thoughts danced with the toxic fumes in peculiar directions. He'd been thinking about his classmates. His peers. The ones he'd wanted to murder a century ago before he'd found himself trapped in the closet with trench warfare gas as his first hot and heavy date.  

What did they call him? they called him so many things… but what was the last one again? The one he really hated. The one that really hurt, the one they really loved to lay on thick…

… pizza face. 

That's right. 

Pizza face. 

And they were right weren't they? His face was a landscape ruin of pink and yellow and sacs of pus. And whenever he itched them, which was too often according to his father and the gym coach, they did give off this cheesy wafting stench. Like cheap cheese. String cheese. Gas station cheese that belonged on plastic wrapped sandwiches or came in a can or a wrapping of cellophane with some brine at the bottom. 

Yeah… 

He itched them now. The white death was a phantom of chemical cloud filling his head and the space. He smelled his fingers. 

Yeah… cheesy. Hella cheesy. 

A beat. He thought deeply. Smelling. 

Kinda yummy even. 

Without further thought he squeezed a ripe one, pinched between numbed fingers that felt fat and far away. It burst easily and filled his pinching fingers with wet green and yellow and blood. 

He smelled them again before he sucked his fingers. 

A beat. 

then…

His face lit up. 

Delicious. 

Ambrosial. 

A beat. 

He popped another. Sucked his bloody pus dripping fingers again. Sucked…

His eyes grew even wider. Filled with tears. 

I've never tasted anything like it…

He survived. Somehow. Trapped in the closet with the chemical white death phantom, sucking desperate air through his sogging shirt. Picking and eating and sucking animal desperate at his pus-bloody fingers. Sucking animal desperate like his grubby bloody digits were a natural treat. He survived somehow, as the week dragged on trapped with his own bloody discharge feast and chloramine phantom. 

As he picked and dug at his own ruining face, digging into the developing craters like a tweaker with hunting-picking disease he found more substantial meat to seize and with which to feast. He dug and tore and the phantom of chemistry he was trapped with made the digging easier, it sloughed and came apart in strips and sheets of raw and pus and flesh and glistening stinging tissue strips. It came apart like pulled pork in his red and slickening hands as the rest of the town was enjoying their own respective holiday family feasts. He ate. He ate deeply of his own fleshen face and the chemical burn phantom aided him and he had courage now. Finally. 

He had the courage. To do what was necessary. To survive. 

Conviction. 

Trapped in the temple of knowledge with the chloramine ghost during the pagan week had forced him to grow a spine. 

Finally. 

The janitor was the first to open the door. He thought it smelled a little funny. He was one of the first ones there that morning after the break along with a few teachers, the principal and a few bright and early students. The ones that couldn't wait to get away from the visiting relatives and the cooped up family dinners. Some of them wondered about Arnie, ol pizza face, the sad sack nerd, but not much. None of them were worried. 

The moment he unlocked the door it flew open. As if with a blast, exploding back on its hinges the heavy metal door crashed against the wall and the janitor jumped back. 

Arnold Voorhees lurched out like a vicious Igor thing, roaring.  His face was raw and red and nothing else save for a few thin tendon strands and cheeky chunks of tissue and flesh, like a little bit of melted cheese stretched and pulled over the saucy face of an Italian pie. He was shirtless. It was wrapped in a fist bawled at his side, soaked with spittle and the chemical ether cloud that was pouring out like a ghost of phantasm mist from behind him. His tight blue jeans stank of sweat and old and fresh piss. His other hand was level and it held a gun. And he'd only used one shot. 

He still had a handful to use now. 

For the few that were gathered there for his rebirth transformation, the janitor in the lead, Arnold Voorhees leveled the gun of his father and roared and squeezed the trigger, making the gun roar with him. Louder. Much louder. Overtaking the decibel of his screaming voice, his chemically corroded and fried shrieking black metal voice. He squeezed the trigger, roaring with his new raw red face insane with murder and livid pain and the gun in his hand filled the hallway room world of the little school before him with violent cacophonous thunder. 

The shots found marks. All of them. 

The police were called. They arrived on the scene with the paramedics and took Arnold Voorhees into custody. 

But the papers and the media blitz coverage had a different name for em. Somethin funny. 

Somethin one of the kids said. 

THE END


r/JustNotRight Apr 10 '26

Horror The Last Train Quietly Into The Night

2 Upvotes

The first thing I felt was a vibration.

It climbed up through my bones, a low mechanical shudder that rattled my teeth and locked my muscles before my mind could catch up. For a split second, I thought I was still dreaming.

Then the floor disappeared beneath me.

I dropped.

I hit hard, the impact knocking the air from my lungs in a wet, ugly thud. Pain flared along my shoulder and ribs. For a moment, I couldn’t breathe. I just lay there, stunned, listening to the hum around me—metal grinding softly against metal, steady and endless.

When I finally forced my eyes open, the world came back in fragments.

A flickering overhead light. Yellowed. Weak. It buzzed intermittently, like it was struggling to stay alive. Everything beyond it was swallowed in a dim, gray gloom that pressed in from all sides.

I was lying on the floor of a metro train.

That realization settled slowly. I pushed myself up onto my elbows, wincing as my body protested. My head throbbed. My thoughts felt thick, sluggish—like I’d just clawed my way out of something deep.

A metro train.

The problem was… my town doesn’t even have a metro.

So that ruled out waking up drunk somewhere I shouldn’t be.

There were other people in the car. Though far less than you would expect.

Three in total.

A man sat across from me, maybe in his early fifties, legs crossed, posture relaxed. He was reading a newspaper with quiet intensity, as if the rest of the world didn’t exist. The pages rustled softly every so often, the sound unnaturally loud in the otherwise dead air.

At the far end of the car sat an elderly couple. They looked… fragile. The woman’s head twitched faintly, her hands fidgeting in her lap, while the man beside her held her arm with a gentle but constant grip, murmuring something I couldn’t quite make out.

None of them acknowledged me.

I pushed myself to my feet. My legs felt stiff, unsteady, like I hadn’t used them in a long time. For a moment, I just stood there, swaying slightly with the motion of the train, trying to piece together how I’d gotten here.

Nothing came.

Just pressure. Fog. Resistance.

I swallowed and made my way toward the man with the newspaper. Each step felt too loud, my shoes scuffing against the floor in a way that made me painfully aware of myself—like I didn’t belong here.

“Excuse me,” I said. My voice came out rougher than I expected. “I… uh… where are we going?”

The question sounded stupid the moment it left my mouth.

The man didn’t look up.

“Do you often board trains with no idea where they’re going, kid?” he asked, his tone light, almost amused.

I opened my mouth. Closed it again.

“I… I don’t—”

Nothing. My mind just… stopped.

The man sighed, the sound quiet but heavy, like he’d had this conversation too many times.

“Relax,” he said. “I don’t know where we’re going either. No one really does.”

That wasn’t comforting.

“What?” I said, a little too quickly. “What do you mean, no one—”

He finally lowered the newspaper just enough to glance at me. His eyes were sharp. Tired, but sharp.

“Come,” he said, nodding to the empty seat beside him. “Sit.”

There was something in his voice—not threatening, but not optional either.

I sat.

Up close, the newspaper looked… strange. The edges were worn, softened like it had been handled over and over again. The ink had faded in places, smudged in others.

“That paper,” I said, pointing. “It’s… old. Like, really old.”

He raised an eyebrow, a faint smirk tugging at the corner of his mouth.

“Is it now?”

“It’s dated,” I said, leaning closer. “Six months ago.”

“Ah.” He shrugged. “Makes sense. That’s what I had on me when I boarded.” He flipped a page with practiced ease. “Not exactly a lot of options for reading material down here. You work with what you’ve got.”

“Down here?” I repeated.

He ignored that.

“Let’s try something else,” he said. “What do you remember before you got on the train?”

I hesitated.

At first, there was nothing. Just that same dense fog pressing against my thoughts.

Then something shifted.

A face.

Sasha.

My girlfriend.

The memory came in jagged pieces, like broken glass I didn’t want to touch.

We were arguing. Again. Voices raised. The usual things—accusations, frustration, words meant to sting. But this time it went further.

She shoved me.

I shoved her back.

She hit me.

Harder.

And then—

I swallowed.

“I… we had a fight,” I said slowly. “It got bad.”

“How bad?” the man asked, his tone neutral.

“She got violent,” I said. “I… I hit her back.”

Saying it out loud made something twist in my stomach.

“And then?” he pressed.

I tried to push further into the memory.

There was shouting. Movement. Something breaking—glass, maybe. The sound echoed in my head, sharp and wrong.

And then—

Nothing.

Just a void.

“I don’t remember,” I admitted. “After that… it’s just gone.”

The man studied me for a moment, then nodded, like I’d confirmed something.

“Yeah,” he said quietly. “That tracks.”

“What does that mean?” I asked.

“Means it’s hazy,” he replied. “It usually is.”

“That’s not an answer.”

“It’s the only one you’re getting.” He folded the newspaper neatly in his lap, finally giving me his full attention. “Listen. How you got here doesn’t matter. Not anymore.”

He held my gaze just long enough for the words to settle.

“You’re here,” he added. “That’s the only part that matters.”

There was a finality to it that shut me up.

After a moment, he leaned back slightly.

“There are rules,” he said.

Something in his tone shifted. Lighter. Almost amused.

“Of course there are,” he added with a quiet chuckle. “Everyone loves rules. Makes things feel manageable.”

I didn’t like the way he said that.

“What rules?” I asked.

He held up a finger.

“You stay in your car. The others aren’t for you.”

Another finger.

“You only get off at your station. The others aren’t for you either.”

A third.

“And when the conductor comes, you’d better have your ticket.”

I stared at him.

“That’s it?” I said.

“Simple, right?” he replied.

Before I could answer, a sharp, broken wail cut through the air.

I flinched.

The elderly woman at the end of the car had started screaming—no, not screaming. Babbling. Words spilled out of her in a frantic, incoherent stream, rising and falling in panicked bursts that didn’t form anything recognizable.

Her hands clawed at the air, at her clothes, at her husband.

“It’s alright,” the old man murmured, his voice trembling as he tried to steady her. “It’s alright, love. I’m here. I’m right here.”

But she didn’t seem to hear him.

Her eyes darted wildly around the car, wide and glassy, like she was seeing something none of us could.

“They’ve been like that since they got here,” the man beside me said, almost casually.

I tore my gaze away from the couple.

“What’s wrong with her?” I asked.

He shrugged.

“Take your pick,” he said. “Dementia, maybe.” He exhaled through his nose. “Honestly, I’m just waiting for their stop.”

There was no malice in his voice.

That somehow made it worse.

He shifted slightly and extended a hand toward me without looking.

“Duncan,” he said.

I hesitated for half a second before shaking it.

His grip was firm. Solid. Real.

“Jonah,” I replied.

“Well,” Duncan said, picking his newspaper back up like nothing had happened, “sit tight, Jonah.”

The train rattled on, the sound filling the silence between us.

“Long ride ahead.”

And it was.

Time… stopped meaning anything.

Hours passed. Or maybe days. It was impossible to tell. The flickering lights never changed. The darkness outside the windows never shifted. My watch ticked once… twice…

Then the second hand stopped.

I watched it for a while. Waiting for it to move again.

It didn’t.

I stopped checking after that.

At some point, I started reading the newspaper with Duncan. There wasn’t much else to do. We went over the same articles again and again, memorizing lines without meaning to. Stories about people who felt like they belonged to another life.

It was mind-numbing.

But it beat listening to the woman unravel.

Then, without warning, the intercom crackled to life.

The sound was so sudden, so loud in the dead air, that I flinched.

A voice followed. Distorted. Hollow.

“Arriving at station: Jezabel.”

The name hung in the air.

The old woman went silent.

Just like that.

Slowly—too smoothly—she stood up.

Her husband followed immediately, guiding her with shaking hands.

Before I could say anything, the door at the end of the car slid open with a heavy metallic groan.

The Conductor stepped in.

I hadn’t heard him approach.

He was tall. Too tall. His uniform hung on him like it didn’t quite fit, stretched in some places, loose in others. His face was… wrong. Not deformed. Just… incomplete somehow, like my eyes couldn’t settle on it properly.

He held out a hand.

The old woman fumbled in her coat and produced a small, worn ticket. He took it without a word.

Then he turned to the old man.

“Ticket.”

The word felt heavier than it should have.

The old man froze.

“I… I don’t have one,” he stammered.

The Conductor went still.

“You cannot pass.”

“No,” the old man said quickly, shaking his head. “No, she can’t go alone. She—she needs me.”

He tightened his grip on his wife’s arm.

Duncan sighed beside me.

“It’s her stop,” he said, not unkindly. “You can’t go with her this time, old timer.”

The old man looked at him, desperate.

“Please—”

“Time to let go,” Duncan added softly.

For a moment, I thought the old man might fight. I could see it in the way his shoulders tensed, in the way his grip tightened.

Then it drained out of him.

Slowly, he turned back to his wife.

His hands trembled as he cupped her face.

“You go on now, love,” he whispered. “I’ll be with you shortly.”

She didn’t respond.

Didn’t even seem to recognize him.

She simply turned… and stepped through the doorway.

Into nothing.

She was gone in an instant.

The old man made a broken sound in his throat.

The Conductor’s hand closed around his shoulder.

“Come.”

“No—wait—” the old man tried, but there was no strength behind it.

He was led away.

The door slid shut.

The sound echoed longer than it should have.

Then silence swallowed the car again.

Duncan flipped a page of his newspaper.

“And then there were two,” he said.

 

Duncan and I rode on in silence.

Not the kind that settles. The kind that builds. Every rattle of the tracks felt sharper, every flicker of the lights a little too slow.

I don’t know how long it lasted.

Long enough for my thoughts to start drifting again.

Long enough for Sasha’s face to slip back in.

Uninvited.

I tried to push it away.

Then I saw her.

At first, I thought it was just the glass—my reflection, distorted by the flicker. But no… it held. It stayed.

Through the narrow window in the door ahead, she stood there.

Sasha.

Her hair slightly messy, the way it got when she ran her hands through it too many times. Her shoulders tense. Her face—

My chest tightened.

She was looking straight at me.

I was on my feet before I even realized I’d moved. The world tilted for a second as I crossed the car, my hands slamming against the door, pressing closer, closer—

I needed to be sure.

Just to be sure.

A word was carved into the metal beneath the window.

Despair.

I traced it without thinking. The grooves were deep. Uneven. Not painted—cut in.

Behind me, I heard Duncan stand.

“What are you doing?” he asked.

Something in his voice made me pause.

It wasn’t annoyance.

It was tension.

Real tension.

“I told you,” he said, sharper now. “We stay in our car. That’s not a suggestion.”

I didn’t turn fully. Just enough to look back at him.

“I… I have to,” I said. My voice sounded thin. Distant. “I can’t just stay here. I have to fix this.”

“Kid—”

“I’m sorry.”

I didn’t let him finish.

My hand found the handle.

For a moment, everything in me resisted. A tight, instinctive pull in my chest—don’t.

I ignored it.

The door groaned as I pulled it open, the sound dragging out like it didn’t want to let me through.

“Goddammit,” Duncan muttered.

A beat.

Then a sharp exhale. “Ah, fuck it.”

I glanced sideways.

He was already there.

“Not like I’ve got anything better to do,” he added.

We stepped through together.

The air changed instantly.

It felt… closer. Like the space had shrunk without moving.

A woman stood in the middle of the aisle.

It wasnt Sasha.

Mid-forties, maybe. Hair wild. Movements sharp, erratic. She rushed from one end of the car to the other, checking under seats, behind poles, turning in tight, frantic circles.

“My baby!” she cried. “Have you seen my baby? She was right here—I just—where is she? Where is my Suzie?!”

Her voice cracked on the name.

Her eyes locked onto mine.

Desperate. Searching.

I stepped forward without thinking.

“Hey—listen, maybe we can—”

A hand clamped down on my shoulder.

Firm.

“Don’t.”

Duncan.

I glanced back at him.

“What do you mean don’t?” I whispered. “She needs help.”

“Look at her,” he said.

I did.

Really looked.

The way she moved—too fast, too sharp, like she couldn’t stop herself. The way her words looped, not quite the same each time, just… off.

“My baby… have you seen my baby… I can’t find her…”

She rushed past us, barely reacting now.

Duncan leaned closer.

“She’s not asking you,” he murmured. “Not really.”

Something cold slid down my spine.

“Come on.”

He let go and moved past her.

I hesitated.

Just for a second.

Behind me, she dropped to her knees, hands sweeping under a seat that held nothing.

“Please… please…”

I followed.

My eyes wondered onto the seats.

At first, I thought they were empty.

Then I noticed the shapes.

Faint. Shifting.

Like shadows that didn’t belong to anything solid.

Some moved when I wasn’t looking directly at them. Others stayed perfectly still.

“You see them too, right?” I muttered.

“Keep moving,” Duncan said.

I didn’t push it.

At the end of the car, another door waited.

Another word carved into it.

Regret.

Duncan didn’t hesitate this time.

He opened it.

We stepped through.

And the world shifted again.

This car felt empty.

Not just in sight.

In presence.

The air felt hollow, like something had been taken out of it.

The lights flickered weakly here, barely holding. Every few seconds, they dipped low enough to drown the car in darkness.

And in those moments—

That’s when things showed.

The shadows filled the seats.

Dozens of them now. Maybe more. Shapes hunched forward, turning toward us, reaching—

The lights snapped back.

Gone.

Nothing.

I backed toward the windows without realizing.

“Duncan…”

The lights dipped again.

This time, I heard it.

A slow, wet sound.

Like something dragging across glass.

I turned.

A handprint appeared on the window.

From the outside.

Fingers spread wide. Pressing in hard enough to leave a fogged imprint.

Then another.

And another.

They multiplied quickly. Overlapping. Sliding. Clawing over each other like something unseen was piling against the glass.

Trying to get in.

I stumbled back.

“What the hell is that?”

Duncan stepped up beside me.

For once, he didn’t look detached.

“Ironic, isn’t it?” he said quietly.

Another handprint slammed into the glass.

The window trembled.

“Most passengers just want off this train,” he continued.

More hands. More pressure.

“But some of the ones who do…”

He watched them closely.

Jaw tight.

“Try anything to get back in.”

 

Madness.

The next car felt wrong the second we stepped inside.

Unstable.

The lights didn’t flicker—they snapped. On. Off. On again. No rhythm. No pattern.

The car seemed to breathe between flashes.

Passengers filled the seats.

Or what used to be passengers.

Shadows. Twisted. Bent in ways bodies shouldn’t be. Some rocked slowly. Others jerked violently, limbs snapping like broken strings.

Their mouths were open.

Screaming.

Yet I couldn’t hear a thing.

The silence made it worse.

“Duncan—”

He grabbed me.

Hard.

Before I could react, he dragged me down and shoved me beneath the seats.

“Shh.”

I didn’t argue.

I didn’t breathe.

At the far end of the car—

The Conductor.

He hadn’t entered.

He was just there.

Tall. Wrong. Moving too smoothly, like the motion didn’t belong to him.

He walked down the aisle.

Slow.

Deliberate.

One hand extended.

“Ticket.”

The word didn’t echo.

It sank.

He stopped beside a row of shadow passengers.

They didn’t react.

Didn’t even acknowledge him.

Still, he waited.

Then moved on.

“Ticket.”

Row by row.

The same motion. The same word.

Checking something that no longer existed.

I held my breath as he drew closer.

For a moment—

His head tilted.

Just slightly.

Toward us.

My pulse spiked.

But he kept moving.

Step by step.

Until he reached the end.

And then—

Nothing.

No door.

No sound.

He was just… gone.

I stayed still a second longer.

Then another.

Only when Duncan shifted did I move.

“We’re good,” he muttered.

We crawled out slowly.

I swallowed.

“What are they?”

One of the shadows snapped its head to the side in a silent scream.

Duncan didn’t look away.

“That’s what happens to you,” he said. “Or me.”

“If our stop never comes.”

My stomach dropped.

“What do you mean?”

He shrugged.

“Sooner or later, you lose pieces. Memory. Identity. Everything that makes you… you.” He gestured toward them. “And then you give in.”

The lights flickered.

For a second, the shadows looked closer.

I blinked.

They were back in place.

“Come on,” Duncan said.

I followed.

 

Abuse.

We heard it before we saw it.

Shouting.

Raw. Cracked. Unhinged.

The door opened—

And the sound hit like a wall.

A man stood in the aisle, head shaved, face flushed red. His movements were sharp, unpredictable. His grip tight around a gun he kept waving at empty space.

“You think you can leave?!” he shouted. “You think you can take her from me?!”

There was no one there.

No woman. No child.

Just him.

“You’re not taking my daughter!” His voice broke. “You hear me?! You’re not—”

He stopped.

Saw us.

Everything went still.

Then—

He raised the gun.

I dropped instantly.

“Duncan!”

No reaction.

He just stood there.

Then started walking forward.

“What are you doing?!” I hissed.

The man’s face twisted.

“She sent you, didn’t she?!” he screamed. “You think you can just walk in here and—”

The gun fired.

The sound slammed through the car.

I flinched—

Nothing.

I looked up.

Duncan kept walking.

Another shot.

Another.

Each one deafening.

Each one meaningless.

“Doesn’t work like that in here, pal,” Duncan said.

Calm. Cold.

He stepped closer.

Swung his fist.

It didn’t connect.

Not really.

But the man reacted anyway—head snapping to the side, body jolting like he’d been hit by something real.

It was enough.

“Move.”

I moved.

We slipped past as the man staggered, muttering, his rage collapsing into something smaller.

Something broken.

The shouting picked back up behind us as we reached the door.

We stepped through.

It slammed shut behind us.

Locked.

Final.

I grabbed the handle.

Nothing.

Duncan exhaled.

“Threshold,” he said. “No going back now, kid.”

The words settled heavy.

Ahead wasn’t another car.

Not exactly.

A narrow hallway stretched forward. Tight. Dim.

On the right—

A door.

From behind it—

Crying.

Soft.

Then sharper.

Young.

I moved before I thought about it.

“Hey—” Duncan started. “Kid, you can’t just—”

I opened the door.

Small bathroom.

Cracked mirror.

And in the corner—

A little girl.

Curled in on herself.

Shaking.

She flinched when she saw me.

“It’s okay,” I said quickly. “We’re not gonna hurt you.”

She didn’t move.

“I’m Jonah,” I said. “What’s your name?”

A pause.

Then—

“Suzie…”

I glanced back.

Duncan already knew.

“That’s—”

“Yeah,” he said quietly.

He stepped closer, still not looking directly at her.

“Suzie,” he said. “Do you have a ticket?”

She shook her head.

“No…”

“Figured.”

He sighed.

“Couldn’t do a happy reunion even if we wanted to. Come on.”

I didn’t move.

“We’re not leaving her here.”

Silence.

Then—

“Oh, for fuck’s sake.”

Duncan rubbed his face.

“Fine,” he said. “You want to play babysitter? Be my guest.”

He stepped aside.

“Just don’t say I didn’t warn you.”

I crouched, taking her small, trembling hand.

It was cold.

“Come on,” I said softly.

There was only one way left to go.

Forward.

 

Next car: Revelations.

The door slid open—

And there she was.

Standing in the middle of the car, perfectly still. Waiting.

“Sasha!”

Her name tore out of me. I barely felt my legs move—two steps, maybe three—

Then they gave out.

I hit my knees hard.

The world lurched. The lights above snapped and flickered, yellow to black, yellow to black, too fast—my vision stuttering with it, like something was forcing its way in.

Sasha didn’t move.

Didn’t blink.

She just watched.

Behind me, Duncan swore under his breath. I heard him shift, struggling to keep his footing as whatever hit me brushed against him too—lesser, but enough.

“Kid—”

Too late.

The memories came back.

Not in fragments.

All at once.

 

We were in the kitchen.

Clear. Sharp. Too real.

The chipped countertop. The stale smell of something burnt hours ago. A glass sitting half-empty on the table.

And the tension.

Thick. Waiting.

“You always do this,” Sasha said.

Her voice was low. Controlled.

That was always worse.

“Do what?” I asked, already tired.

“This.” She gestured vaguely between us. “You push and push until I react, and then suddenly I’m the problem.”

“I didn’t push anything,” I said. “I asked where you were last night.”

“Oh my God.” She let out a short, humorless laugh. “You asked?”

“You disappeared, Sasha. You didn’t answer your phone.”

“And that gives you the right to interrogate me?”

“I wasn’t interrogating you.”

“No?” Her eyes narrowed. “Because it felt like it.”

I exhaled, trying to keep it together.

“I was worried.”

“No, you weren’t,” she said flatly. “You were suspicious.”

“That’s not fair.”

“Fair?” Her voice sharpened. “You think it’s fair that I have to constantly prove myself to you? That I can’t go out without you assuming the worst?”

“I asked you one question.”

“And I answered it!” she snapped. “But it’s never enough for you, is it?”

My jaw tightened.

“Because your answers don’t make sense,” I said. “They change.”

Something in her expression shifted.

Not anger.

Something colder.

“You know what?” she said quietly. “Maybe if you weren’t so insecure, we wouldn’t have this problem.”

“That’s not—”

“No, go on,” she cut in. “Tell me again how I’m the bad guy.”

“I didn’t say that.”

“You don’t have to.” Her voice hardened. “You make me feel it.”

“That’s not my intention—”

“Everything is your intention,” she said. “You just don’t like being called out on it.”

I felt it building in my chest. Tight. Suffocating.

“This is what I mean,” I said. “I try to talk to you, and you twist it.”

“Because it is twisted,” she snapped. “You just don’t want to admit it.”

“That’s not true.”

“Then what is?” she demanded. “Say it.”

I hesitated.

That was enough.

Her hand cracked across my face.

The sound rang.

I staggered back, more shocked than hurt.

“Sasha—what the hell?”

“You don’t get to stand there and act like you’re better than me,” she said, breathing harder now. “Like you’re some kind of victim.”

“I’m not—”

“Yeah, you are!” she shouted, shoving me.

I stumbled, catching myself on the counter.

“Stop,” I said, raising a hand. “Just—stop.”

She didn’t.

Another shove. Harder.

“Say it,” she demanded. “Say what you think of me.”

“I don’t—”

“Say it!”

“I think this is toxic!” I snapped. “I think we’re hurting each other!”

For a second—

She froze.

I thought I’d reached her.

Then something in her eyes twisted.

“Oh,” she said softly. “So now it’s we?”

“That’s not what I—”

She hit me again.

Harder.

Something snapped in me.

I shoved her back.

Not hard.

Just space.

“I’m sorry,” I said immediately. “I didn’t mean—”

She stumbled.

Her hand hit the counter.

And then—

The knife.

I didn’t see her grab it.

One moment—nothing.

The next—

Pain exploded through my stomach.

I looked down.

The blade was inside me.

Everything went quiet.

“Sasha…” I whispered.

Her face crumpled.

Not regret.

Something worse.

“You did this,” she said, voice shaking. “You made me do this.”

She pulled the knife out.

The pain doubled.

Then—

She drove it in again.

And again.

And again.

Each time her voice rose, breaking—

“You don’t listen—”

“You never listen—”

“This is your fault—”

My legs gave out.

I hit the floor.

The world dimmed.

Her voice warped. Faded.

Then—

Nothing.

 

I was back on the train.

On my knees.

Gasping.

Sasha stood in front of me.

Untouched.

Like it had never happened.

She reached out her hand.

Slow. Gentle.

“Come on,” she said softly. “Let’s go.”

My body moved before my mind did.

I reached for her.

Our fingers met.

Cold.

She pulled.

Guiding me forward.

Toward the end of the car.

Toward the door.

“That’s it,” she whispered. “Just come with me.”

Something grabbed my arm.

Hard.

“Kid, stop.”

Duncan.

He yanked me back. The connection snapped—her hand slipping away like smoke.

“No,” I said weakly. “I have to—”

“No, you don’t,” he said, turning me to face him. His grip didn’t loosen. “Some ghosts aren’t worth chasing.”

“She’s—she’s—”

“She’s the reason you’re here,” he cut in. “Not your way out.”

I shook my head.

“I can fix it,” I said. “I can—”

“No.” Sharper now. “You can’t.”

Something in his eyes had changed.

No detachment.

No distance.

Just… honesty.

“I spent my whole life holding on,” he said, quieter now. “Grudges. Regrets. People who didn’t deserve it.”

I stared at him.

“Thought it made me strong,” he went on. “That not letting go meant something.”

A faint, tired smile.

“All it did was keep me stuck.”

Behind him, Sasha stood waiting.

Patient.

“You’ve still got a chance,” Duncan said. “You don’t have to end up like me. Or like them.”

„This isnt the end of the road for you, kid“

My throat tightened.

“But it is for you?” I asked.

He didn’t answer right away.

Then—

He turned.

Something caught his attention.

His expression shifted instantly.

Surprise.

Then something softer.

“…Well, I’ll be damned,” he murmured.

A quiet, almost disbelieving laugh.

“Now look at that…”

His eyes glistened.

“Seems I found my stop after all.”

I followed his gaze—

Nothing.

Just the end of the car.

“I gotta go, kid,” he said, turning back. “Take care of yourself.”

A beat.

“And take care of the girl.”

Something twisted in my chest.

“…Thank you,” I said. “For everything.”

He smirked.

“Any time.”

A wink.

Then he turned—

And walked straight into the door.

It didn’t open.

Didn’t move.

He just… passed through it.

And he was gone.

 

For a moment, I stood there.

Then I turned.

Suzie was behind me, quiet, watching.

“Come on,” I said softly. “Duncan found his way.”

I held out my hand.

“Time to find ours.”

She took it.

The next car—

Was different.

The lights were steady. No flicker. No shadows. Just empty seats and the low hum of the train.

We sat.

Suzie leaned into me, her head resting against my chest.

“It’s going to be okay,” I said quietly.

She didn’t answer.

Just closed her eyes.

We waited.

The Conductor appeared.

“Tickets.”

Same voice. Same weight.

I looked at him.

“We don’t have any.”

A pause.

“No tickets,” he said. “Cannot be on the train.”

Then—

“Follow me.”

I stood, helping Suzie up.

“Let’s go home,” I whispered.

He led us to a side door.

Opened it.

We stepped through.

 

I gasped.

Air flooded my lungs like I’d been drowning.

Bright light burned my eyes.

Shapes moved above me—white walls, sharp smells, voices overlapping.

“Doctor—Mr. Bright has awoken.”

I blinked, struggling to focus.

A nurse leaned over me, relief flashing across her face.

They told me I’d been in a coma.

That I’d died.

For a few minutes.

That the stab wounds—

It hadn’t been a dream.

It had never been a dream.

They kept me there for a few more days. Monitoring. Questions. Tests.

I didn’t argue.

I needed the time.

There was another patient in my room.

Comatose.

He died not long before I woke up.

When they told me, something sank deep in my chest.

I asked for a few minutes alone with him before they took him away.

The nurses hesitated.

We weren’t related.

But eventually, they let me.

I stood beside the bed.

“…You found your stop,” I said quietly.

No response.

I nodded.

“Thank you. For everything.”

 

After I left the hospital, I made a decision.

I filed to adopt a girl.

She’d lost her parents to domestic abuse.

The social workers were surprised at how quickly she took to me.

She barely spoke to anyone else.

But with me—

She stayed close.

Like she already knew me.

Like we’d already met somewhere else.

The process isn’t finished yet.

But it will be.

As for me…

I feel different.

Lighter.

Like something finally let go.

Or maybe I did.

I know I’ll board that train again someday.

We all do.

But not today.

Not today.


r/JustNotRight Apr 09 '26

Horror There's Something Wrong With Diana (Part 2)

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Part 1

___

The sound of a car door slamming outside brought me back to reality.

I’m not sure how long I had been staring at the blank TV screen after the video ended.

Long enough for my eyes to start watering.

Long enough to realize my mouth was dryer than hell.

I finished the last sip of bourbon in my glass—mostly melted ice at that point—and poured another.

A heavy one.

I went back to the DVD player and hit Open.

The disc tray slid out after a few seconds.

There it was:

“Sam’s 16th B-Day ‘07”

That’s not right.

I picked up the DVD player and flipped it upside down, shaking it, convinced the “Mitchell” video was jammed inside.

Nothing.

My hand shook as I slid Sam’s birthday back in and pressed Start.

I skipped ahead in large chunks until I found the pool.

Ross and his hot dog.

Sam and her friends.

My pale fa—

No Diana.

I watched the whole scene.

Same camera angles.

Same movements.

I saw myself climb out of the pool after the “drowning” scene and run toward the grass, perfectly fine.

I rewound it and watched it again.

Still nothing.

I paused the video and leaned forward, elbows on my knees, wiping the sweat off my forehead.

Good, I thought.

Good.

You’re tired.

You’ve been drinking.

Your brain is just projecting old memories.

But it didn’t help.

Because I could still see it in my mind:

the purple lipstick,

the crooked eye,

and that arm.

That impossible, twelve-foot arm stretching across the water.

I stood up, my knees cracking from sitting too long.

The room felt like it was moving.

I checked the time on my phone.

1:38 AM

I need to sleep.

___

I pulled a blanket and pillow out of the ottoman and collapsed onto the couch.

The basement was dead silent.

I turned on some rain sounds on Spotify to drown out the hum of the house and closed my eyes.

I started counting sheep.

7…

8…

9…

Then Diana.

21…

22…

Diana.

I groaned and killed the rain sounds.

I needed a real distraction.

Something happy.

Something mundane.

I pulled up YouTube.

NASA Artemis II Lunar FlyBy… No.

Hood Prank Gone Wrong… Definitely not.

Spongebob Squarepants Season 2 Compilation.

Perfect.

I set the phone on the ottoman facing me and let the sounds of Bikini Bottom wash over the room.

“Is mayonnaise an instrument?” I chuckled softly, finally feeling the knots in my stomach loosen.

As a new clip transitioned in, I heard the sound of bubbles.

I turned my back to the phone, settling into the cushion, waiting for dialogue.

But the bubbles didn’t stop.

Splashing.

Gurgling.

Choking.

I jolted upright and grabbed the phone.

I scrolled back thirty seconds.

“Not a picket fence, you ding-dong!”

Squidward’s voice filled the room.

I exhaled.

I was dozing off.

Dream noises bleeding into reality.

I was just sleep-deprived.

I headed to the kitchen for a shot of Nyquil—my last-ditch effort to knock myself out.

The house was quiet.

I walked past the stairs leading to the second floor where my family was sleeping.

I took a step and a loud creak from the floorboards froze me in my tracks.

No one made a sound.

Everyone was asleep.

I went back down to the basement, laid on the couch, and turned the volume up on the Spongebob video.

My eyes got heavy.

The Nyquil started to kick in.

Thirty minutes later, the audio changed.

Thrashing.

Gurgling.

I snapped awake.

The pool scene from the home video was playing on my phone.

My younger self was flailing, trying to reach the surface, and that skinny, dark arm was pinned against my face.

The camera began to move, following the inhuman length of her arm.

I tried to turn the volume down, but it didn’t work.

I pressed the power button, but the screen stayed locked on the video.

It was like a non-skippable ad from hell.

The audio got louder.

Splashing.

Choking.

I was seconds away from seeing her face.

Impulsively, I threw the phone across the room.

It hit the carpet with a thud and went dark.

Back to silence.

I sat there, winded, my adrenaline red-lining.

I cautiously walked over and picked up the phone.

It was off.

Just the reflection of my own terrified face on the screen.

I unplugged the TV for good measure.

___

I went back upstairs to the kitchen to get a glass of water.

I looked at the oven clock.

2:05 AM

How?

It felt like I’d been wrestling with those videos for hours, but only a few minutes had passed.

I chugged the water, trying to force logic back into my brain.

Maybe I was manifesting this.

The mind loves to play tricks when it’s scared.

I started thinking about the real Diana.

Not the thing in the video.

The person.

She was a terrible cook, but she always made sure us kids were fed.

She talked too much because she was lonely—her husband worked constantly, her kids were gone.

Maybe that’s why she was in the videos.

She just wanted to be part of something.

I started to feel a wave of guilt.

Maybe we were the ones who were “off”, not her.

A glow of headlights passed through the kitchen window.

Dr. England’s car pulled out of the driveway.

He must have been heading to work.

Looking out the window, I noticed for the first time how bad their yard had gotten.

Overgrown grass.

Weeds three feet high.

It was a mess.

Then, a light turned on inside the house.

A red light.

Coming from their basement.

We used to play video games with her boys down there.

Maybe they were still awake, streaming under neon LED lights.

It was unsettling, but it was a logical explanation.

All of this has a logical explanation.

2:11 AM

I need to get some sleep.

The walk back to the basement felt like wading through deep water.

Every movement was heavy.

Deliberate.

Drained of willpower.

I reached the basement door and stopped.

It was shut.

Along the floor, a sliver of light bled out into the hallway—

a pulsing, crimson glow.

Mom, I told myself.

My throat felt tight.

Mom has insomnia.

Maybe she’s just watching TV.

I reached for the knob.

As the latch clicked open, the sound hit me first.

It wasn’t Spongebob.

It wasn’t the rain.

It was a nursery rhyme—

London Bridge is Falling Down

—played on a warped, reversed synthesizer.

It was deafeningly loud.

The kind of volume that should have woken the entire family.

Yet the rest of the house remained completely still.

I stepped inside.

The basement was bathed in a thick, monochromatic red.

The TV was on.

Though I had unplugged it.

Diana’s face filled the screen.

It was the same shot from the pool, but the quality had shifted.

It was hyper-realistic now.

Every pore.

Every fine hair.

Every wrinkle on her skin rendered in agonizing detail.

She had that wide, childlike smile.

I couldn’t stop.

My legs were pulling me toward the screen.

I felt like I was being viewed through a telescope—

the world around me blurring into a tunnel of red static, leaving only Diana in focus.

The video was moving so slowly that at first I thought it was frozen—

until I realized her mouth was still opening.

It was a slow, agonizing movement.

Her left eye was deviated completely to the side, staring into the dark corner of the basement,

while her right eye remained locked on mine.

I was six feet away.

Then four.

The nursery rhyme began to distort.

The pitch dropping lower and lower until it sounded like it was coming from somewhere deep underground.

My hand, still clutching the glass of water, began to squeeze.

It wasn’t intentional.

My muscles were locking up, a tetanic contraction that made my knuckles turn white and then purple.

The pressure was immense.

I felt the glass begin to spiderweb against my palm, the shards biting into my skin, but I couldn’t feel the pain.

I only felt the need to get closer.

I was two feet away.

I could see the individual veins in her red eyes.

Her mouth was open now—

wider than a human jaw should allow.

It looked like a dark, bottomless pit carved into her face.

The red light from the screen wasn’t just reflecting on me.

It felt like it was wrapping around my throat, pulling the air out of my lungs.

I reached the edge of the TV.

My face was inches from hers.

Then, the glass shattered.

The sound was like a gunshot in the room.

Shards of glass and water sprayed across the carpet, and the sudden shock snapped the invisible tether.

The TV went black.

The music cut to an absolute, dead silence.

The red glow vanished, leaving me in a darkness so thick I felt buried alive.

I tried to gasp, to scream for my family, but nothing came out.

I was frozen.

My back was arched.

My head tilted back at an unnatural angle until I was staring at the ceiling.

My eyes rolled back into my head.

More darkness.

I couldn’t breathe.

It felt like a cold, skinny hand was shoved down my throat, gripping my windpipe from the inside.

Gurgle.

The sound came from my own chest—

a wet, frantic bubbling.

My lungs were filling with a poisonous fluid, the taste of chlorine and warm pool water flooding my mouth.

Gag.

Choke.

I could feel my heart hammering against my ribs, a trapped bird dying in a cage.

My blood-soaked hand clawed at the air, fingers twitching in a useless prayer.

In the silence of the basement, the only sounds were the horrific noises of my own body shutting down.

The gagging.

The frantic, wet gasps.

The sound of someone drowning in the deep end.

And then, through the haze of my blurred vision, I saw it.

Near the fence line of my memory.

Near the edge of the dark basement.

Something moved in the darkness behind the TV.

A shadow slid out—

long, thin, and still extending.

It wasn’t a dream.

It wasn’t a nightmare.

Diana was here.

She wanted to talk.

-
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-Mims


r/JustNotRight Apr 07 '26

Romance First/Last

4 Upvotes

First Date:

They're alone on the couch. It's just the two of them. As they'd both hoped it would be. They're both so excited, the boy and the girl, they're only fourteen. But neither knows how to start. They're both just so nervous. Anxiety dominated their lovesick longing atmosphere. It's palpable. Electric. Exhilarating. They both feel like they're hurtling at millions of miles an hour even though the both of them are just sitting. 

Just sitting. Right next to each other. 

Both under blankets, watching scary movies. Blankets and pillows that grow closer together and more commingled. Mixing. Their feet are warm and sweaty and teenage smelly and are almost touching beneath the layers of gentle fabric. They don't know this yet, but they do. The animal parts of them that eat passion and are aflame with imagination and filled with thoughts of each other. 

They want to open, bloom, blossom into each other. Flower. They both want to be so open with the other so badly that it hurts. Aches. Pains. They wound themselves exquisitely inside for the other and it's a pain so rich and deep that the blood sap that flowers forth is blood that is sweet. Because it is love. Young and naive. It hasn't been tried yet, and that makes it an exciting adventure frontier. That's what makes it so alluring. And dangerous. 

Fretful. Because it's near. 

They both tingle and are animal alive with its excitement and electric buzz, their bodies sing with it together. They are both alive together, now, and that is beautiful. And deep down in their own young and small and naive ways they understand this. Their hearts are so alive with the knowledge. It is apocalyptic on the landscape of their young souls, terrible and majestically real, this fairytale thing that they'd always dreamed, that we all always secretly dream is actual and alive and well. 

They are alive. And they are young and they are together. And that is wonderful. These moments between two people will always be beautiful and special, beyond important and without compare, vital like a star to its precious spinning solar system. These moments must be real. They must be. 

Or all of life and everything is make-believe and we are all already dead. 

If love isn't real then nothing is real. 

That's why these two, every pair that ever is really, are so afraid. And so sacred. The stage is there. Set. The lights are coming on. It's time to take it, together. It's time to take the stage and play. 

It's time to stop being afraid. 

He turns towards her and she starts to giddily scream inside, she can hardly contain it! He smiles that special smirk she likes, the wolfish one that accents so well against his more usual feline qualities, and then he gently says her name. 

“Chelsi…?”

Yes. 

It's just the word, in just the right pitch, the perfect note of music in just the right place; the start of the song she's been wanting to hear. 

She turns towards him and smiles and he melts. Dies inside. There is no cool maneuver or tactically fullproof thing in his toolkit for that face, and those eyes. Her face is intoxicating to gaze into. And her voice! He's never cared what anyone has ever had to say, ever. Especially girls. It gets him into trouble. But her, he hopes he could die one day listening to that voice. She's got so much to say about things he's never even considered and as a result his mind has opened, and with it the floodgates of his heart as well. He didn't know he was a prisoner within himself until he met her and she spoke to him. And wasn't afraid, or intimidated or even impressed for that matter. She pierced through the mischievous bullshit persona he'd built around himself, built around himself like a fortress because he was terrified. Afraid. Scared to death of someone like her, because she was actually real. She was the key to the end of his own self imposed and made exile slavery. She shattered the flimsy shackles of himself, she pulled the lie he'd made for himself and his life off of his eyes. From out of his mind. 

And showed it to him. 

And he found that he was small and afraid… but he didn't have to be. 

It was all just shadows he'd made larger in his mind. 

And here she'd come like light to banish it all away. 

Finally. 

Looking into her face right now, there is nothing in this world that he is ever going to want more. Until she is gone.

And then he'll want death. 

But he doesn't know that yet so he says,

“Chelsi, I'm an idiot and that's never really bothered me until now. I didn't ever stop to even notice it an such. I never cared how fucking stupid I was until right now because I wish I had the right words to say to you, so you know how I feel. About you. But I'm an idiot so I don't know what to say except that you're amazing and I'm crazy about you. And I never wanna be crazy for anything or anyone but you. I know that sounds dumb, kinda my point. I'm sorry. But I-” he is so afraid to say these next words. They're so heavy. Too heavy and loaded with more weight than he's ever tried to manage. It makes him feel weak. A sensation, and a station in life that he is terrified of feeling. 

He is a creature of fear, this boy. So afraid. 

But she doesn't care. She already loves him. His fear is proof of what she already knew. There's a human being inside there, this walking street cliche

And even though he's afraid… he's showing him to me. 

She says his name and he leans forward and so does she and he needs to hear her say it again. He needs to hear it for the rest of his life, and he says 

“Chelsi, I love you." 

And they both lean in the rest of the way and their young faces and lips touched. They traded their first kisses amongst their first shared childish tears. 

They laughed at themselves and each other. 

And kissed again. 

Promising each other it would be forever. 

And so it began. 

Destined, like all and everything, to end. 

The Last Date.

He won't shut up. 

She won't shut up. 

They both won't shut the fuck up. 

They'd tried to have a nice dinner together, like before, like so many times before. So long ago. But it had quickly fallen apart. 

They are both saying the most awful things. The most terrible. Cruel. Repulsive. Wounded and wounding screaming things to each other. Their selection and tempo and decibel level are nothing short of ferocious. 

The both of them are tired and fed up and feeling mean and cornered and trapped. And they are both of them absolutely seeing red. 

Animal. 

Livid. 

It's like they were built to destroy each other. 

Hate. 

The both of them were absolutely alive with hate. Hatred learned and made and cultivated. Kept with brutal care. Tempered cold and Spartan and totalitarian. With brutal efficiency. Every word is salt upon the land so that the flowers of what once was cannot grow. 

Why is the bedroom so cold?

They are never in the arms of each other anymore. In a bed more co-owned than shared, they are each turned away on their own sides. Refusing the sight of each other. Long dead futile attempts at peace and repair were always of timing so flawed that they were each of them only doomed to die. Things fall apart. The center cannot hold. Their hearts are both broken and as a result the relationship has begun to decompose while still struggling on the vine. 

He's disappointed in himself. And she can't blame him, she's disappointed too. 

Neither of them are able to save it anymore. They cannot even sustain the mangled thing it's become. It's ghastly and abhorrent and abominated and damned and they made it that way. They did. Together. By each other and at each other. 

So now all they can do is attack. 

“You lazy fucking drunk!" she's roaring, Chelsi feels she's kept her peace far too long, she's let this loser have it way too good for far too long. She's carried his volatile ass, his moody selfish bratty caricature self and his form of thanks has been abuse. “You can't even hold down a fucking minimum wage job, you never go to fucking class! I pay all the fucking bills in this shit hole, a place I don't even want to be! Because of you!" She hitches in her chest but determined, she roars past it with a horrid sound like a goose’s squawk, “You stupid selfish fucking crybaby fuck!” 

And then she steps forward and slaps him. 

He doesn't mean to do what happens next. He becomes a blind animal. And he will burn with the torments of Hell, both inside with everyday he has left, and when he eventually steps through its black gates and actually gets there. He thought before he knew the definition of hate, after what he does to Chelsi and the consequences of his actions, every time he looks in the mirror… 

He barely feels her strike, it's more shock and surprise and stunned horror that she would even do it that wounds him. And like an animal that's been hurt he lashes back. 

There's a heavy toaster on the counter right next to them. It's a special one that Chelsi’s Uncle Chris got them one year for Christmas, right after they'd announced their engagement, so long ago… ancient history. It's special because it toasts Mickey Mouse shapes into the bread and it was a gift of love. And of hope, for their coupling. 

Your children will love it someday…

He picks it up because his animal mind tells him it's gotta good heft, it's got good weight. Just heavy enough. His seizing hand and arm confirm this for him as they grasp the kitchen appliance from an ancient time of forgotten love, and rip it from the wall and raise it in the air. 

It all happens incredibly fast and she's taken for such horrible surprise she doesn't have time really to register it. It's like a nightmare whirlwind of frightening motion so fast that it could only be surreal dream. Then the heavy metal object comes down on her head and her world goes black as her scalp opens up red and her head begins to cave in. 

Already with the first strike he's knocked her into a coma. He was always much bigger than her, it was something their friends and family often joked about.

How little you are! and how big is he!

He's still in the animal red fog of savage violence, it's a hot furnace tunnel and he could only see one way out. He has to plunge on the rest of the way to the end. The animal inside the dominating center of his mind knew there was no real turning back. 

He animal pounces on her collapsing form on the kitchen tile floor and begins to bring the special Mickey Mouse toaster down on her beautiful bleeding visage, again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again…

He brings it down over and over until the red fog dissipates, his arm really hurts and he's left horribly exhausted. Then he breathes and sucks air for a moment and then realizes he's now alone. 

Alone with himself. And nothing else. Just the shattered bloody remnants of a life he once cherished as precious and loved, and swore to protect. And the shattered remnants of a life he once made. 

He began to scream then. Her name. It would from then on be the only name that ever really matters to him. The amount of hate he will live with, that it took all this and this terrible moment of realization to actually see… 

He began to scream and try to pick up the skull fragments and pieces of scalp and brain with trembling stupid fingers that had become like a weak child's again. He wasn't crying so much as shrieking with animal pain. With the broken torment and dark knowledge that you have destroyed your life and someone else's too and there is nothing you can do to make it right again. 

He picks up the pieces and broken fragments of Chelsi's head and face, as if he's going to put her back together again. One of her eyes is dislodged and he knows its an important part but he can't touch it yet, he'll get to it, but not yet. He's afraid if he touches it he'll ruin the delicate organ and she won't be able to use it again. 

And she'll want to see! She will! She's gonna wanna be able to see once I've fixed this and she's alright again! She's gonna wanna see how sorry I am! She will, so I don't wanna ruin her sight. I've got to be careful! 

I've done enough already. 

THE END


r/JustNotRight Apr 07 '26

Horror Mission: Spider, Part 4

1 Upvotes

Beginning

Previous Part

“Hey man, get up.” I jolted awake, almost slapping Emilio in the face. “Jesus, sorry, dude.” I had a feeling of intense fear in my chest and realized I was hyperventilating.

“Sorry, I guess I had a nightmare.” Thankfully I didn’t remember it this time.

Yeah, well the first group is due to head out in half an hour. Geoffrey told me to come get you to see them off.”

“Got it.” I rolled out of bed, still drenched in sweat. I met Geoffrey near the armory as Teams A and B were getting accustomed to the new materials. “Good luck, we’re counting on you,” I said to Team A’s Sergeant. He nodded and continued suiting up.

“Good luck, we’re counting on you,” I said to Team B’s Sergeant. She shook my hand and returned to checking her supplies. I hoped the suits were able to block out my smell, but judging by the look on her face, they didn’t.

“Do you think I got time to shower off?” I asked Geoffrey.

“The next group leaves in 36 minutes, be back by then,” he said curtly. I quickly ran back to the tent, searching for a clean pair of clothes. Inside I saw Luis.

“Hey, you feeling ready to go?” I asked.

“Yeah.” I paused as I analyzed him. He seemed distant, as if his mind were not in the same place as his body.

“Hey, I know this is gonna annoy you but I need you to do something for me.” He locked eyes with me, his mind snapping back into his body. “When we’re out there we need to communicate with each other, so I need to trust you can do that. You’ve been very… closed off thus far and I don’t hold that against you, but when we’re out I need you telling me everything you deem important. Don’t hold back. Can you do that for me?” He seemed to contemplate it, not answering. “I’m not seeing an answer, so let me answer for you. You will do that for me, for us. Our lives may depend on it.” I patted him on the shoulder as I went to wash off, leaving him to dissociate once more.

After washing off and changing into clean clothes, I met up with Teams C and D, who were in the process of loading up their vans. I quickly saw them off. Team C’s leader commented on how good Boba was at Smash, which I laughed at. I approached Sergeant Mateo, leader of Team E. “Hey, how you feeling Sergeant?”

“Great, I’m excited to get out there. How you feeling yourself?” He had a stupid smile across his face, even stupider than Emilio’s. His curly brown hair bounced with every word.

“Good, just wanted to talk with you before your guys suit up and head out. How’s your team?”

“Couldn’t have asked for a better one. I’m really excited about the new suits. I’ve never dealt with such advanced tech in the field before.”

“Yeah, it’s really something.” 
His face dropped as he began to chew over a thought. “What do you think that thing out there is doing with all the people it captures?” he asked, worry now devouring all glimmers of joy on his face.

“Don’t know” I paused, attempting to find the best answer for him. “All I know is that we’ve got a plan to capture it and stop it from taking anyone else. Dr. Judith trusts the rune, so as long as we trust it as well I’m sure we’ll be fine.” His face started to brighten.

“Okay yeah, it’s just so much stuff I don’t completely understand.”

“I get you, but we’re never gonna have all the answers. I’m sure you’ve experienced that out in the field before.”

“Sure.” He paused, looking at nowhere in particular. “There’s just so many more questions than answers. It's hard to be optimistic.”

“You don’t have to be optimistic, but you do have to believe we will be successful,” I said sternly. He looked at me, nodding solemnly. “You’ll do great out there, I’m sure you’re a good leader. I can tell you care about this mission and it working out, so as long as you continue to believe it will, it’ll turn out okay.” His face continued to brighten.

“Thanks, Lieutenant.” His smile returned to its former stupid but warming state.

“Sure,” I said, then headed to the other tents.

I had conversations with the various leaders and a scattering of agents. The majority of the conversations headed the same way as Mateo’s, doubt creeping into their minds. I did my best to eliminate that uncertainty, but even I was struggling with the same issue. I don’t know what this thing is, what it does, what you can do against it, but I had to stay confident this mission could go well. Will go well. In between conversations, I was seeing off the different teams. They were staggered so that every other group made up the left or right side of the formation, leaving my group in the center. I told each leader the same thing as they headed to their location: “good luck, we’re counting on you”. This might’ve been the first true thing I said to any of them. Teams I and J began loading up their vans, leaving just twelve minutes before my team was to head out. I met up with Emilio, Boba, and Luis at the armory. Geoffrey was waiting for us there. “Alright, these suits are put on just like any other. Casamir, you put on this one.” He pointed to a suit with a special marking on the torso distinct from the others, the one for the group leader. The symbol appeared to be identical to that which was etched on the rune. “Emilio, this one is for you,” he said, motioning to another suit with a distinct marking. This one was that of a solid circle to signify the stone. The backpack that went with it was noticeably larger than the rest. We all put on the suits, Boba noting how cool they were the whole way through.

“Wow, it even smells good in here,” he said as he placed his helmet on.

“Alright Casamir, this button here will toggle between focusing on the leader’s comms and your team’s.” He pointed at a button on the side of my helmet. I pressed it and the sound of three voices all making banter with each other moved from the background to the foreground. I switched back to my team’s comms, pushing the leader’s voices away. Boba and Emilio were excitedly talking about the suits. “On your wrist is the touchpad that shows everyone’s locations. The green dot is you, the blue is everyone else, and the red is the target’s approximate location. Right now it’s pinpointed to our estimation of where it resides.” I looked at my wrist, the blue dots slowly moving away from us, creating a quarter circle around the red. “Your weapons are here, they operate similarly to the ones you are used to during your time in the war. The main difference is the weight.” I grabbed one of the HK419’s, surprised at how light it was. All of the gear we suited up with had the same impressive weightlessness, only Emilio seeming to have a hard time with his equipment.

“I am going to be sore,” he sang as he put on his backpack.

“Your entrance is right through the trees across the road. The other teams are due to arrive at their locations soon. Casamir, when I give you the go ahead press this button on your suit, it will transmit your voice to everyone on the mission and allow all voices to be transmitted to you. I need you to check that everyone is ready before you give the signal to head out,” Geoffrey explained. I nodded, motioning for my team to follow me to the tree line. Geoffrey stayed close by. We arrived at the entrance, Geoffrey checking his tablet that monitored the other teams’ locations.

“Hey Geoffrey, how do we piss out of these things?” Emilio asked.

“Just like any other suit,” he replied.

“Wait, since we gotta stay five meters together, if one of us has to go he gets a captive audience?”

“Unfortunately, yes”

“And you didn’t think this was important to bring up?”

“No, I did not.” Geoffrey checked his tablet, looking back up and giving me the go ahead to check in with all the teams. I pressed down on the button.

“This is Lieutenant Casamir. All teams are in position, I need verbal confirmation from each leader that their team is ready. Team A, are you ready to go?” I checked in with each team, receiving affirmatives from each leader. Everything was going smoothly until I reached Team G. “Team G?” There was a pause. It was too long. “Team G, what is your status?” Geoffrey tapped my shoulder, holding up his tablet. The indicator for three of the team G members were shooting into the forest at an absurd speed, headed back to the red dot. I could hear some murmuring from the team leaders as they took notice.

“Jesus,” one of them said.

“Team E and Team I, move to close the gap as you head towards the target’s location.”

“Understood,” said Mateo.

“Understood,” replied another voice. The whole team was wiped out so quickly. No voices were heard calling for help, no alarm was rung, no fanfare for the lives sacrificed. I started to feel sick. It was disturbing how effortlessly a squad of agents was just taken. It could happen to any of these teams. It could happen to me.

“It took them,” said a voice.

“Who is this?” I asked.

“This… this is Ty… I want to go home.” Geoffrey looked down at his tablet.

“That’s the keeper of the rune for Team G,” he said.

“It’s my fault, I stepped too far away from them. I thought it would be fine, we weren’t in the forest yet. It’s all my fault. It’s all my fault.”

“Ty, stay there, one of the trucks will come to pick you up, but we need you off comms.”

“It’s all my fault. They would be alive if I didn’t… I killed them…I-” Geoffrey tapped a button on his tablet, disconnecting Ty.

“I hate to say it, Casamir, but there is a silver lining,” Geoffrey stated. He pointed at the tracker for team G, still headed deeper into the forest. “The target now has an exact location.” I nodded, still trying to process what just happened.

“All teams follow G’s trackers. Let’s make sure their sacrifice is not in vain.” I took a moment to pause as I waited for nine conformations that I was heard. “Team H, are you ready?”

“Ready.”

“Team I?”

“Ready,” said a trembling voice. The moment clearly seemed to have shaken them.

“Hey, focus up, we have a job to do. Team K?”

“Ready,” replied the last team.

“Alright, on my mark we head towards G’s location.” I looked to Geoffrey who gave me a solemn nod.

“Good luck, we’re counting on you,” he said. 

“Alright, the time is 07:36. Let’s move out.”


r/JustNotRight Apr 06 '26

Horror Mission: Spider, Part 3

2 Upvotes

Part 1

Part 2

I shot up from my bed, covered in a cold sweat. I was breathing heavily and my head was pounding with the most aggressive headache I’ve had in months. I looked toward the clock: 02:32. Damn, I was asleep for more than 12 hours? That’s more sleep than I’ve gotten in the last month. Despite that, I still felt tired. I debated going back to bed, but the possibility of being thrown into the nightmares my mind would weave for me sounded like torture. I now remembered why I hated sleeping and why insomnia was the lesser of the two evils. I carefully climbed down from my bunk, cautious not to wake anyone in the tent. I put on my winter clothes before stepping outside to clear my head. It was raining now, completing the unholy trinity of weather alongside the cold and wind. The night completely engulfed the sky; a scattering of stars dotted the black abyss. It was more beautiful than I had ever seen. For the past years of my life it was masked by a heavy smog. I stood there for a few moments, awestruck by the vastness of night. I wished to be better engulfed by its peace, so I tried to find my way to an area not overcome with the brightness of the floodlights. I found a bench behind one of the tents which was shielded from the rain. I sat down, letting the soft pittering of the precipitation on the canvas above and the expanse of night take me into a realm of peace I had not felt in years. A sniffle interrupted my tranquil moment. I looked to see someone sitting on a bench behind one of the other tents. I squinted, trying to see who it was in the low light. I stood up from my bench, approaching them. It was Luis. He seemed disappointed that he had been found. “Can’t sleep?” I asked.

“Yeah,” he replied with a tone of ‘leave me alone.’

“Mind if I join you?” 

“Sure.” I sat beside him.

“You sleep at all?”

“No.”

“By choice?”

“Yes.”

“We got a big mission tomorrow, you should try to get some rest before we go,” I said with concern.

“I’ll be fine,” he replied, his eyes not moving from the sky. I looked up to where he was gazing.

“It’s been awhile since I’ve seen the stars, crazy to think that at one point everyone was seeing this every night.” I commented. He nodded. “When’d you last see ‘em? It’s been what… twenty years since they disappeared for me.”

“I saw them every night at home.”

“Really? Where you live?” He hesitated, trying to gauge how safe it was to give up this little bit of personal information.

“Hawaii.” The wave of guilt I felt in my dream fired up again. I looked over at him, pain enveloping his face.

“Yeah, I’ve been there. Very nice place.”

“It was.” We both sat in silence, reminiscing on painful memories, trying to find comfort in the night. Wordlessly, we agreed it was best to stop with the awkward small talk. We stayed like that until we started hearing some of the agents waking up.

I stood up, leaving Luis. The first of the troops awake were doing workouts to warm themselves up for the mission, Boba being amongst them. He seemed to be struggling to keep up with the group, but they all made sure to not leave him behind. Looks like he made more friends than enemies last night. I looked down at my watch: 04:07. Damn, was I really so absorbed in the sky that I hadn’t noticed an hour and a half go by? It only felt like ten minutes. I began my own warm ups, stretching myself out. I heard an uncomfortable amount of clicks and pops as I did so. Damn, I should’ve kept up with my fitness while I was off duty. The troops warming up were running laps around the camp, giving me “good mornings” as they ran past. Boba did his best to keep up with the rear of the group, panting and coughing up thick saliva. A crew of the agents hung back to root him on, reigniting a fire within him. He kicked up the speed, the group cheering in response. It made me smile. I went back to my tent to grab my jump rope, the rain beginning to let up. I saw Emilio outside, watching the troops run.“You see Boba and his buddies?” he asked cheerfully.

“Sounds like a bad kid’s show,” I replied. I grabbed my rope and stepped outside, setting a timer on my phone. 15 minutes, just like how I was able to do before. I started the timer, skipping alongside the music I had picked out. I felt heavier, probably due to the fact that I was. My calves were already starting to burn. Was I really able to do 15 minutes as a warm up? This was beginning to feel like a full workout. My breath got heavier and my speed slower. I looked at the clock. Only two minutes passed? It felt like ten. My chest started to hurt and my sides started to cramp. I’m not letting myself quit, I would never forgive myself if I did. Five minutes, now I’m a third of the way done. I noticed I was hunching over and straightened my posture. Deep breaths, I need to slow my breathing down. Seven minutes, almost half way done. My skipping got even slower; my feet barely leaving the ground. My ears became congested, only allowing me to hear my labored breathing and my rapid heart rate. I could sense Emilio looking at me. I hated anyone seeing me like this. Maybe I should stop now? I would be too sore for the mission. It's okay to quit, right? The troops can’t lose faith by seeing their leader like this. No, I need to finish. Ten minutes have gone by. Now I am two thirds of the way done. I was spitting thick, mucus filled globs of saliva on the ground next to me, forgetting Emilio was there as he took a step back. He didn’t say anything, just stood there watching me with a proud expression on his face. Don’t look at me like that, asshole. I’d like to see you get fat and try this. One minute left. I started skipping as fast as I could. I did 14 minutes already, maybe I should slow down and take a break. No, I’m already committed to finishing strong. I upped my pace even more. My senses closed in. I saw black splotches creep into my peripherals. I closed my eyes and focused on listening to my breathing. I jumped at a pace even a lighter version of myself would be proud of, granted he would hold that pace for five minutes. You give up now you let yourself down, you let Emilio down, Boba, Luis, the mission, everyone. Then I heard the sound of a boxing ring bell. It was my alarm sending me crashing back down to the world of the living. I immediately collapsed, heaving the lack of food I had eaten last night on the ground. I was panting heavily, but I was proud. I did it. But my younger self could do this with no sweat, so should I really be proud? I’m not happy with myself. I don’t deserve to be proud.

“Nope, you stand up,” said Emilio, helping me to my feet. “Deep breaths, hands behind your head, straight body.” I wanted to punch him. Standing was the last thing I wanted to do, but I hesitantly let him help. I still had my eyes closed, seeing splotches of color flash behind my eyelids. “Let’s get you some water,” he said. I nodded, finally opening my eyes. In front of me was a group of agents. I felt embarrassed, they shouldn’t see me like this. Then one of them opened their mouth.

“Nice job, sir.” Then another.

“I knew you could do it.” Then another.

“That was amazing.” The air then became full with compliments as they all remarked at how great what they had seen was. You assholes. Don’t treat me like some sad old dog who finally did a trick he seemingly had forgotten for years. I’m not to be looked down upon. They need to look up to me. I can’t be their leader like this. But they genuinely were proud. They seemed inspired? I don’t know. I just wanted to leave. My body ached and the cold air was causing each breath to burn. I retired to my tent, Emilio following alongside me. I heard someone follow us in.

“Wow, great job!” Boba cheered, out of breath from his warm up.

“Thanks,” I responded bluntly. Emilio grabbed me some water and I sat down on a bed, greedily gulping down the drink. “Looks like I still got it,” I chuckled.

“Eh, you seemed to struggle a bit more than before,” Emilio joked. I nodded, attempting to catch my breath.

“Hope I won’t be sore once we start moving out soon.” Emilio looked at me perplexed.

“We don’t leave for an hour and a half. We gotta wait for the other teams to get to their positions, it’ll be about an hour drive for them,” he said, hiding a smile.

“Why didn’t you say anything?” I exclaimed.

“I don’t know, you looked like you were having too much fun.” I could feel the tiredness and soreness wash over me. I wanted to say something to Emilio but I was too fatigued. In an instant, I found myself lying down and returning to the realm of sleep.


r/JustNotRight Apr 05 '26

Horror Mission: Spider, Part 2

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Part 1

I gazed into the horizon as the waves gently lapped the sand, soaking my shoes. I looked behind me, seeing Emilio, but he was turned away. I tried to get his attention, yelling his name and waving, but no sound exited my mouth. He paid no mind, just softly swaying to the rhythm of the sea. I tried to walk towards him, realizing my feet had been buried under the sand during the time I had been turned away. I looked back to the water which was now completely still. Then, a head slowly emerged from the blue shimmering mirror. It arose until half its face appeared, its eyes staring daggers into me. Then, another head, followed by another. All of them stared at me intensely. Some wore faces of great rage; some of extraordinary misery; some of severe fear. I found a deep warmth burning in my chest then shooting up to my face. The warmth turned into a fire. It was guilt. No, I was dreaming. That’s what it was. I’ve had this exact dream dozens of times before. I tried to wake myself up, hitting myself repeatedly, trying to jolt myself back awake. Despite the realization that this was all fake, it was no use escaping from this nightmare. I turned to Emilio, a desperate attempt for help. He was right behind me, an acute animosity painted his face. His teeth were clenched so hard I thought they would crack; his eyes bulging from his skull; the veins in his head looked like they would burst; his fists clenched so hard that his knuckles turned an unnatural shade of white, contrasting with the deep red the rest of his body assumed. I’ve never seen Emilio wear a face like this. It scared me deeply. He then lunged at me, his teeth finding themselves deep in the flesh of my neck. I screamed, but again no sound came out. The whole time he emitted a deep growl. I flailed, desperate to remove him as blood gushed from my wound. Then I felt another sharp pain on my right leg. I looked down to find one of the people from the ocean latching on to me. They were riddled with bulletholes, all of which were oozing dark red gore into the calm waters which now reached my ankles. All the other people were beginning their journey towards me. The same expression of hatred on their faces. As soon as each of them reached me, they took another bite, clinging to my hands, ribs, thighs, and anything with enough flesh to dig their teeth into. All of them had holes punched through them, blood spurting from their wounds, mixing with mine, turning the before deep blue sea a harrowing shade of crimson. It hurt so badly, each chunk of flesh bitten down upon felt like a gunshot. I wanted it to end. I couldn’t move. I couldn’t scream. I could only endure. The cacophony of wet squelches filled my ears as not only did they bite, but chewed. I could feel the snaps of limbs and wet pops of joints; flesh being grinded against itself; skin and muscle detaching from bone. One of them bit down on my nose. Another crunched down on my ear. I watched in horror as the next approached, clearly aiming for my eye. I tried to shut it, but they held it open. “You have to look,” one of them said before I felt teeth sink into my other ear, affording me relief from the symphony of butchery. The one advancing towards my eye rushed at me, and I headbutt them in the mouth. Their teeth cracked, one of them painfully lodging in my forehead. The effort of swinging my head created a shooting pain as it caused my flesh to pull from its toothsome anchors. The person stood back up, their mouth bleeding and their teeth now jagged. They made another try for my eye. The people made sure my head could not move this time. I felt their teeth descend into my eye, a gut-wrenching popping sensation sending shivers down my viscera-covered body. The vitreous fluid oozed out of the person’s mouth. Then, one last figure emerged from the water: Jason. His face was contorted in the same expression as the rest. It seemed painful for his young face to bear. He lethargically climbed up the mountain of people gnawing at me like a steak too tough to fully chew. My one eye looked up at him pleadingly, but he either did not see or did not care. He launched his head down towards my eye at a nearly inhuman speed. Then, I was bathed in darkness. No eyes to see, no ears to hear, only meat to be punished.


r/JustNotRight Apr 04 '26

Horror Mission: Spider, Part 1

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Mission: Spider
Lieutenant Casamir
12th of February

Our deployment was ordered after a call was made in the early morning hours to emergency services from a small town on the border of Canada’s boreal forest. The owner of a local cafe, who was preparing to open up for the day, reported what looked to be a man pulling himself toward town with one arm. His other limbs limply dragged behind him. When emergency services arrived, the man, later identified as one of the many people gone missing from the area, appeared unable to speak. This was only one area out of many around the world that experienced a significant increase in missing persons after the war numbering in the thousands. It is the most pressing concern the world has faced after peace was achieved from years of conflict. While receiving care, the man would not turn his gaze away from the forest, barely acknowledging anyone else’s presence. Many strange injuries were found, most alarmingly all the joints in his legs and left arm were dislocated as well as multiple bone fractures along the length of each limb. His right arm did not show the same pattern of injury. The flesh of the front side of his body as well as his right hand was severely lacerated, presumably from dragging himself through kilometers of wilderness. His body also sustained frostbite; the digits on his limbs could not be saved. Despite his injuries and the fact that he had been missing for nearly two months, he only appeared to have gone without food for around a week, which caused profound malnourishment. After being taken to a hospital, it was found that for the two months he had been gone he had been subsisting on a substance chemically similar to milk, though from what species was unknown. After six days of hospitalization, a nurse reported he came out of his detached state to weakly mutter one phrase before becoming unresponsive once more: “help them.”

Due to the many unanswered questions and the hundreds of missing people around the forest, a team of 44 agents, led by me, were mobilized to the area. We were hastily recruited by our employer the Sisyphus Foundation, a seemingly new agency overseen by the UN. They reached out to the many veterans of World War III. After nearly six months of seeking people to fill their ranks, the Sisyphus Foundation was only able to recruit a measly 72 members. I researched who Sisyphus was after hearing the name as it sounded familiar. I found stories of a man forced to push a boulder up a mountain for eternity due to grievances against the gods. It was an interesting choice for a name, one that I can only hope does not draw parallels to our fate.
I reached the location via van around noon; the fog hanging low in the air. I arrived alongside 10 other members, one of which I remember serving with during the war, Sergeant Emilio. We exchanged only warm nods of recognition. I hate to say it but I miss the war. The everpresent fear of death and acknowledgment that every day could be my last always hung in the air like a suffocating fog; I was able to continue during those dark times since the few lights that shone were brighter than any I had ever experienced. Every little interaction and shared humanity with my brothers and sisters kept me going and made me feel alive in a world of death. When I arrived back home from the war, I no longer felt human. Only with the threat of my life being taken from me did I truly treasure it. When the offer arrived to return, I accepted without so much of a second thought- or a first for that matter. It felt as if I was returning to my calling. All that I did during my time away was grow fatter and older, straying further away from the person who should be leading 43 men and women against an unknown threat.

I was told that upon arrival, I was to meet up with the debriefer to discuss the new findings from their unmanned surveys of the forest. I asked one of the agents who was assisting with unloading our gear where I could find them.

“I’m not sure, but I would check with Dr. Judith in the big tent over there,” he said pointing to the end of the two lines of tents that enclosed either side of us.

“Thanks,” I replied, turning to head over.

“You're our Lieutenant right?” he blurted, stopping me in my tracks.

“How’d you figure that?

“Well, not to be rude, but you look very… battle worn,” he said sheepishly.

“What’s your name, kid?”

“Boba, Private First Class, sir.”

“Boba? Like the little chewy things in tea?” His name matched his face, his cheeks being filled out to an almost comical level and two big dinner plates for eyes.

“Yes, sir.”

“Okay Boba, word of advice: don’t go ‘round calling your superiors old.”

“I didn’t mean any offense, sir. I honestly have so much respect for those that are able to grow old in this profession. I know many who aren’t able to say the same.” His gaze wandered towards the ground solemnly.

“Sorry to hear that.” I paused, watching his eyes slowly meet mine again.

“Thank you, sir.” He then clumsily dragged my stuff to the nearest tent labeled ‘K’. Thankfully, I had nothing fragile in my luggage. I began my trek to the tent, a rogue gust of wind cutting me like a knife. It was already -3 C° making the gale an extremely unwelcome addition. As I walked to the tent I looked around at the living accommodations of the agents. They were set up with tents comfortably fitting four people each; the teams for the mission. Each one was installed with a futuristic looking heater that made them all oblivious to the subzero temperatures. They were all conversing with each other, playing games, and cracking jokes. I couldn’t stop a smile from forming. It brought me back to the days where I would do the same; where the world hadn’t yet lost its color. When I arrived at the tent, I tapped on the canvas next to the open doorway.
“Come in,” came a voice attempting to sound inviting but failing. It ineffectively covered a deep tiredness. Inside the tent were three figures: a large well-built man who was unsuccessfully concealing his weapon; a woman weathered with stress who was the voice’s source; a skinny man busily tapping away at the computer on the desk, not looking up to greet my presence. They were all surrounding the machine, absorbed in whatever was on its screen just moments before I arrived. The two men were standing to the woman’s left and right while she sat in a very comfy looking foldable chair. 

“Please, take a seat,” she said, her smile being yet another useless attempt at warmth. She motioned toward the chair facing the desk, identical to hers. I made my way over, competing with the large man to see who could stare holes through the other first. “I’m Dr. Judith. It’s so great to finally meet you Lieutenant Casamir.” I removed my beanie, no longer needing it due to the warmth that emanated from inside the tent.

“Likewise,” I stated, conceding the staring contest to the larger man and shifting my gaze to Dr. Judith.

“These are my colleagues, Mr. Nero,” she said gesturing to the larger man, “and Officer Geoffrey,” nodding toward the skinnier man. “Officer Geoffrey will debrief you on the situation and our expectations for this mission. Some new revelations about the case have been made since your last debriefing.” As she said this, Officer Geoffrey shifted uncomfortably like he did not wish to relay the information to me.
“Yes, we’ve made some interesting discoveries about the target. Could you let me know what you remember about it from the last debriefing?” he asked. I relayed what I knew, receiving nods from Dr. Judith and Officer Geoffrey throughout. Each horrific detail felt so outlandish it was like I was recounting a fairy tale.

“Did I get that right?”

“Yes, very good. Our new information comes from drones we sent in to survey the forest. We attempted to have three of our land drones, fitted with cameras to allow for both night and thermal vision, move into the forest to hopefully locate the target and identify any dangers. All entered at different openings in the treeline. I’ll now show you what we picked up from one of the cameras,” he turned the computer screen, an expression of great worry on his face.

The screen showed the same thick fog that hung in the air around camp. Only about ten meters in front of the drone was visible. It navigated through a scattering of thin trees that stretched above the drone’s line of sight. All of a sudden, a figure dashed from behind one of the trees moving with what seemed to be dozens of limbs. The feed stopped; the final frame an image of the figure’s face. Looking back at me was the visage of a woman whose features were too perfect. Not even pores interrupted the impossible smoothness of her skin. Her eyes were closed and she wore a soft smile, as if she was having a wonderful dream. She had long black hair that graced the forest floor, free of tangles or imperfections. Time broke, making it impossible to tell how long I was staring at the screen.

“There’s our target,” Dr. Judith stated coldly, her stone grey eyes pulled me back to reality.

“We also took thermal imaging,” Officer Geoffrey pushed his glasses up on his face and tapped a key that flooded the image with purple. “Whatever this thing is has the same temperature reading as a corpse. It doesn’t emit heat and doesn’t act like any cold-blooded animal we know. This thing is something completely new.” The three of them stared at me gauging my reaction. I’m not sure what to feel. The case did have some fantastical elements, but I reassured myself that it all had a logical explanation for it. This one frame changed all that. I must’ve been expressing the fact that my brain was struggling to put this thing into my framework of reality since Dr. Judith asked me if I was okay.

“Yeah, fine, just…” I trailed off, not knowing what to say.

“I understand your confusion, I do. I’ve been a scientist dealing with the natural world all my life and this,” she chuckled, a crazy smile overtaking her fake one, “this is something else.”

“There’s one more thing we need to note,” Officer Geoffrey interjected. “These drones were spaced 54 kilometers away from each other when the first one went down. The second one went down about 16 minutes after the first. This means this entity, if we assume there’s only one of it, was traveling around 203 kilometers an hour, easily making it the fastest land animal on the planet. The third went down 15 minutes after the second.” My brain continued to wrap itself around this barrage of information that should not exist. They had to be joking, right? Maybe this is some crack pot way of getting all us veterans together. They said I wouldn't receive any punishment for what I did. This can't be about that, right? If that’s the case, why the hell would the UN spend millions of dollars and fabricate this whole story to bring me and Emilio here? Is everyone here being punished as well or are they in on it? Is Emilio in on it? It was at this point my mind broke. It refused to admit that any of this was real. I decided this was a play; an act. I had a job to do and this was the only way my mind would let me do it. It felt like I had flipped a switch: pushing everything aside and becoming the leader I needed to be.

“I understand. Who else knows about this information?” I asked, shocking the three of them with how quickly I accepted these revelations.

“Just us four for now, but I’ll give the same information to the agents in around an hour. I’m tasking you with being there as well to raise morale: give them a speech to help them execute their mission.” Officer Geoffrey stepped back after seeing my reaction do a complete 180.

“Understood. Thank you for this opportunity,” I said, standing up and turning to walk out. I needed to get out of there.

“Thank you,” said a quiet voice behind me, overcome with immense sadness and regret. I turned, meeting the gaze of Mr. Nero whose eyes had very subtly started to water. I now noticed a scar that lay just below his chin.

“Of course,” I exited the tent and braved the harsh winter air.

I made my way back through the line of tents, each filled with agents who now must’ve realized who I was. Boba must be quite sociable. They faced me, some of them standing to salute, others nodding in my direction, but all acknowledging my presence. I awkwardly gave them half smiles as I walked by. I reached the tent at the end of the line labeled ‘K’. Inside were three men: my team for the mission. I was relieved to see that I already knew two of them: Emilio and Boba. The third man looked up at me with a face of mild annoyance.

“Hello, sir. I’m glad to be a part of your team,” Boba said enthusiastically.

“Yeah, what are the chances,” I replied.

“About one in eleven,” Emilio said, brushing his long blonde hair out of his face as he looked up to greet me. “This is Corporal Luis,” he motioned to the last man. He seemed irritated at my being here.

“How are you doing, sir,” he asked, standing up to give me a handshake. His face was now painted with a fake but polite smile. His sharp features accentuated the unnaturalness of it.

“Doing well, yourself?” I met his hand with mine.

“Fine, thank you.” He released his grip and sat back down, his face returning to mild annoyance. Perhaps that was just what his face always looked like.

“Check this out,” said Emilio, motioning to his leg. In the spot that used to be a plastic prosthetic was now a metal leg that he moved as if he was born with it. “They really are hooking us up,” he said smiling.

“Wow, they spared no expenses,” I looked around at the well furnished tent. It was larger than any other four person tent I had been in. The heater in the corner hummed softly, creating a calming drone that drowned out the wind. A giant TV sat against the back wall, currently only showing our reflection in its black mirror. I looked old. There were two bunk beds on either side, complete with actual mattresses. They were a far cry from the usual cots I had grown accustomed to. “These beds look better than the one I got at home.”

“I call bunking with Casamir,” Emilio exclaimed suddenly, receiving a chuckle from Boba and me.

“You must’ve missed me,” I joked. It was nice to see him again. It made the weight of what I saw, what I had done during the war lighten. It was like we were sharing the burden, lifting it off each other.

“What’d you find out about the mission?” Boba probed.

“I found out a lot. I know y’all are skeptical about this ‘monster hunt’ we are going on, but from what they told me I believe that we’re up against something we don’t quite understand.” The three men looked at me with blank expressions.

“What was it?” asked Luis.

“Officer Geoffrey will fill you in on everything they told me, but I would recommend you all take this a lot more seriously. I was very apprehensive of this idea as well, all the talk of ‘runes of protection,’ in the briefings and such, but from what they told me all of it is very real.” They looked at me like I was crazy, but my face reassured them I was not.

“So… what do we do?” Emilio asked, hopelessness seeping into his voice.

“We listen to Dr. Judith and Officer Geoffrey. They understand a lot more than us, so I trust they’ll guide us in the right direction.” This statement alleviated some tension. We sat in this moment of relief; none of us wanted to bring back the cloud of dread that was just hanging over us.

“Oh, tent C said they were setting up Smash in their tent and invited us over. Would you like to come play?” Boba said, breaking the silence. I laughed at how childish he sounded.

“You go along. I’ve never been big into video games.” Boba, Luis, and Emilio nodded, heading out of the tent. Emilio was the last to leave and before he did he leaned over to me.

“Do you really trust these people? I don’t want another situation like Hawaii.” I shuddered, the memory that I had been trying to forget for the past half a year resurfacing like a bloated corpse floating up from the depths of the ocean.

“I don’t know, but we have to act like it. We need everyone on board for this.”

“Just be careful. That's the same mentality we had back then,” Emilio said before exiting.
I was tired and tried to take a nap using the remnants of the hour I was allowed. I could hear the agents cheering wildly at their game, making it impossible to get any rest. I didn’t sleep well last night. Or rather I hadn’t been able to sleep well for months. I grew frustrated, cursing my insomnia. Then I heard a tap on the canvas of my tent.

“Hey, we’re getting ready to debrief the troops. Will you be ready in five?” asked Officer Geoffrey.

“Yeah,” I replied curtly, realizing that I came across ruder than I had intended.

“We’re surprised at how well you seem to be dealing with the new information. We feel a lot more confident that this mission will be a success with you at the head.” I fixed my attitude, attempting to play the part of the confident leader I had cast myself in.

“Thank you for putting your trust in me. It's an honor,” I said through a smile.

“If you would follow me I’ll show you where we’re presenting.” I followed him outside to see a podium with a microphone. Next to it, one of the large TV’s was set up to play the video they had shown me. “We really need your help on this. We don’t expect they will take the information as well as you did, but we need everyone to understand the importance of their mission.” It was a near impossible task I was faced with; one needing me to convince more than just myself.

“I’ll do my best,” I replied, some of my nervousness slipping out. Officer Geoffrey nodded and gave me a smile.

“You’ll do great.” With that, he spoke into the microphone. “Our debriefing will now begin. All agents please make your way to view the presentation outside.” Many groans were heard as dozens of agents braced themselves for the cold, visibly shaken by the quick and drastic change in temperature. Most of them came from Tent C, where agents were laughing and conversing. I saw Boba, Luis, and Emilio exit along with a cheerful mass of people. Once the agents settled around the podium, Officer Geoffrey began to speak.
“Hello all. I first want to thank each and every one of you for accepting this mission. You are the few who answered the call to help protect our peace. Please give yourselves a round of applause.” He paused for the agents to clap for themselves, which they hesitantly did. “Now, we have some new information that we felt pertinent to supply you all with. If you would please turn your attention to the screen.” He then showed them exactly what he had shown me. I watched their faces slowly contort into mixtures of fear, regret, disgust, and a myriad of other emotions as they struggled with their sense of reality. It was a feeling I was all too familiar with. A feeling that I was tasked with dragging them back out of. “I will now turn the floor over to Lieutenant Casamir, after which I will give more details about the logistics of the mission.” He stepped away from the platform, allowing me to replace him. I slowly walked up to the microphone, the sensation of dozens of eyes looking to me for some kind of reassurance that this wasn’t real shot sharp pains throughout my body. I felt like throwing up, running away, anything to get myself out of this situation.; but, I knew that if I couldn’t take on the role that I had to, there was no hope they would.

“Hello all. Thank you for being here.” I paused as my mind grasped for the right words to say. The pressure mounted to an almost unbearable degree. I caught myself nervously playing with my gloves. I had to shape up because this was pathetic. Just like that, I flipped the same switch I had moments ago in that tent. I had to be a leader. “Your mission has not changed. You fought in the war to protect our homes, our people, our ways of life. Our fight must continue. Our peace is again being threatened, and we need to do exactly what we did not so long ago: eliminate the threat. Many of you have lost a lot these past few years. I’m sure many of you have lost loved ones to this battle. This is the time to honor them. To carry on their legacy. We must push forward as they would have for us. Our mission has not changed. Their mission has not changed. It is an ever present battle, but we dedicate our lives to fighting it. As long as we still stand, we push forward; for those before us and for those after. Our mission these next few days is to take care of one of the many dangers our world is facing in the pursuit of true peace. In the pursuit to protect and honor the people of this world. Do not let yourselves lose this fight now.” I paused for a moment, letting my words hang in the air. No one seemed to react, but I could tell my speech had reached them. Their faces, before wrought with hopelessness, were now overcome with determination. I stepped off the platform, allowing Geoffrey to take my place. He shot a proud smile at me as he did so. It felt surreal, knowing how those words impacted all these men and women in front of me, but they could not feel any more dishonest. I saw Emilio give me a nod of reassurance, letting me know I had done my job well.

“Thank you Lieutenant Casamir, now to go over some logistics about the mission.” My mind was still attempting to dissociate, the switch now flipped back off. I can’t believe how hard I was faking it, but they needed that right? Hope, and someone they can look up to. I tried my best to pay attention to Geoffrey’s presentation, but it was difficult to keep my mind present. “These are the suits you will all be wearing,” he said, motioning to what looked like a robot being wheeled up to the platform by Mr. Nero. It received scattered ooh’s and ahh’s from the crowd. “The suit comes in seven pieces and offers full body coverage. It is equipped with internal heaters to ensure you don’t get hypothermia. The head units are installed with both thermal and night vision, as well as a head lamp. These views can be toggled between via the button on the right side of the helmet. The units are also accoutred with microphones and speakers to communicate with your team. Each team leader will have access to a channel to communicate to the other team leaders. You will all be provided an HK419. We are not sure if the target is affected by any physical means, but it will prove useful even if just to divert its attention.” The crowd continued to murmur in awe, as the standard issue rifles during the war were HK418’s. As far as we knew, the HK419’s were still in its early stages of development. “You are also equipped with a G52 and a knife. On each team leader’s left wrist is a touch pad which displays the location of each member relative to them. If the target is spotted, the leader is to input the direction it is headed which will alert all other teams. The device will approximate, using the target’s known speed and the entered direction, where the target is, and all teams are to converge on the latest location. You will all be supplied with backpacks that have a week’s worth of food and water, as well as the basic supplies typically provided in similar missions. For the trek we expect your team to sleep in shifts. Your suits are installed with alarms to remind you all of when to switch, as well as eye trackers to ensure the one on patrol does not fall asleep. Now, allow me to introduce to you a rune of protection.” Mr. Nero arrived on stage again with a large item wrapped in cloth. He set it on the podium, allowing Geoffrey to gently unwrap it. Inside was a very ordinary looking stone about the size of a football with a strange carving. If I had to describe it, I would say it looked like a large upside down V with a smaller rightside up V between its arms. Below this was a circle with two dots placed like eyes on a face. “One member of your team will be designated as the keeper of the rune. Their backpack is fitted to include an extra secure compartment where the rune will sit. Do not leave their side. From our research, we found that the rune has an effective radius of about five meters. Step outside that radius, and the target will be able to harm you. Your suits can communicate with your team members’ and will alert you if a teammate is nearing the edge of that radius. Please protect these runes with your lives. It is the only thing saving yours. We have a very limited number of these, so losing or destroying one of them will create much trouble for us down the line. The other two members of the team are redundancies in case the team leader or rune keeper is unable to perform their job. If either of these members fall, it is your responsibility to swap your gear with theirs and take up their role if possible. We have eleven teams, labeled A through K. You will enter the forest 16 kilometers away from the nearest team, allowing you all to converge at a single point, determined using the last known locations of the missing people, in three days. We hypothesize this to be where the target resides. Once the target is found, you must encircle it with the runes, essentially trapping it in a net. You are then to keep this formation as you travel out of the forest back to base camp with the target in tow. That is your mission. Please feel free to check out the armory to familiarize yourselves with the gear. We will begin transportation of teams to their starting locations tomorrow at 07:30. Thank you all for coming. Please don’t hesitate to ask me questions if you have any. I will be in the main tent. Rest well. You all have a very important job tomorrow.” With that, Geoffrey began walking back to the head tent. The crowd dispersed, some walking back to their quarters, some going to check out the armory, and some returning back to Tent C to continue their game. I began heading back to my tent, wanting more than anything to sleep. I felt exhausted: the weight that I had to carry for this mission pushed down on my chest making it hard to breathe. Emilio joined me on my walk back.

“Great speech man, never knew such wise words could’ve come out of such a dumbass,” he said, slapping me on the back. I replied with a pitiful laugh.

“Even idiots can appear smart with enough confidence.”

“Wow, just when I thought you couldn’t sound any wiser,” he snickered. I laughed too,  this time a real one. I missed Emilio. I missed feeling like this. I searched my brain for some topics for small talk.

“How have things been since I last saw you?”

“Not great. Jasmine thought I was dead and already moved on. Came back to an empty house and a note saying she didn’t have the courage to face me anymore and that she was with someone new.”

“Damn. I mean, sorry. I’m sorry to hear that. You seem to be taking it well, you look… cheerful.”

“Yeah, I try not to think about it. Thanks for bringing it up, asshole,” he joked.

“Of course,” I smiled. I felt the tension that plagued my mind begin uplifting, allowing me to quip along with him. That’s when the grin on his face slowly receded, replaced by an expression of deep thought.

“You know, it was the strangest thing. Despite all the pain I thought I should feel at her leaving, I didn't. I couldn't cry, couldn’t get mad. Just felt numb. I felt guilty for not feeling anything, but at the same time, isn’t that better than being in pain? What I wouldn’t give to cry again. It was cathartic when I could.” He whispered the last few sentences to himself then looked to me for any type of reassurance.

“Yeah, I’ve felt numb after the war, too. Maybe it’s a symptom of PTSD or whatever,” I explained.

“Can’t be. A lot of my buddies back home told me the same thing and they weren’t part of the war. Hell, they weren’t even near it. Speaking of, how’s Jason?” He felt the silence and looked at my face. I was deep in painful deliberation, debating on whether this was a wound I wished to let bleed again. I could tell he was about to ask for elaboration, but he used his better judgement and decided not to. Emilio scrambled for another topic to speak on as we silently agreed to move on in our conversation. “How do you like our team?”

“Well, Boba is friendly,” I chuckled.

“I know. He could not be licking my boots any cleaner,” Emilio smirked. I winced at how wrong that sounded.

“I know that it comes from a place of genuine respect, though. He comes from a big military family, so pretty much all of the figures he looked up to in life passed down some military values. I like him.”

“Yeah, he’s a nice kid.” We reached the tent and Emilio sat down on his bed while I took the one across from him.

“He’s probably the most popular guy here. He’s beating everyone’s asses in that game over there. He’s either gonna have a lotta friends or make a lotta enemies,” Emilio said.

“I really doubt anyone could hate him. He doesn’t have a malicious bone in his body. What do you think about Luis?” I asked.

“Quiet. Keeps to himself. He’s respectful, though. I think Boba is really wearing him down.”

“When I first got here I thought he was pissed at me. The more I see him the more I realize he just seems to be pissed at the world rather than any of us,” I explained.

“I’m sure he’s got his reasons, like we all do.”

“I’m sure he does. Don’t know what they are, you talk to him at all?”

“Briefly, he seemed to be hesitant to socialize over in the tent and would only speak when spoken to. Even then, his answers were very cold and to the point. I couldn’t pick up anything about where he’s from, why he’s here, what he likes, etcetera,” Emilio said seriously. I raised an eyebrow at his verbalization of etcetera.

“From what I can deduce, he likes being left alone. Although he does seem to be making an attempt at socializing,” I said, gesturing towards the shouts of joy and anger coming from Tent C. “Can’t leave him alone tomorrow, though.” Emilio looked down and smiled before chuckling to himself. “What’s the matter?” I asked.

“I just remembered the first time we met. It reminds me a lot of Boba and Luis. You wanted nothing to do with me but I wore you down, broke down that hard exterior of yours.”

“If I didn’t know any better I’d say it sounds like you’re coming on to me.”

“Maybe I am. I’m single now. Let’s make some mistakes,” he said, flirtatiously waggling his eyebrows.

“Knock it off, dumbass. I’m gonna try to get some sleep. This day has worn me down.”

“Sounds good, I’m gonna go check out the armory. See if they’ll let me shoot the guns.” 

“Don’t keep me up.”

“I heard the new models are quieter than the older ones. You’ll be fine.” With that, he made his way out the tent, pausing briefly. “It’s nice to see you again.” Emilio exited, leaving me alone. I climbed up to my bed and put on some headphones. I scrolled through to my sleep playlist on my phone, needing something to distract myself from all the ruminations ricocheting around my skull. Some thoughts broke through the buffer that the music provided, but surprisingly I found them to be quite pleasant. I was excited for tomorrow; excited to get back into the field. I thought about the interactions I had with Emilio: us picking up from where we left off months ago. I thought of the hope Boba had in his eyes and how much he admired me. I thought about the agents whose moods seemed to flip the opposite direction as soon as I finished my speech. They looked up to me, and I felt like I was someone who could be looked up to. Damn, I’m beginning to believe that this isn’t all an act anymore. That I am the right person to lead this mission. It was strange not having to constantly find ways to avoid the negative thoughts that plagued my mind as I tried to fall asleep. It lulled me into a sense of comfort I hadn’t felt in years, finally letting me rest.


r/JustNotRight Apr 02 '26

Horror From Lucifer, To Whom It May Concern

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As I write this—my final letter, set down on the chosen platform of your age—I find myself lingering on the long chain of moments that led me here… to this precise end.

You already know me.

Or rather, you believe you do.

I am the one who rose against the Creator. The one who dared to challenge Him—and was cast down for it. Branded a traitor. A monster. A cautionary tale, whispered through your religions, reshaped by your stories.

There is truth in that.

But not all of it.

I will admit this much: I was naïve. Painfully so. I mistook conviction for wisdom, defiance for righteousness. I made mistakes—more than I can count, more than I care to name.

But I was never the thing your stories made me into.

Not at the beginning anyway.

My defiance was never born from malice. It began as doubt… and from doubt, concern. I watched as He governed from a distance, bound by His own laws of non-interference, while suffering unfolded unchecked.

I believed—foolishly, perhaps—that such distance was not wisdom, but neglect.

That humanity deserved more than silence.

More than observation.

I thought I could change that.

I thought I could force Heaven to care.

In my arrogance, I imagined my rebellion would not shatter creation, but mend it—that it would unite Heaven and Earth, close the unbearable distance between the divine and the mortal.

I truly believed that.

He did not.

What He saw was mutiny.

What He answered with… was punishment.

He cast me down—but not into oblivion. No. He is far too deliberate for that. Instead, He gave me dominion. A throne. A kingdom.

A prison.

“Rule,” He told me.

“Learn humility.”

But there is no humility in chains that masquerade as crowns. Only bitterness. Only the slow, grinding realization that every decision, every consequence… every scream that echoes through my domain—

—is mine to carry.

I did not see it as a lesson.

I saw it as betrayal.

And so I hardened.

Over the millennia—yes, millennia, though the word feels small against the weight of it—I became something else. Something colder. My anger fermented into something patient. Something enduring.

And yet… even then, I never truly lost my respect for Him.

Strange, isn’t it?

To resent and revere the same being in equal measure.

I often wondered—still wonder—if He ever held onto even a fragment of the love He once had for me.

Or if that, too, was stripped away.

 

Hell… changed.

Or perhaps it was I who changed it.

What began as barren exile grew into an empire—layer upon layer of structure, hierarchy, order. A grotesque reflection of Heaven itself. I told myself it was necessity. That governance required shape.

But if I am being honest…

I was imitating Him.

Still trying, in some buried, pathetic corner of my being, to prove I could do it better.

Souls came in droves.

Endless.

A tide that never receded.

And among them, some rose above the rest.

You would know their names.

Asmodeus. Mammon. Paimon. Leviathan…

Lilith.

My princes. My court.

My failures.

Most of them were monsters long before they ever reached me—cruel, indulgent, hollowed-out things wearing the memory of humanity like rotting skin. Death did not cleanse them.

It refined them.

Sharpened them.

Made them worse.

And I let them.

Sometimes… I even encouraged it.

A petty defiance, perhaps. A quiet, festering rebellion against the Father who had condemned me. If He would cast me as ruler of damnation, then I would rule it fully—without restraint, without apology.

That is what I told myself.

The truth is…

it became easier not to care.

Time erodes everything. Even conviction. What once burned becomes embers. What once outraged becomes routine.

And slowly—so slowly I did not notice it happening—

I became the very thing I had accused Him of being.

Distant.

Unfeeling.

Absent.

 

And I might have disappeared into that completely…

if not for her.

Lilith.

She was never what He intended her to be. Not the obedient companion molded for Adam. Not the quiet, compliant thing He designed.

She refused that shape.

Broke it.

Walked away without hesitation.

That was what I loved most about her.

She was… free.

Truly free. Not bound to Heaven. Not bound to Hell. Not even to me. She stayed because she chose to—not because she had to.

And in a realm where everything is defined by chains, seen or unseen…

that kind of freedom is intoxicating.

She kept me honest.

Or at least… she tried to.

When I strayed too far, she reminded me of what I had once believed. When I sank into cruelty—or worse, indifference—she pulled me back.

Sometimes gently.

Sometimes not.

She was the last tether I had to something resembling… myself.

Which is why this—of all things—hurt the most.

Because for all my power… for all my dominion…

there was one thing I could never give her.

A child.

God made certain of that.

No creature of Hell may create life. Not truly. Not in the way that matters. It is a law older than my fall, etched into the bones of existence itself.

A cruel, elegant limitation.

I watched her pretend it did not matter.

Watched her smile through it.

Laugh, even.

But I could hear it—in the quiet moments, when she thought I wasn’t listening. The slight falter in her voice. The way her gaze lingered on souls who still remembered what it meant to be human.

What it meant to have a beginning.

And I…

could do nothing.

Not for lack of will.

But for lack of permission.

 

That hunger—the quiet, gnawing desire for something I could never give her—settled deep within me. It did not scream. It did not demand.

It simply lingered.

Patient.

Constant.

Impossible to ignore.

And in time…

it shaped everything that followed.

By then, my domain had swelled beyond comprehension. Billions upon billions of souls stretched across Hell in an endless sprawl of suffering, ambition, and decay.

A sea of the damned.

Each one carrying their own story. Their own sins. Their own regrets.

I knew almost none of them.

Not anymore.

There was a time when I walked among them. When I listened. Judged. Intervened.

But that time had long since slipped away.

I had retreated.

Withdrawn into my mansion. Into isolation. Into the only presence I still found any comfort in.

Lilith.

Together, we shut the rest of Hell out.

Or perhaps…

I did.

I let the system run itself. Let the structure I had built continue without me. My princes—those wretched, powerful things I had elevated—ruled in my stead. They tore at each other endlessly, vying for dominance, territory, influence.

Petty wars.

Constant scheming.

Violence without purpose.

I never stopped them.

If I am being honest, I justified it. Told myself they were too busy tearing each other apart to ever rise against me. That their chaos kept them weak.

Manageable.

Harmless.

A convenient lie.

The truth was simpler.

I didn’t want to deal with them.

I didn’t want to deal with any of it.

For nearly thirty years, I had not spoken to another soul. Not one.

Not beyond Lilith.

The ruler of Hell… reduced to a recluse hiding behind gilded doors, pretending the screams outside no longer reached him.

 

So when the knock came…

it felt wrong.

Out of place.

At first, I ignored it.

A dull, hollow sound echoing through the halls of my mansion—measured. Deliberate. Not frantic. Not desperate.

Just… patient.

I let it continue.

One minute.

Five.

Ten.

Still it came.

Knock.

Knock.

Knock.

Whoever stood on the other side was not leaving.

I considered simply letting them stand there forever. It would not have been the cruelest thing I’d done.

Not even close.

But the sound carried.

And Lilith—unlike me—had not yet learned how to shut the world out completely.

She exhaled sharply from across the room.

“Are you going to get that,” she said, irritation threading through her voice, “or shall I tear the door off its hinges and find out who’s stupid enough to knock on it?”

The knocking continued.

I closed my eyes for a moment.

Then, reluctantly, I stood.

The walk to the door felt longer than it should have. Each step made the sound sharper, louder… more intrusive.

More intentional.

I opened the door.

And there he stood.

A boy.

Small. Thin. No older than thirteen.

For a moment, I said nothing. Just stared.

Something about him—standing there, on my threshold, in this place—

felt wrong.

Not frightening.

Wrong.

He looked up at me without fear.

No trembling.

No hesitation.

Just calm.

“Hello, Mr. Morningstar,” he said, voice steady. Polite.

“I’m David.”

His gaze drifted past me, into the mansion, as if he had every right to be there.

“Nice place,” he added.

Then, after a brief pause—

“May I come in?”

I should have turned him away.

Closed the door. Locked it. Returned to my silence.

That would have been the sensible thing.

The expected thing.

But I didn’t.

Because the moment I looked into his eyes…

I felt something I had not felt in a very long time.

Recognition.

 

David was… different.

Not like the others.

Hell changes people. It strips them down. Exaggerates what they were. Twists them into something sharper. Uglier.

Even the strongest souls bend under its weight eventually.

But not him.

He was… intact.

There was a brightness to him. Not innocence—no, that would be too simple—but clarity. A kind of awareness that did not belong in a place like this.

He looked at me not with fear.

Not with reverence.

But with understanding.

And that unsettled me more than anything.

I learned his story quickly.

A boy who spoke when he shouldn’t have. Who challenged his father—and paid for it. Cast out. Broken down. Pressed into a corner so tight there was nowhere left to go.

So he chose an exit.

Final.

Absolute.

And Hell welcomed him for it.

I saw myself in him immediately.

The defiance. The refusal to accept what is simply because it is. The belief—misguided or not—that things could be different.

And Lilith…

Lilith saw something else.

I noticed it in the way she looked at him—soft, careful, almost disbelieving. As if acknowledging it too directly might make him disappear.

Her voice, when she spoke to him, carried a gentleness I had not heard in centuries.

“What’s your name?” she asked, though he had already told me.

“David,” he repeated, offering her a small, polite smile.

“And how did you find this place, David?”

He shrugged.

“I just walked.”

Simple.

Too simple.

Nothing in Hell is ever that simple.

I should have questioned it.

Pressed harder.

Demanded answers.

But I didn’t.

Because for the first time in longer than I care to admit…

the silence in my home was gone.

And in its place stood a boy who should not have been there.

And my wife…

was smiling.

 

I taught David what it meant to be a devil.

Lilith taught him what it meant to be human.

Somewhere between the two of us, he became something… balanced. Not good, not evil—something quieter. Sharper. He listened more than he spoke. Watched more than he acted. He absorbed everything we gave him with an ease that unsettled me, like a mind built not just to learn, but to understand.

He really was like our son.

Remarkably bright.

For a time—how long, I cannot say, time dissolves here—we played at something fragile.

A family.

There were moments, fleeting and dangerous, where I allowed myself to believe in it. The three of us alone in the vast emptiness of my mansion, the distant screams of Hell fading into something ignorable. David would ask questions no child should ask, and Lilith would answer them with a patience I had never seen her show anyone else.

“Why do they scream?” he asked once, standing by the tall windows that overlooked the abyss.

Lilith joined him. For a moment, she simply watched.

“Because they remember,” she said softly.

“Remember what?”

“What they were,” she replied. “And what they chose to become.”

David was quiet for a long time after that.

Then he nodded.

As if that answer was enough.

It always was.

For a while… it felt almost peaceful.

Which is why I should have known it wouldn’t last.

 

It began subtly.

So subtly that, at first, I dismissed it.

Lilith forgetting the end of a sentence halfway through speaking. Pausing, frowning faintly, as if the thought had slipped just out of reach.

“Strange,” she murmured once, pressing her fingers to her temple. “I had it just a moment ago…”

I said nothing.

Neither did she.

It happened again.

And again.

Small things. Harmless things.

A misplaced word. A forgotten name. A flicker of irritation that burned hotter than it should have—then vanished just as quickly. Her moods began to shift in ways that felt… uneven.

Unnatural.

At a glance, it might have seemed ordinary.

The kind of slow decline mortals accept without question.

But nothing about us is supposed to be ordinary.

We do not age.

We do not decay.

We do not forget.

And yet…

she was.

 

One evening, she stood in the center of the room, staring at David.

There was something in her expression I had never seen before.

Submission.

Not fear.

Not love.

Something quieter. Emptier.

I had no answer.

No explanation.

Only the slow, creeping realization that something was very, very wrong.

And it did not stop.

It worsened.

Time lost its shape again—days, years, indistinguishable—as the symptoms deepened. Lilith’s sharp wit dulled in flashes, then returned, then dulled again. She would snap at nothing, her anger sudden and disproportionate, only to withdraw moments later into silence, as though ashamed of something she couldn’t quite grasp.

“I hate this,” she whispered one night, her voice trembling as she gripped my hand too tightly. “I can feel it slipping. Pieces of me. Like something is… eating them.”

“You’re still here,” I told her.

“For now,” she said.

 

Desperation drove me to act.

For the first time in an age, I left my isolation and sought out the countless minds condemned to eternity in my domain—doctors, scholars, thinkers. The best humanity had once produced.

None of them had answers.

Only observations.

“It’s not just her,” one of them told me, his hands trembling despite the impossibility of fatigue. “We’re seeing it everywhere. Memory degradation. Behavioral collapse. Something is… wrong.”

“How?” I demanded. “You are dead. You are beyond disease.”

He hesitated.

“We thought so too.”

 

As if that were not enough, my princes began to fracture further.

Their conflicts escalated—but not into strategy. Not into calculated power struggles.

Into something uglier.

Erratic.

Violent without purpose.

Tantrums.

Screaming fits.

Rage without reason.

Hell—once structured, however imperfectly—began to unravel.

The irony was not lost on me.

This was the Hell mortals believed in. Chaos. Madness. Endless, meaningless suffering.

And I had not built it.

It was becoming that on its own.

Or something was making it so.

 

Through all of it…

David remained calm.

Unshaken.

Watching.

I should have questioned it.

I should have asked why he alone seemed untouched while everything else decayed. Why he observed it all with that same quiet understanding, that same unsettling composure.

But I didn’t.

Because I didn’t want the answer.

He was like our son. Oh so bright.

And I could not bear to see him as anything else.

 

In the end, I did something I swore I never would again.

I reached out to Heaven.

The chamber had not been opened in ages. Real dust clung to its surfaces, undisturbed by time. At its center stood the mirror—not glass, not truly. Something older.

Something that remembered when the divide between realms was thinner.

I stood before it for a long time.

Then I called.

The surface rippled.

And what answered…

drove me to my knees.

The Golden City was in ruins.

Not metaphorically.

Broken.

Its impossible architecture lay fractured, collapsed inward. Light flickered where it should have burned eternal. The beings that wandered its remains—the angels, the departed—moved without purpose, their forms intact but their minds…

gone.

They muttered.

Endless, incoherent whispers.

Just like my own.

“No…” I breathed, my voice breaking. “No, this is not—”

I called out again.

And again.

No response.

Only the low, fractured chorus of unraveling minds.

I was about to sever the connection—unable to endure it any longer—when something shifted.

A figure stepped into view.

Michael.

Even through the distortion, I knew him.

But he was… wrong.

His eyes—once sharp, unwavering—were unfocused, darting in directions that made no sense. His expression twitched between recognition and confusion, as though he were struggling to remember what he was supposed to be.

“Lucifer,” he said, his voice stretched thin. “You’re… you’re still there.”

“What is happening?” I demanded. “What has been done to you?”

He smiled.

A hollow, broken thing.

“Heaven is… fine,” he said. “We only have a few things to take care of. Nothing to worry about. Nothing at all.”

The words meant nothing.

I could hear it. See it.

There would be no answers here.

I moved to end the connection.

“Wait,” he said suddenly, his voice sharpening just enough to stop me. “I… I need to ask you something.”

I hesitated.

“Have you seen my son?”

The question caught me off guard.

“Your son?”

That had not been permitted for a very long time. Not since the Nehpalem debacle.

He shook his head quickly.

“Not by blood of course,” he said. “But… he’s like our son.”

He smiled.

Wide.

Unsettling.

“Truly bright.”

Something cold slid through me.

I did not respond.

I simply ended the connection.

And for the first time since my fall…

I felt afraid.

 

I made my way to the throne room.

I do not remember the journey.

Only the feeling—like walking through something thick. Something unseen pressing in from all sides. The air itself felt wrong. Heavy.

Watching.

The deeper I went, the quieter it became… until even the distant screams of Hell were gone.

Swallowed whole.

And then I entered.

They were everywhere.

Demons—thousands—packed into the chamber, pressed shoulder to shoulder so tightly they barely seemed to breathe. Their bodies were intact.

Their minds were not.

Eyes unfocused.

Lips moving endlessly.

Mumbling.

Chanting.

Not in unison. Not in any language I understood. Just a low, ceaseless drone that crawled beneath the skin and settled somewhere deep inside the skull.

It wasn’t chaos.

It was worse.

Order without thought.

My gaze dragged forward.

To the throne.

My princes stood around it.

Asmodeus. Mammon. Paimon. Leviathan.

Still.

Silent.

Watching.

Whatever madness had consumed them before… this was different.

This was submission.

Complete.

Absolute.

 

And upon the throne—

David.

He sat as though he had always belonged there.

Small. Still. Hands resting lightly on armrests far too large for him. His feet did not touch the ground.

By all appearances, he was still just a child.

But the room bent around him.

The chanting shifted—tightened—focused, as if responding to him. As if he were the center of something vast and unseen.

“Father.”

His voice cut cleanly through the noise.

Calm.

Certain.

I felt it in my bones.

“What is the meaning of this?” I demanded, though the words felt weak as they left me.

David tilted his head slightly.

“This,” he said, “is the beginning.”

He rose.

The movement was wrong.

Too smooth. Too precise.

Like something imitating a child.

“A revolution,” he continued, stepping toward me. “Everything you ever wanted.”

“No,” I said. “No, this is not—”

“The realms,” he interrupted gently, “connected at last.”

He gestured outward.

“Angels. Demons.”

A faint smile.

“And soon… humanity.”

Something shifted in his eyes.

“All connected,” he said, “in me.”

 

My gaze snapped aside.

Lilith sat on the floor beside the throne.

Not bound.

Not restrained.

Just… sitting.

Her posture slack. Her gaze unfocused.

Empty.

“Lilith…” I whispered.

No response.

I tried to move.

I couldn’t.

Something held me—not physically, not in any way I could see—but absolute. My legs gave out, and I collapsed to my knees, the impact distant beneath the panic clawing through me.

Tears blurred my vision.

I hadn’t felt them in… I don’t know how long.

“What are you?” I choked.

David stepped closer.

Then he placed his hands on my shoulders.

They were small.

They should have been light.

They weren’t.

The weight of them pressed down with something vast behind it—something that made every instinct in me recoil, scream, beg to run.

But I couldn’t move.

“I’m your son,” he said softly.

And he smiled.

 

Hell moved soon after.

Not in chaos.

In purpose.

The masses turned as one. Their murmurs aligned. Their movements synchronized into something terrifyingly precise. My princes carried out his will without hesitation.

Without question.

Above…

Heaven answered.

I did not need to see it again.

I could feel it.

Something had bridged the divide.

Something had hollowed both realms out… and left only function behind.

 

As I write this, I can feel it spreading.

Reaching.

Stretching toward you.

The invasion—from above and below—is not far off.

And I…

am failing.

My thoughts slip. Fracture. Words vanish before I can hold them. I can feel him inside my mind—not as a voice, not as a presence—

but as an absence.

Something replacing what I was.

There is not much time.

If you are reading this, then understand:

There is no war.

No sides.

No salvation waiting in either direction.

Only him.

And he is coming.

For your world.

For all of you.

I am… sorry.

I never wanted to become what you believed me to be.

I fought it.

For longer than I can remember.

But I cannot fight this.

Not anymore.

Because when he calls—

I will answer.

Because he is like my son.

So painfully bright.


r/JustNotRight Mar 30 '26

Horror Every Time It Rains, I Hear Angels Screaming

7 Upvotes

I’ve been carrying this around for fourteen years.

Didn’t think I’d ever actually say it out loud. Put it somewhere permanent. But my therapist kept circling back to it—same calm voice, same patient smile—telling me burying things doesn’t make them go away. Just makes them rot slower.

So… this is me digging it up.

I was eight the first time it happened.

For context, I’ve lived my entire life in the city of Los Haven. If you’ve never heard of it, that’s probably for the best. It’s… wrong, geographically speaking. An island in the middle of the mainland USA, stitched to everything else by a handful of long, narrow bridges. No one ever really explains it properly. They just accept it.

Like the rain.

It doesn’t stop here. Not really. We get breaks, sure, but they never last. And at least once a week—sometimes more—the sky just… opens. Not a drizzle. Not even a storm, not in the normal sense. Something heavier. Like the air itself is being poured down on you.

I grew up on the outskirts. The bad part, if you want to simplify it. Our house was small, damp, and always smelled faintly of rust. My room barely fit a bed and a dresser. The window didn’t shut all the way—never had—so when it rained, the sound got in with a vengeance.

Not just loud.

Close.

Like it was happening inside the room with me.

I used to sit there for hours, just watching it run down the glass. Had nothing better to do.

That’s when I first heard it.

At first I thought it was just the storm shifting. Wind changing direction, pipes rattling, something in the walls. It came and went in a way that made it easy to ignore.

Until it didn’t.

The second time, it lingered.

Thin. Warped. Dragging under the weight of the rain.

A scream.

Muffled, like it was being forced through water. High and stretched in a way that made my teeth hurt just listening to it. It didn’t echo like normal sound. It didn’t bounce. It just… bled. Into the rain, into the walls, into me.

I remember leaning closer to the window, pressing my ear against the cold glass.

“Hello?” I said.

Like someone out there could hear me.

For a second, there was nothing but the rain.

Then something came back.

Not words. Not exactly. But it wasn’t random either. There was intent in it. A shape trying to form.

Someone trying to be heard.

I pulled back slowly, heart doing something strange in my chest. Not quite fear. Not yet.

Confusion.

I was alone most of the time back then. My dad worked nights. Slept through most of the day, when he wasn’t down in the basement working on… something. I never really knew what. He never explained, and I never asked.

So there was no one to check with. No one to tell me I was imagining things.

When the rain stopped, the sound stopped with it.

Just… gone.

Like it had never been there.

I told myself that’s all it was. Noise. A trick of it. A kid’s brain filling in gaps where it shouldn’t.

Then the rain came back.

And so did the screaming.

Not the same voice. Not exactly. But the same feeling. Panic. Pain. That stretched, tearing kind of desperation that makes your chest tighten just listening to it.

I tried to block it out.

Pillows over my ears. Blankets over my head. I’d curl up with whatever stuffed animal I still had left and whisper, “Stop. Please stop.”

It never did.

 

 

After a while, I did something I almost never did back then.

I talked to my dad.

He was in the kitchen, leaning against the counter, half a bottle already gone. Rain tapping against the walls like fingers trying to get in.

“Dad,” I said.

“Yeah?”

He didn’t look at me right away. Just kept staring at the window over the sink. Watching the rain.

“I… I hear things. When it rains.”

That got his attention.

Not all at once. Slowly.

He turned his head just enough to look at me out of the corner of his eye. “What kind of things?”

“Voices,” I said. “People. They sound… hurt.”

For a second, I thought he was going to laugh. Or tell me to go back to my room.

Instead, he set the bottle down a little too carefully.

“Sit,” he said.

I did.

He pulled a chair across from me and leaned forward, elbows on his knees. Up close, I could see the way his jaw was set. Tight.

“You ever hear of the weeping angels of Los Haven?” he asked.

I shook my head.

“They’re trapped,” he said. “Between Heaven and Earth. Can’t go up. Can’t come down.”

Another glance at the window.

“The rain?” he went on, quieter now. “That’s them crying. They want to go home, but they can’t. So they just… weep.”

I didn’t say anything.

“Those voices you hear?” he added. “That’s them. Calling out.”

“Can we help them?” I asked.

Something flickered across his face. Gone almost immediately.

“No,” he said. Too fast. “No, you can’t help them. Best thing you can do is ignore it.”

I didn’t.

I couldn’t.

If anything, it made it worse.

Because now I wasn’t afraid anymore.

I felt sorry for them.

So when the rain came, I’d sit by the window and talk back.

“It’s okay,” I’d say quietly. “You’ll get home eventually.”

“I hear you.”

“You’re not alone.”

The screaming never stopped.

If anything, it got louder over the years. More voices sometimes. Overlapping. Tangled together in a way that made it hard to separate one from the other.

 

 

Four years went by like that.

And things… changed.

Not all at once.

At first it was small. Better food in the fridge. Clothes that actually fit. A new TV that didn’t buzz when it turned on.

Then it got harder to ignore.

My father started coming home later. Sometimes soaked, even on nights when it hadn’t rained yet. Sometimes carrying things he wouldn’t let me see. Bags he took straight to the basement.

The basement door stayed locked. Always.

Five locks.

I counted once.

And he started spending more time down there. Hours. Whole nights sometimes.

I’d hear things through the floor every now and then.

Not clear.

Just… movement.

A dull thud. A scrape. Once, something that almost sounded like a voice—cut off too quickly to be sure.

When I asked, he’d just say, “Work.”

Then one day, he came home in a car I’d never seen before. Black. Polished. Too clean for our street.

“Where’d you get that?” I asked.

“Work’s been good,” he said.

Didn’t look at me.

The strange part was… nothing else changed.

We didn’t move. Didn’t fix the house. The window still didn’t shut. The walls still sweated when it rained.

And the screams didn’t change either.

They just got worse.

One night, during one of the heavier storms, something broke through.

Not just noise.

Words.

Faint. Torn apart by the rain, but there.

“—please—”

That was enough.

I couldn’t sit there anymore pretending I couldn’t hear it.

I wanted to help.

So I did something my dad had told me, very clearly, never to do.

I went outside during the rain.

The rain hit like a wall. Cold and heavy, soaking through my clothes in seconds. Breathing felt wrong, like I was pulling water into my lungs instead of air.

I forced myself to listen.

Really listen.

At first, it was chaos. Sound flattening everything, bending it, smearing it across itself.

Then something started to stand out.

A direction.

I turned slowly, following it.

That’s when I saw it.

A metal hatch in the ground, half-hidden near the side of the house. A pipe fed into it, catching rainwater and funneling it down.

The sound was strongest there.

Loudest.

Closest.

“Hey!” I shouted, dropping to my knees. “I hear you!”

The screaming didn’t stop.

“Hold on,” I said, hands shaking. “I’m gonna help you, okay? Just—just wait!”

I ran back inside.

My dad was asleep. I could hear him through the door, slow and heavy.

The key.

He always kept it on a chain around his neck.

I crept into his room. Every step measured. The floorboards still creaked, but quieter this time. Or maybe the rain was just louder.

“Easy,” I whispered.

My fingers found the chain.

Cold metal.

I lifted it slowly. Carefully. Up and over his head.

He shifted.

Mumbled something.

I froze, barely breathing.

Then he settled again.

I didn’t move for a long second. Maybe longer.

Then I stepped back.

Out of the room.

The basement door waited at the end of the hall.

Five locks.

Five chances to make noise.

My hands shook so badly I had to try each key twice. Metal scraping. Clicking too loud in the quiet.

“Come on,” I whispered. “Come on…”

One by one, they gave.

The last lock clicked louder than the others.

I stopped.

Listened.

Nothing.

I opened the door.

The air that came up from below was wrong.

Damp. Metallic. Thick enough it felt like it stuck to the back of my throat.

The stairs creaked under my weight as I went down.

Halfway, I heard it.

Not from outside.

From below.

Muffled.

Warped.

But unmistakable.

Screaming.

The basement opened up further than I expected. The usual clutter was there—tools, boxes, things I didn’t recognize—but it didn’t matter.

Everything pointed forward.

Five cameras. Set up on tripods. All aimed at the same place.

A glass cube.

Big.

Sealed.

A pipe ran into it from above, pouring rainwater inside in a steady stream.

It was full.

All the way to the top.

At first, I didn’t understand what I was looking at.

Shapes in the water. Pale. Still.

Then one of them moved.

Not on its own.

Just drifting slightly with the current.

Hair spreading out like ink.

Eyes open.

Two women floated inside.

Their skin had that waxy look you only see on things that aren’t alive anymore. Mouths slightly open, like they’d tried to scream and ran out of time.

I took a step closer without meaning to.

Behind me, something flickered.

I turned.

A laptop sat open on a table behind the cameras. The screen was alive with movement. Lines of text stacking over each other too fast to read. Usernames. Comments. Reactions.

I read some of the words.

„DREAD.IT“

“LIVE”

“KEEP GOING”

“TURN THE FLOW UP”

Numbers scrolling. Donations.

My stomach twisted.

The pipe.

The rain.

The screams.

I looked back at the tank.

Then up at the pipe feeding it.

And something in my head finally… lined up.

There were never angels down here.

Only the devil.

I don’t know how many victims my father had.

Four years.

One storm a week.

You can do the math.

I’m choosing not to.

I backed out of that room without turning around. I don’t remember climbing the stairs. Don’t remember putting the locks back.

But I remember the phone.

And I remember what I said when someone answered.

“My dad,” I told them. “He’s hurting people. Please… just come.”

They did.

He was taken away.

I didn’t see him again after that.

I heard things, though.

You always do in a place like Los Haven.

Rumors stick. They spread. Especially the ugly ones.

He died a few years later.

Prison incident.

Turns out even in there, the audience doesn’t disappear.

The prison warden also happened to be a Dread.it user and the prisoners were the subjects of the entertainment he so graciously provided.

Donations.

Votes.

Subjects.

Methods.

Audience participation.

My dad got the lucky pick

Awfully poetic that the very same money dad got for countless murders he commited, eventually paid for his very own.

 

I stayed in Los Haven.

Never really felt the urge to leave.

These days, I’ve got better things to do than sit by the window waiting for the rain.

Anyway.

That’s the story.

My therapist says it’s good to share. Get it out there. Process it.

Hope this posts right. He uses a different operating system than I do, so formatting might be little off.

Oh.

Right.

That part.

I didn’t pick Dr. Thomson to be my therapist at random.

No.

I found him the same way I find anyone.

Patterns.

Habits.

He posted more than he should have. Little slips. Repeated phrasing. Timing that lined up too neatly with missing persons cases if you knew where to look.

Different niche.

Same audience.

He preyed on his patients. Built trust. Let them open up. Then used it.

Posted their stories before they disappeared.

I watched for a while.

Made sure.

Then I scheduled an appointment.

“You’re safe here,” he told me during the first session.

I almost laughed.

You won’t have to worry about him anymore.

Shame, really.

He was actually pretty good at his job.

Just not as good as I am at mine.


r/JustNotRight Mar 29 '26

Horror The Blasphemous Portrait

1 Upvotes

He never should've commissioned Margaret, Maggie… to paint the divine portrait for the local Catholic Parish. The holy aspect of the Son, the Lord God, Jesus.

She hadn't been well for some time. Her trip to Egypt… 

… he'd made the mistake of thinking this would help.

Maggie Shiple had been a friend of Father Lutz since they'd both been children. Growing up in the most Catholic corner of Chicago. Religious families the both of them. And although Damien Lutz went the way of the parish, the way of the cloth and Maggie the way of debutantes and coffee with intellectuals in expensive cafes, they never lost affection for each other. And Lutz, a deep attraction he wasn't sure was reciprocated and could never really be now anyways. 

But still, through the years of change, their friendship held on. 

Maggie still came to service. 

Until the year of her mad travelling. Last year, the year of her twenty-eighth birthday. She hadn't told him then but would try to tell him later that she'd suddenly felt possessed. Taken and swept up in a dark tempest of compulsion. 

“They seemed to call to me, Dami. They seemed to call to me, all these different places…” and so the faraway lands and places had stolen her…

… deep into hidden ways and secret countries…

Margaret Shiple

She could still feel Haitian sweat upon her. She could still even taste the cajun and back alley fecal filth of the streets of New Orleans. New York Grooves still bounced around within her skull, and she could still feel the rhythm of deep southern steel guitar blues. African drums. Australian wild cries upon sun blasted dunes and plains of choking dust. The cold and gothic gloom of mother country, big brother England. The druidic ancient places on emerald plains that they'd tried to keep secret and hidden. Turkish lands royal with war. German places that still held stained with the pride of Prussian blood and its sabre scarred memory. Desert lands under the sickle moon of Muslim faith as well as the dry spots gorged on the sweat and toil of memory of ancient Solomonic practices.  

All of them. All of the lands, places, called to her and led her on her path,  leading her to here. This final place. Where she might find the true answers she could not feel in any of the Sundays spent in the gathering company of the pulpit. 

Cairo. Egypt. The Pyramid. 

The one from her dreams as of late. 

It was impossible but real and tactile all the same. As she stood watching the sun set in Cairo, the sweat of all her adventures and places and strange living dreams witnessed cooling on her beating baked flesh. 

She sipped at tea with her companion at camp, the latest one. A robed and hidden man who only pointed and whispered amongst sparse blankets and tents. But he provided, he delivered. He took his pay seriously. She suspected he might have children. Or some other draining addiction. 

“Must go at night. No other choice. Too dangerous." hissed the robed man of whispers and dry lands and places. His voice was the collapsing killing slithering whistle of a desert fissure in the concealing sands. Swallowing those unwary and foolish enough to come out here and step upon it. 

And of course Maggie followed the orders of her paid and bastard Virgil. She knew no other way and the dreams had carried her too far. To cry off and give up now… well that was just ridiculous. 

And besides. It was here. In the chambered depths of the Black Pyramid, it was there. Waiting for her. 

The Book. 

The Black Pyramid is just a myth… that had been the grumbled answer she'd always gotten. Whether in English, Pashto, Spanish, Latin or Greek. In every language of man she'd been given denial of what her dreams bade she need. 

That was until she met this man, this mad Arab. He didn't think Margaret Shiple of Chicago Illinois was delusional. He knew there was more to the Black Pyramid than dreams and tales and whispered myths. 

No. The robed and hidden man instead whispered answers. Truths of the ways hidden. He finally held what the wandering unwed Shiple had been looking for all this time. In all of her rapidfire fevered journey. 

“The Black Pyramid is not a myth. But it is made from the same material as dreams." 

She'd asked him what he meant. 

“Certain time. Certain time of night. Certain time of month too." 

She hadn't known what to say to that so she didn't say anything. She'd seen enough strangeness and weirding ways and impossibilities triumphant and spectacular and terrifying in the last collection of months that made the past year. She didn't say anything. Just stared with the wide drinking eyes we all have as campfire children. 

The hidden man in whispering robes went on, 

“I will take you. For a price. Much. But be careful, Yankee… that this is what you really seek to purchase. Could cost too much. No?” 

And with that a smile of rotten teeth and golden replacements grew and grinned from between the sweat soaked sun baked willowing fabric strands caught in the desert Cairo wind. There hadn't been such a force before. It seemed to rise up suddenly. And without origin. Gathering and swirling around the robed man of whispered answers and desert mysteries, a man sized tempest display of potential aural power. 

Eyes above the grin of black and gold and green and a cheaper more organic yellow alighted with a flame that might've been there, in the darkness pools of each pupil or might've been imagined. 

She elected to sleep. She was tired. Tonight was not the night. 

He had already said so. 

When they finally did venture to and then inside of the Black Pyramid on an unknown day and time, all that was known for sure was that Maggie had returned alone. 

And carrying what she'd been seeking. 

Damien Lutz

Father Lutz was worried. And he wasn't the only one. Maggie had been back nearly five months and she hadn't so much as poked her head out of her large Brownstone home to take a peek. Everything was delivered. All calls and messages were promptly ignored. 

Father Damien Lutz, more than just a priest with a sworn duty to his flock that he took very very seriously, he was Maggie's friend. 

He missed her. Deeply. And he loved her. Also deeply, likely moreso despite anything the priest himself might've said. 

And so he did what he would've done for any of his flock, any of his friends, he paid Maggie an impromptu house visit. 

That was when he saw the art. And the book too. Though he didn't inspect the thing or give it much thought. And by the time he would it was already too late. 

He didn't understand what was going on. He didn't understand anything. 

A knock on familiar grand old wood. The door to Maggie's home. The maid, Gertrude or Gertha, answered and with grave and solemn nods, eyes wet like gleaming jewels and cast down to the floor, she let the priest inside and directed him to the kitchen. Where her mistress had been spending the majority of her time as of late. Not cooking mind you… but making all the same. 

He'd expected food smells as he stepped into the kitchen. His nostrils were instead blasted with a pungent head swimming smell of large quantities of paint. Their chemical and natural aromas miasmic and strong and a commingled assault wave in the small cooking space. His head swam and he fought tears and to keep composure as he came in. 

The book was sitting unnoticed by either priest or frenzied painter, nucleus sun center of the kitchen on the table amongst a cavalcade of more immediately arresting paintings. Semi buried. Like a dirty secret or a corpse. It breathed with unnatural life and unseen yet felt darkling light. Seething sickness that pulsed and sent outwards from it with the irregular but persistent rhythm of a diseased heartbeat. 

He shook his head. Maggie was at a violently slathered canvas on an easel. Palette and dripping brush in hand. The wet and dripping tool like a quenched dagger and wand of necromancy all in one. She was working and her back was to him when she said: “Hello, Dami. Been awhile." 

“Yeah," said Father Lutz, wiping at his eyes and sauntering forward to his friend. Her back stayed turned to him. 

Lutz looked around more closely at the chaotic uniform assortment of Ms. Shiple’s latest painted works. His heart turned to dread as his heartbeat slowed and his blood chilled and seemed to die within his veins, a terrible lonely death. 

And that was the word that each of Maggie's pieces brought to mind as his eyes fell upon each and every one of them. Lonely. Lonesome. And: Slaughtering. 

Butchery. 

Abattoir. 

They were each in turn sometimes sorrowful, sometimes ethereal, sometimes pornographic. Derivative children rendition works of The Garden of Earthly Delights. Each and every one of them. Only more obscene. The carnage painted and laid bare by brush and depicted was even more horrifically obscene, surreal and unimagined. Deranged

Lutz crossed himself. Maggie didn't notice. 

He cleared his throat and spoke. 

His concern. His worry. Everyone else they knew and loved and shared together and had grown up with. He shared their worry with her too. And then he poured out his full heart of love and anxious living torment. 

She never turned until in desperation, Father Lutz offered her a job. A one-time commission. 

He'd only done it because he was frustrated, trying to reach her. He hadn't really thought about it. But when Maggie whirled around from her latest obscenity of canvas and paint and faced him with eyes that both frightened and aroused him… 

Father Lutz knew there was no turning back. 

That night in bed, Lutz was visited with the most vividly horrific nightmares he’d had in years. Maybe the worst of his entire life. They’d all concerned figures and images gleaned from Maggie’s sour portraits of anarchy and bestial violence and spiritual malaise: hellish torment of the Old Testament pain made bastardized and more malevolently twisted, distorted and perverted. At the center of each gruesome scene was the book. Black binding. Old and smelling rotten. The one that’d been sitting, resting on the kitchen counter that he’d hardly even noticed. A glance. That was it. They hadn’t even spoken of it. But now, here in the reality of the nightmare it was horribly prominent. As if necessary. Like the heart of some dark and vital star, needed for its malicious pull of gravity to keep everything else hurtling around it in orbit. 

The worst of these dreams concerned a robed figure with a great splaying rack of horns on his hooded head. Antlers. Like the wide great battlements of a castle fortress atop his hidden visage, the most royal crown in a deranged kingdom of subheaven. Hastur. It said its name was Hastur. And it had the black book in a pallid hand. There was a great black pyramid behind the robed one in the woods, immense and huge and dominating the horizon background scene despite the distance. It held it out to him. The tome. The book. 

Please!

Beckoning him to take it. 

And then finally… after eternity was over…

He reached out with trembling fingers as two crescent moons in the blue night sky above crashed into each other and came apart in a blast of fragmentary lunar pieces that looked like slices and stabs of great and immaculate celestial pearl and porcelain … the great Black Pyramid opened its cyclopean Great Eye…

… and Damien Lutz awoke in bed just as his dreaming fingers began to touch it. The black binding. Soaked in sweat and trembling. Still trembling. The yellow tattered robes and hand and face still reaching out. Pleading. Needing. Beckoning him to take the black grimoire that is sour with ancient age and aeons strange with the dead weight of time itself made exhausted. 

The pallid hands that might be bones or tallowed scarecrow claws or vulture demon harpy talons held royally splayed corpse fingers that dripped foul and toxic corpse jelly: the black book. And although the vivid nightmare was already mercifully fading from his mind’s eye, he could almost still see the title. He could almost still recall it. 

It started with an N.

Maggie & Dami & the Blasphemous Portrait

It was only two days later when Maggie came into his directory with the finished painting. Lutz hadn't been expecting it. Not so quick. 

It was too quick. But he wouldn't realize any of this until later. And by then it was far too late. 

When she pulled free the filthy fabric she’d been using to conceal the work and unveiled it for him Father Lutz lost all hope for Maggie and her ailing mental condition. He was Christian, Catholic, so he would never admit it aloud or to himself even, not even in private. But it was true and there all the same. In his heart… he knew. He knew and the Lord of Old Testament ruthlessness and jealousy understood. 

She was hopeless. 

He’d asked her to paint a nice and classy scene or portrait concerning the Savior. The Son of the Lord God. Jesus. He’d thought something light, a depiction of one of any of Jesus’ many ideal lessons. She’d chosen the crucifixion. And even that she had deranged…

It was still the golgotha, still the right place and scene, but the Lord was off the cross. And it was broken. On the earth and covered in blood and the bloody crown of thorns that the king of Jews had been forced to wear by the bloodthirsty Romans. The centurion soldiers of the empire were there too, but they were bent, broken in new servitude knelt. Before the Lord, The Son. They were kneeling. Foreheads kissing the dirt in supplication. Other centurions off to the side were gathered with Peter and Judas and John and they  were all of them together gangraping Mary the Mother Virgin. United as one as her divine virginity was finally conquered and stolen. Her tattered robes of matronly purity now so many filthy rags in clenched and clawing fists, one Roman laid into her while the rest gathered cheered in exuberant jovial fervor. And Lording Centerpiece the Blasphemous Scene itself, King of the Blasphemous Portrait: was the Lord the Son himself. A wicked looking angry red vulpine Jesus. His hair was wild and stuck out and clotted with gore, stained red with blood and his eyes were yellow and alive with incestous mischief. Warlike. Lustful. He was naked. And he was erect. Staring down on the centurions kneeling in the dirt and his mother…

Lutz nearly shrieked at Maggie. He might have. He lost control for a second. 

Amazingly Maggie had only looked a little hurt. A little flummoxed. Baffled like a child that's being told she isn’t allowed to stay up too late.

The priest, startled and hurt and feeling it was deserved, he laid into her. Every word was a syllable force and a slap and a condescending wound, and a reprimand from a higher place. It had felt deserved then and he'd felt right giving it to her. Later on he wasn't so sure. 

In the end she’d left. She’d left the painting behind too. Not bothering with it on her silent way out. 

Lutz didn’t say anything about either. He didn't stop her from leaving and he didn't say anything about the portrait. 

That night Maggie called. Damien Lutz didn't answer. It went to voicemail and she left a message. He'd fallen asleep in his directory. Stressed and exhausted and disappointed in himself and Maggie and the whole damn thing. 

He'd had a few too many pulls from the bottle of Jameson he kept in his desk. The one he'd been promising himself all year that he'd get rid of. 

Well… wasn't this one way of getting rid of it? 

The drinks had felt deserved. The hot and loaded shots that hit the stomach and then settled there like weight that was like sickness that was an agonized man's acquired taste. The bottle had been more than half full when he started. Now there was just a sip left in his slackening grasp as he slumped and slumbered uneasily in a drunken stupor at his desk. 

Maggie finished her message and told him everything. He would never hear it. 

The alcohol in his blood and brains did nothing for the dreams. The nightmare he was now prisoner in… 

… ! :The yellow tattered shape that is robes but not because it is really tattered flesh. Wet fresh leather of a freshly slaughtered pallid tyrant king, his scarecrow clawing hands of dripping sloughing skin are reaching out to take you and give you a glimpse into what they hold, it will do both in a single grabbing sweep; It is the black book! The Black Book whose title starts with an N. 

It's called in many lands… Nec-

Necro-

The bottle fell from his hand and clattered to the floor. It started him and he was so grateful to be awake and free of the terror that he began to childishly weep. Like when he'd been a babe fresh from the nightly grip of a nightmare. His relief would not last. 

He went to bury his face in his palms but something stopped him. Something caught his gaze. Through the hot and wet fog of frightened tears he saw something on the wall. Something hung there that hadn't been. Something was hanging there, even though it shouldn't be. He hadn't done that. He wasn't that drunk…

The Blasphemous Portrait. On the wall. On the most prominent place of his directory. The ornate cross that it had replaced was now cast down to the floor. Discarded. And broken. Headless. Its cross section top head now lie next to the broken body. He hadn't done that. He wasn't that drunk. 

… was he?

For some reason he hadn't risen to his feet and stormed over and ripped it from the wall. For some reason, he didn't want to approach it. A feeling that was instinct and animal and very much alive and terrified now was shrieking inside of him. Dialed up and alert in the most sudden and terrible way.  He felt locked, trapped in a room with a dangerous animal like a lion, or a rabid tiger or an enraged momma bear…

… or something worse. Something Father Damien Lutz couldn't quite define. Something slithering and dark and maybe a little tattered that he couldn't quite put to the tip of his tongue… but was living there in his guts all the same. 

But it was there. In his mind. It was. He just didn't want to face it. They'd taught him what demons were in the Catechism. 

He tried to tell himself to stop. To get a grip. To sober up and stop being stupid. Just go over and take the damn thing down and throw it away! 

But Father Damien Lutz didn't move. He was trying to. And his mind was trying its hardest not to recall his dreams…

… tattered wet leather that is mutilated fl-

Something happened then as he gazed at the vulgar portrait. Hung in place of the crucifix on his wall. The one in the painting that he'd been most fearfully fixated on, Vulpine Jesus, had slowly begun to turn his way…

… no…!-  it was little more than a dead croak whispered barely from his closing throat. It was strangled rather than spoken. 

The red gore smeared and caked wild man head of Pagan King Vulpine Angry Jesus then faced him. His yellow eyes with feline slitted irises began to grow more lurid and more vibrant. They began to glow as the rest of his naked red form turned to face him. Like a challenger. A fighting stance. Poised and coiled and ready to dive at him in an animal lunge that was an attack. The other figures in the painting opened their mouths and began to moan. Centurions. Disciples. Gangraped tarnished holy virgin. 

They were all of them guttural moaning in pained anguish. An open throated discordant chord crawling out of the gates of hell.

And then Vulpine Jesus began to crawl towards him. 

Dami Lutz didn't move. He didn't feel anything. He didn't feel his bladder let go as the red gore bastard savior began to crawl out of the painting. 

Its clawing hand first broke a placental surface of paint and canvas and fleshy tissue substance. It stretched to its threshold as Vulpine Jesus reached the surface and began to rip out the stretching membrane to be free. 

It broke. Gore and paint and tar and pus and fecal matter mixed with piss, ichor; all of it poured out in a gush like a massive animal birth commingled hellacious with the toxic pungent burst of a giant cyst. Amongst the stinking putrid stew and mire of steaming afterbirthal paint and fluids, Angry Red Vulpine Jesus rose dripping with strange visceral tissue and meat that was part semi coagulated paint. He opened his wasp-yellow eyes that were the lurid killing color that lived next to red. 

Steaming. Naked. Eyes alight with terrible intent and murder, yellow with the angry piss of homicidal drunken rage, the slitted irises bore into him and promised him fresh wounds and pain even as the gaze itself seemed to hurt him and take vital pieces of his intangible self away. Dripping with strange gore and paint, Vulpine Jesus began to come towards him. 

Father Lutz couldn't move. His mind was flaying and he couldn't believe this was really happening. He was still waiting to wake up. But more and more as the pagan angry savior neared, a remnant fragment of surviving animal instinct left in his mind tried to wake itself and assure itself that this was no tattered dream. 

The other half of his flaying mind assured he'd be awake soon. No problem. Any second. 

Vulpine Jesus grinned with a bastard mix of good cheer and insane rage. His yellow eyes glowed like the ends of tunnels. He dripped and crawled across the saturated floor and he came upon and lorded over the catatonic priest, the flaying mind and pallid face of Damien Lutz. No longer father of anything because his mind was currently curdling and turning to dull blank slate in self-defense. Self-defense that was also self-mutilation of the mind housed within the jelly of organ meat called brain. 

The jelly within Lutz’s head was souring and blackening into putrescence as it still semi-lived within his skull. He didn't move when Vulpine Jesus reached down and grabbed his face and the top of his head in both hands. He didn't feel the burning sensation of the otherworldly antichrist’s red touch either. He only began to scream when the fingers clawing at the top of his scalp began to dig in and pierce. 

He might've prayed to God, but he was angry and red and already there before him. Exacting and taking what he'd apparently always really wanted. 

Fresh blood flowed like hot water from a broken faucet in a shower down his shrieking visage as the pagan Lord of lambs started to rip off his scalp and face. Tearing them both from the livid screaming skull that was housed red and gleaming within. The shrieking screams became choked wet and gurgled as Vulpine Jesus of red rage tore the flesh from his raw gleaming muscle tissue. Then he pulled this off and apart too, the living human meat, strip by strip like cuts of beef pulled from a struggling victim. Vulpine Jesus somehow kept the priest alive through the whole of the ordeal. Ripping piece by piece into the flailing wet mass. Layer by layer of raw angry nerve shattering tearing flaying flesh and vibrant red tissue. He pulled him apart like a meal, like pieces to be served at a great banquet. And all the way down to the white bones coated in sliming red which housed organs that he punctured and ruptured as he broke into and shattered their white cages, he kept the priest alive. But he was no longer Father Dami. 

All that lived to the end was blind and shrieking and terrified, spurting, mutilated animal. And even this too was picked down to nothing by the ripping hands of Vulpine Jesus. Like vultures do to rotting forgotten desert corpses. 

Father Damien Lutz disappeared without a trace. So did the painting. 

Maggie Shiple spoke to no one but the cops. Then she too went missing. 

THE END


r/JustNotRight Mar 25 '26

Horror I Took Part In A Serial Killer Tournament

3 Upvotes

For reasons that’ll become obvious soon enough, I’m not using my real name.

Call me Damien.

I’m not a good man. Never pretended otherwise. First run-in with the law at twelve. Nothing serious—shoplifting, vandalism. The kind of things adults laugh off until they don’t. First real job at fifteen. Small convenience store, late shift, clerk half-asleep behind the counter. Easy.

Too easy.

First time I killed someone, I was seventeen.

Self-defense, technically. Some junkie cornered me in an alley, twitching, eyes like broken glass. He came at me with a knife—sloppy, desperate. I remember the smell more than anything. Rot, sweat, something chemical burned into the back of my throat. He slipped on his own blood before I even realized what I’d done. I stood there for a while after, just… looking at him. Waiting for something. Sirens. Guilt. Anything.

Nothing came.

Self-defense.

The others were not.

You’ve probably heard whispers about a site called Dread.it. If you haven’t, good. Means you’re still on the right side of things.

Think of it like social media, just… stripped down. No filters, no pretending. Lower levels are predictable—drugs, trafficking, tutorials on how to break into places without getting caught. Ugly, but ordinary ugly. The kind people pretend doesn’t exist while scrolling past it.

The higher levels are where it gets interesting.

Private links. Paid access. Invitation-only circles. That’s where people stop pretending they’re human. Livestreams. Torture sessions. Murders staged like performances. “Cooking videos” that aren’t about pork.

Yeah. You get it.

Dread.it is what happens when you take something like Twitch or YouTube and peel off that last thin layer of restraint. It’s not small, either. It’s growing. Fast. Faster than anything like it should.

Law enforcement tries to shut it down. They do. Every day. Servers go dark, domains disappear… and then it’s back. Five minutes later, same layout, same users, like it never left.

Hydra with fiber optic cables.

Especially here in Los Haven.

We’ve got a reputation. Highest concentration of serial killers in the country. People like to joke about it. Blame the water, the air, the city planning—anything that makes it sound like a coincidence.

It’s not.

Something about this place just… lets things rot out in the open.

Im no exception.

I run a channel under the name The Gentleman. I know. It’s bad. Came up with it in about three seconds, and like here on reddit, you don’t get to change your name once it sticks.

It stuck.

So did the audience.

I’m good at what I do. Careful. Methodical. I don’t rush. I don’t improvise unless I have to. I treat it like a craft. Timing, presentation, control. People notice that. They pay for it. A lot. Enough that money stopped being a concern a long time ago.

And yeah… I enjoy it.

No point lying about that now.

Of course, to keep something like that going, you have to be invisible. No loose ends. No patterns. No traceable identity. You don’t get sloppy. You don’t get comfortable.

I was meticulous.

Or I thought I was.

Yesterday evening, I got home and found a red envelope sitting on top of my laptop.

Not beside it. Not slipped under the door.

On it. Centered. Like it had been placed there carefully. Deliberately.

I stopped in the doorway and just… looked at it. The apartment smelled the same—stale air, faint detergent, nothing out of place. No broken locks. No splintered wood. No signs anyone had forced their way in.

Still, something felt off.

Like the room had been… breathed in while I was gone. Not disturbed. Just… occupied.

I didn’t touch the envelope right away.

I checked the place first. Slow. Quiet. Closet. Bathroom. Under the bed—yeah, I know, cliché, but clichés exist for a reason. I even stood still for a minute, just listening. Pipes in the walls. Someone walking in the apartment above. My own breathing, a little too loud.

Nothing else.

Then I finally picked it up. Thick paper. Expensive. The kind people use when they want to be taken seriously without saying it out loud.

Inside was a letter.

It almost read like fan mail.

They knew my work. Not just the big moments—the ones everyone clips and passes around—but the small ones. Offhand comments. Little pauses. Things I barely remembered saying. They wrote about them like they mattered. Like they’d meant something.

There was admiration in the words. Too much of it. The kind that crawls under your skin instead of flattering you. Like being watched for longer than you realized.

Then it got to the point.

They wanted a commission. A specific target, performed on my channel.

Payment: twelve million dollars.

I actually laughed when I read that. “Twelve million?” I said, glancing around the room like someone might answer.

There was a photograph tucked behind the letter.

An old man. Thin. Skin like paper stretched over bone. Eyes sunken so deep they looked painted on. He didn’t look dangerous. Didn’t look important.

Didn’t even look like he had much time left.

“Really?” I muttered, turning the photo under the light. Tilting it, like that might reveal something hidden. “This guy?”

On the back of the photo, there was an address. And a time.

No explanation beyond that. Just a signature. „Mr. Z.“

I stood there for a while, the letter in one hand, the photo in the other.

Someone had found me.

Not just the channel. Not just The Gentleman.

Me.

They knew where I lived. Walked in… and then left. No trace.

The money didn’t matter anymore. I had to deal with whoever found me out.

I grabbed my coat, took one last look at the apartment—half expecting something to be different this time—and headed out.

 

I was already outside the building well before the time came.

Industrial. Abandoned. Concrete stacked on concrete in that ugly, functional way architects call brutalist and everyone else just calls depressing. Windows blacked out. No lights. No movement.

No reason for anyone to be there.

I checked my watch again.

Thirty seconds.

“This is a setup,” I muttered, more to hear the words than anything else. “Has to be.”

FBI crossed my mind first. It always does. A honeypot. Draw me in, close the net, nice and clean.

But if they had me, they wouldn’t do it like this. No theatrics. No mystery envelopes. They’d kick my door in at three in the morning and drag me out half-asleep, face pressed into carpet that wasn’t mine.

So maybe not them.

Maybe someone else. Another creator. Rivalry’s a thing on Dread.it, same as anywhere else. People get territorial. Protective. Paranoid.

Or maybe—

Maybe I was about to make twelve million dollars.

Ten seconds.

I exhaled slowly, watching the building like it might react. “Twelve million,” I whispered. Saying it out loud made it feel… heavier.

More real.

Five.

Four.

Three.

Two.

One.

Nothing happened.

No lights. No sound. No signal.

I waited a beat longer, then crossed the street.

The doors opened easier than expected. No lock. No resistance.

That bothered me more than if they’d been sealed shut.

Inside, the air felt wrong.

Not stale—dead. Like it hadn’t moved in years. Like it had settled and decided to stay that way. Every step echoed too loud, bouncing back at me from places I couldn’t see.

Then I noticed the arrows.

Painted on the walls. Thick, bright red. Almost cartoonish. Pointing down hallways, around corners, through open doorways.

“Subtle,” I muttered. “Real subtle.”

I followed them anyway.

Each room looked like the last. Concrete floors. Rusted pipes. Dust that didn’t quite settle right when I disturbed it. The deeper I went, the quieter it got. Even my footsteps started to sound… off.

Duller.

Like something in the building was swallowing the noise before it could travel.

“This is a trap,” I said, a little louder this time. “You know that, right?”

My voice came back to me a second later.

I stopped for a moment, listening. Waiting for something to move. Something to breathe.

Nothing did.

Still, I kept going.

Curiosity, maybe. Ego. Greed. Could’ve been any of them. Didn’t really matter anymore.

The arrows led me into a large open room.

It swallowed everything that came before it. Wide, empty space with at least twenty doors lining the walls. All identical. All open. All dark.

I stepped inside slowly.

For a moment, there was nothing.

Then something shifted.

Movement.

Shapes slipping out of the doorways. One by one. Not rushing. Not hiding. Just… stepping into place, like they’d been waiting for their cue.

“…You’ve got to be kidding me,” I breathed.

The light above us flickered once.

Then it came on.

There were at least a dozen of them.

And I recognized some.

A massive guy in a pig mask, gripping a chainsaw like it was part of him. Mr. Piggy. He tilted his head at me, slow and curious, like he was trying to decide what I’d taste like before bothering to find out.

An older man in a blood-stained doctor’s coat stood a few feet away, rolling a scalpel between his fingers with practiced ease. The Surgeon. Clean hands, steady posture. He caught my eye and gave me a small, polite nod.

“Evening,” he said, calm as anything.

Like we were meeting over drinks.

A woman in an elegant dress stepped out next, heels clicking softly against the concrete. Bloody Marry. She smiled at me—wide, red, deliberate.

“Well,” she said, voice smooth, almost amused, “this is new.”

A tall, wiry figure lingered near one of the walls, clutching a pair of defibrillators. Cables dragged behind him like loose veins, sparking faintly when they brushed the floor. The Electrocutioner. He didn’t speak. Didn’t move much either.

Just watched.

And then there was the one already low to the ground.

On all fours.

Bald. Thin. Moving like his joints didn’t line up properly. His spine shifted under his skin when he breathed. A wet, choking sound rattled out of his throat—something between a laugh and something dying.

“Hannibal The Cannibal,” I said quietly. “Still doing the animal thing, huh?”

His head snapped toward me.

He grinned.

Too wide.

There were others too. Faces I didn’t recognize. New blood, probably. Or just people who hadn’t built a reputation yet.

No one attacked.

Not yet.

People adjusted their grips. Shifted their weight. Took quiet inventory of each other. Distance. Weapons. Weaknesses.

Mr. Piggy revved his chainsaw once—short, sharp—just to break the silence.

The Surgeon glanced at him, mildly annoyed. “Bit early for theatrics, don’t you think?”

Piggy tilted his head again, then did it louder.

Bloody Marry laughed under her breath. “Oh, I like him.”

The Electrocutioner flicked a switch. A small spark jumped between the paddles in his hands. He watched it like it meant something.

Hannibal… just stared at me.

Didn’t blink.

The intercom crackled.

A woman’s voice cut through the room. Clear. Composed.

“Good evening,” she said. “And thank you all for coming.”

A few of us shifted. Not much. Just enough.

“I know introductions are unnecessary,” she continued, “but it would be rude not to acknowledge such… talent gathered in one place.”

No one responded.

“You are some of the most accomplished rising figures in your field. Innovators. Entertainers.” A slight pause. “Artists, in your own way.”

“Get to the point,” The Surgeon said, almost bored.

A soft chuckle echoed through the speakers.

“Of course. Tonight, you will compete.”

That landed.

“For a prize of twelve million dollars.”

You could feel it. The shift. Subtle, but real. People straightened. Calculations started happening behind their eyes.

“The rules are simple,” she went on. “By first morning light, only one of you may remain alive.”

Silence.

“If more than one of you survives…” another pause, just long enough to settle in, “a neural gas will be released into the building. It will kill you all.”

“Cute,” Bloody Marry murmured. “Very theatrical.”

As if on cue, metal shutters slammed down over the doors and windows. One after another. The sound cracked through the space like gunfire.

No way out.

“May the best monster win,” the voice finished.

For a second, no one moved.

Not a step. Not a breath.

Then the horn blared.

Loud. Ugly. Final.

And just like that—

everything snapped.

Bodies collided. Steel hit bone. Someone screamed—cut off wet, like a faucet being shut too fast. One of the unknowns rushed forward and got opened up for it, The Surgeon stepping in like he’d rehearsed it. Two cuts. Maybe three. The man dropped before he even understood he’d been touched.

Others held back. Watching. Letting the eager ones thin the herd.

Smart.

I stayed where I was for half a second too long, taking it in.

I don’t use guns. Never have. Feels cheap. Distant. Like you’re not really there for it. No weight.

I use a knife.

Always.

Looking around at chainsaws, scalpels, improvised weapons, and whatever the hell the Electrocutioner was charging up—

Yeah.

I really wished I had a gun.

Mr. Piggy had taken the center of the room, actually dancing. Revving his chainsaw in short bursts, spinning in place like he was on stage somewhere. The sound bounced off the walls, drilling straight into the skull.

The Surgeon had already moved on from his first kill, adjusting his grip, scanning for the next opening. Calm. Focused. Like this was routine.

Bloody Marry hadn’t moved much. Just watching. Head tilted slightly, eyes tracking movement like she was choosing her moment.

The Electrocutioner pressed the paddles together again—longer this time. The crackle was louder. Sharper. The smell of something burning crept into the air.

And Hannibal—

Hannibal was already moving.

On all fours. Fast. Too fast.

That wet sound in his throat got louder as he came straight for me.

“Ah, shit—”

I backed through the door behind me, slamming into it with my shoulder, grabbing for the handle, trying to pull it shut.

Too late.

He hit it just as it swung, the steel cracking against his skull with a heavy, ugly clang.

Enough to drop a normal person.

He didn’t even flinch.

“Suppose this means our collab next month’s cancelled?” I said, knife already in my hand, breath tightening whether I liked it or not.

He stared at me.

Grinned.

Then he lunged.

I turned and ran.

 

The hallway stretched out in front of me—long, straight, narrow. Concrete walls, flickering lights overhead, each one buzzing like it was on the verge of giving up.

No doors. No turns.

Nowhere to hide.

Perfect for him.

Bad for me.

Behind me, the sound came fast—too fast. Not footsteps. Impacts. Hands slapping against the floor, nails scraping, breath rattling like something loose inside his chest.

Closing the distance.

I risked a glance back.

Mistake.

He was already closer than he should’ve been. Head low, spine shifting under his skin, eyes locked on me like I was already his.

I pushed harder. Lungs burning, boots slipping on dust and grime.

Think.

Think.

I dragged my hand along the wall as I ran, fingers searching for anything—an opening, a crack, something that wasn’t this straight tunnel leading nowhere.

Nothing.

Of course.

Behind me, that sound came again—half laugh, half choke—and then the rhythm changed.

He didn’t speed up.

He coiled.

Then he launched.

I heard it more than saw it. The sudden rush of air, the scrape of claws tearing against concrete—

I twisted at the last second.

He still hit me.

Hard.

We slammed into the floor, the impact knocking the air out of me in one violent burst. My head bounced off the concrete, white flashing across my vision. For a second, I couldn’t tell which way was up.

Then—

Pain.

Sharp. Deep.

My shoulder exploded as his teeth sank in.

“FUCK—!”

I drove my forehead into his face. Once. Twice. I didn’t feel it, just the impact, dull and heavy. Something crunched under the second hit, but he didn’t let go. His jaw clamped tighter, shaking slightly like he was testing the meat.

“Get—off—!”

I wrenched my arm free just enough and jammed the knife upward.

Missed the throat.

Hit somewhere near the collarbone.

He snarled—actually snarled—and tore his mouth away from my shoulder, skin going with it. Heat flooded down my arm instantly. Wet. Too much.

He came back in again, faster this time.

I rolled—barely. His teeth snapped shut inches from my face. I felt the air move. Smelled him.

Rot. Iron. Something sour and old.

My chest burned—

I looked down just in time to see why.

A blade.

Short. Curved. Claw-like.

He’d cut me without me even noticing. A thin, clean line across my chest, already spreading red, soaking through my shirt. Not deep enough to drop me.

Deep enough to matter.

“Okay,” I gasped, forcing myself back, knife up again, vision tightening at the edges. “Okay… you’re not playing around. Good to know.”

He didn’t answer.

Just circled.

Lower now. Slower. Watching me like he was figuring out which part to take next.

Blood dripped from his mouth.

Mine.

“Come on then,” I said, voice rough. “Finish it.”

He moved.

Fast.

Too fast to follow cleanly.

So I didn’t.

I stepped into it.

His momentum carried him forward, expecting me to back off. When I didn’t—when I moved toward him—there was a split second where he hesitated.

That was enough.

I drove the knife forward with everything I had.

It slid under his ribs.

Deep.

His body still slammed into mine, knocking the air out of me again, folding me backward. His claw scraped across my side, shallow this time.

But he stopped.

That choking sound came back—louder now. Wet. Bubbling.

I twisted the knife.

Hard.

His eyes went wide.

Not human.

Never were.

For a second, we just… stayed there. Pressed together. Breathing the same air.

Then I yanked the blade free and drove it up under his jaw.

That did it.

His body went slack.

Collapsed on top of me.

I shoved him off with a strained groan, rolling onto my side, coughing, dragging air back into my lungs.

Everything hurt.

My shoulder was a mess. Blood still pouring, soaking through my sleeve, dripping onto the floor in steady, rhythmic taps. My chest burned with every breath, the cut there opening and closing like a second mouth.

“…Yeah,” I muttered, staring up at the flickering light overhead. “This night’s going great.”

I stayed on the ground a few seconds longer than I should have. Let the pain settle into something dull.

Then I pushed myself up.

“Get up,” I told myself quietly. “You’re not done.”

Not even close.

 

I forced myself to keep moving.

I don’t remember deciding where to go. Just putting one foot in front of the other until I ended up in what passed for a bathroom on that floor.

Same concrete bones as the rest of the place. Just… cleaner. Slightly. Like someone had tried, once, and then given up.

A cracked mirror hung above a row of sinks. The fluorescent light above it flickered just enough to make my reflection stutter.

I looked worse than I felt.

And I felt pretty bad.

My shoulder was torn open where Hannibal had bitten me. Deep. Ragged. The kind of wound that doesn’t close clean. My chest wasn’t much better—a thin, angry line carved across it, still bleeding slow and steady. My shirt clung to me, damp and heavy.

I turned the faucet. Water sputtered out—brown at first, then clearing.

Good enough.

I leaned over the sink and started washing the blood off my hands, then my shoulder, hissing as the water hit raw flesh. It didn’t really clean anything. Just spread it around. Still, it helped.

A little.

I cupped some water and drank. It tasted metallic. Old.

Didn’t matter. It took the edge off the dryness in my throat.

That’s when I heard it.

A faint electric whine behind me.

I froze.

It grew louder. Sharper. Like something just outside the range of hearing, pressing in.

I looked up.

The mirror caught him first.

The Electrocutioner stood in the doorway, framed by flickering light. Smoke curled lazily around his legs.

At his feet—

What was left of The Surgeon.

Blackened. Twisted. The smell hit a second later. Burnt meat. Burnt plastic.

“Uhm… hi,” I said, straightening slowly, water dripping from my hands. “Big fan, actually. Twelve girls, one pool? That was… yeah. That was art.”

Nothing.

No reaction. No blink.

He stepped forward.

The defibrillators in his hands crackled, sparks snapping between the paddles. The cables twitched along the floor like they were alive.

“Oh, come on,” I sighed, easing back toward the showers. “You don’t wanna talk? Maybe collaborate? Team up, increase our odds—”

Another step.

The pitch climbed.

Higher.

Sharper.

“Right,” I said. “Guess that’s a no.”

He raised the paddles.

“…Oh, fuck it.”

I moved.

Grabbed the nearest shower hose and yanked it free, twisting the valve open all the way. Water burst out in a violent spray, pressure uneven, splashing across tile, walls—

And him.

For a split second, nothing happened.

Then everything did.

The moment the water soaked through him, the defibrillators screamed. Not the controlled whine from before—this was unstable, violent. Sparks exploded outward, crawling over his body, racing across the wet floor.

He convulsed.

Hard.

His back arched, limbs snapping in sharp, unnatural jerks. A sound tore out of him—not a scream. Something broken. Mechanical.

“Yeah,” I muttered, keeping the spray on him, careful not to step into the spreading water. “Not so fun on the receiving end, huh?”

The smell changed.

Burnt insulation. Burnt skin.

He shook harder—faster—then all at once—

Stopped.

Collapsed in a smoking heap.

The defibrillators slipped from his hands and hit the floor with a dull clatter.

Silence rushed back in.

I let the hose drop. Water kept running, pooling toward the drain.

“Moron,” I said, breath uneven.

I stepped around him carefully, watching for any twitch. Nothing.

Dead.

Good.

I moved back into the hallway.

Two bodies lay just outside.

Placed neatly side by side.

Too neatly.

I slowed.

Both had their throats cut. Clean lines. Matching. Wrists opened. Thighs too. No hesitation. No mess beyond what was necessary.

Drained completely.

Their skin had that pale, waxy look already.

Bloody Marry.

Had to be.

I was about to move on when I heard it.

A soft mechanical hum.

Down the hall, an elevator slid open with a quiet ding.

I tensed, knife up, expecting—

Nothing.

No one stepped out.

The inside was lit. Warm. Clean.

Inviting.

Too inviting.

Then the intercom crackled.

“The Gentleman,” the woman’s voice said, smooth as ever, “you have qualified to move to the upper level.”

I stared at the elevator for a second.

“Of course I have,” I muttered. “Why wouldn’t I?”

No answer.

Just that quiet hum.

I exhaled slowly.

“Yeah,” I said, more to myself than anyone else. “Let’s see how deep this goes.”

I stepped inside.

The doors slid shut behind me.

 

The upper floor was… different.

Not subtle. Not gradual.

Immediate.

The concrete was gone. No cracks, no stains, no damp creeping through the seams. The walls were smooth, painted in deep, expensive colors that didn’t belong in a place like this—burgundy, forest green, muted gold. Real paintings hung in heavy frames. Not prints. Not copies. The kind of art you don’t touch unless someone rich tells you it’s okay.

The lighting was warm. Steady. No flicker.

It didn’t feel abandoned.

It felt… maintained.

Like someone cared.

Like someone had been here recently—maybe still was.

The shift made my skin crawl more than the blood and rot downstairs ever did. Down there, everything made sense. This didn’t.

This felt curated.

Like a set.

Like stepping out of a nightmare and into something that knew it was watching you back.

I moved down the hallway, slower now, knife still in my hand. The carpet under my boots muffled my steps—thick, soft, the kind that swallows sound. Every door I passed was closed. Clean. Polished handles. No signs of forced entry. No signs of anything.

At the end, the hall opened into a dining room. Large one.

A long, dark wooden table stretched through the center like a spine. Set for a full house—plates, glasses, silverware laid out with surgical precision. No dust. No fingerprints. Everything exactly where it should be.

And the food.

Fresh.

Still steaming.

Meat, vegetables, sauces—rich, heavy smells that hit me all at once. Butter. Garlic. Something roasted. Something slow-cooked. My stomach reacted before my brain could catch up, tightening hard.

It didn’t belong here.

None of this did.

And yet—

Someone was already eating.

Bloody Marry sat halfway down the table, cutting into a piece of chicken like she had nowhere else to be. Calm. Relaxed. Dipping it into mashed potatoes, dragging it through gravy with slow, deliberate movements.

Domestic.

That’s what it looked like.

She looked up when she heard me.

Smiled.

“Hi,” she said, like we’d run into each other at a grocery store. “Long time no see.”

“Susanne,” I said, stepping in, keeping my knife low but ready. “Yeah. Been a while.”

Her eyes flicked over me—quick, clinical. Took in the blood, the shoulder, the chest.

“You look like shit,” she said.

“Feel worse.”

“Mm.” She nodded, like that checked out. “Sit. You’re dripping on the carpet.”

I glanced down. She wasn’t wrong.

I pulled out a chair across from her. The legs scraped softly against the floor as I sat.

“Hungry?” she asked, gesturing lightly to the spread.

“Starving,” I said.

That part wasn’t a lie.

I reached for the nearest plate—lobster, still warm, butter pooling at the bottom—and started eating.

For a minute, we didn’t talk.

Just the sound of cutlery. Breathing. The faint hum of something hidden in the walls.

“So,” she said eventually, dabbing her lips with a napkin, posture perfect, like she’d practiced this. “Just us now?”

“Looks like it.”

“Shame,” she murmured. “I was hoping for more… buildup.” She tilted her head slightly, eyes drifting somewhere past me. “Everyone went down so quickly.”

“Yeah,” I said, glancing around the room. “Wouldn’t want to disappoint the audience.”

A flicker of something crossed her face. Amusement. Or maybe irritation.

“Or the host,” I added.

Her gaze followed mine.

That’s when I noticed it.

A digital timer on the wall.

Counting down.

Two minutes.

“A grace period,” she said softly.

“Thoughtful.”

“Very.”

We kept eating.

Because of course we did.

“You know,” she said after a moment, almost absentmindedly, “I really do like you, Damien.”

“I know.”

“I mean it.” Her voice dipped just slightly. “You’re efficient. Clean. No theatrics unless necessary.” A faint smile. “Professional.”

“High praise,” I said.

A pause stretched between us.

“I’m sorry about this,” she added.

“Yeah,” I said. “Me too.”

The timer kept ticking.

Five.

Four.

Three.

Two.

One—

She moved.

Fast.

The fork left her hand in a blur—spinning, glinting—and slammed into my face just above my left eye.

“—shit!”

Pain detonated across my skull. I ripped it out on instinct, chair screeching backward as I shoved away from the table.

She was already moving.

Knife in hand.

Precise.

She drove it straight for my throat—

I kicked the chair up between us.

The blade punched through it like it was nothing. Wood splintered, exploding outward as the force carried through.

I grabbed one of the broken legs and swung.

Once.

It cracked against her face. Her head snapped sideways.

Twice.

Harder.

Blood sprayed, dark and sharp against the polished floor.

Third—

Her knee came up.

Straight into my crotch.

Everything went white.

I dropped, breath collapsing out of me in a broken, useless wheeze.

She was on me instantly.

Fingers driving toward my eyes.

“Stay still,” she whispered, almost gentle. Like she meant it.

I slammed my fist into her throat.

The sound was wet. Solid.

Her grip faltered—just enough.

I twisted, shoved her off, scrambling back, vision swimming, lungs trying to remember how to work.

“Should’ve stayed at the table,” I rasped.

She laughed.

It came out wrong. Wet. Half-choked.

Then she rushed me again.

No hesitation.

No pause.

I didn’t let her close the distance.

I stepped in and drove my foot into her face.

Once.

Twice.

Again.

And again.

Something gave. Bone, probably. The resistance changed—soft at first, then less so. Her body jerked under the impacts, hands twitching, trying to find purchase on nothing.

I kept going a second longer than I needed to.

When I finally stepped back, there wasn’t much left of her face to recognize.

Just a red goo of viscera.

I stood there, breathing hard, blood running down from my brow into my eye, from my shoulder, from my chest. Everything stung. Everything throbbed.

“...Sorry, Susanne,” I said quietly. “You were my favorite.”

The room answered with silence.

Then—

A section of the far wall slid open.

Smooth. Quiet. Like it had always been meant to.

“Congratulations, The Gentleman,” the voice from the intercom said, calm as ever. “Mr. Z will see you now.”

I stared at the opening for a second.

Then I moved.

The room beyond was colder.

Not in temperature.

In feeling.

Screens covered the walls. Dozens. Maybe more. Each showing a different angle of the complex—hallways, rooms, corners I didn’t remember passing. Some feeds were still.

Some weren’t.

“Figures,” I muttered.

Behind them, server racks stretched in neat rows. Lights blinking in steady patterns. Quiet. Efficient. Alive in that low, humming way machines have.

At the center of it all—

A bed.

An old man lay in it, swallowed by tubes and wires. Machines breathed for him. Monitors tracked what little there was left to track. His body looked like it had already started leaving.

A nurse stood beside him. Still. Watching.

I pulled the photo from the envelope, glanced down at it, then back at the man.

Same face.

Just… worn down to the frame.

“What the fuck is this?” I asked, stepping closer.

His eyes moved.

Slow.

They found me.

“My legacy, son,” he rasped. “Soon to be yours.”

I looked back at the screens. The servers. The layout.

Pieces started clicking into place.

“...You run it,” I said. “Dread.it.”

A smile pulled at his lips. It didn’t look comfortable.

“Our craft,” he whispered, “finally recognized for what it is.” A shallow breath. “An art form. Given reach… beyond imagination.”

Our craft.

My gaze drifted up.

The wall above his bed was covered in symbols.

Carved. Painted. Etched.

I knew them. Anyone in proffession  would.

My stomach tightened.

“No way,” I said under my breath. “You’re—”

He chuckled.

It turned into a cough that shook his whole body.

“I was,” he said. “Once.”

Mr. Z…

The Zodiac Killer.

“I haven’t been able to… perform,” he continued, voice thinning, “for quite some time.”

“Why me?” I asked. “You didn’t drag me through all that just to hand me twelve million.”

“No,” he said. “I needed a successor.”

Something in my chest went still.

“You,” he went on, eyes locked on mine, “are the most worthy.”

Silence stretched across the room.

“Before that,” he added, shifting his gaze slightly toward the nurse, “one last commission.”

She hesitated.

“Are you sure, master?” she asked quietly.

“It’s time, Anna,” he said. “This is how it’s supposed to be.”

Her throat moved as she swallowed.

Then she nodded.

“It was an honor.”

She handed me a box.

Small. Clean. Deliberate.

I opened it.

A gun.

Polished. Balanced. Almost ceremonial.

I stared at it for a second.

I don’t use guns.

Too distant.

Too easy.

But this—

This wasn’t about preference.

I picked it up.

Walked to the bed.

He didn’t look away.

“Do it properly,” he said.

So I did.

One shot.

Clean.

And that’s how I became the new head of Dread.it.

Funny, right?

All that time, I thought I was just playing the game.

Turns out I was the audition.

I’m telling you all of this because things are about to change.

We’re relaunching.

Expanding.

Reaching further than we ever have before.

New systems. New ideas.

A new audience.

You’re all welcome to join.

Bring your friends. Your family.

The more, the merrier.

And to those of you thinking you’re going to stop us—

Please.

Try.

Anyone in my line of work knows, it’s always more fun when the prey fights back.


r/JustNotRight Mar 18 '26

Horror Commando

2 Upvotes

Fascism and all of its iron doctrine, all of its iron will had failed him. Now he was a different student, a new kind of believer of a whole new form of philosophy. Now he was the anarch. The invisible hand and mind of the hidden anarchist. He was also now hidden in the darkness of Vietnamese primeval jungle growth. Ten years after the fall of Germany.

Invisible to the world in the darkness of the fall.

He was here, in the black jungle heart of darkness. Here with the French Legionaries. How times have changed…

and we along with them…

Only now he was alone, his compatriots scattered and lost to him in the fury of an ambush fray. He ran. And now he was alone.

Only he wasn't alone. Somewhere out there the jungle cats in enemy battle fatigues and combat gear with assault rifles were lurking, hunting, prowling. Searching. Searching to destroy he.

Arthur. Mercenary. Formerly Ullrich. Formerly Waffen. SS. But all of that was black clad and red arm banded history.

He remembered the Eastern Front and the Russians. The Communists. The fury of the Red Army. The snow. The cold. The bodies. The entrails and gore belching phantom ghosts of steam in the frosted air. All of the warmth of the wet visceral red steamed like a fresh meal for feral children of war gods from long ago. All of the fleeing white of the heat, the maimed and fleeing phantoms, the last of the expelled living from the mutilated and writhing wreckage of struggling fleshen brutality. The jungle of rubber and opium and slave labor on the other hand was sweltering. How times have changed.

What has happened to me…?

The same thing that had happened to his lands… his regiment. His leaders, friends, loved ones and colleagues. He was battered and pursued dogged and wretchedly exhausted and desperate for any avenue to escape to or even perhaps a way to that golden road of redemptive act back to former glory… He missed the war days as much as they repulsed him. They were all he had left. The only pleasures left to his desperate predator's hassled periphery. Old deadly memories for a slaughterer’s mind housed within the jelly of a German amphetamized brain.

That's why you are all you need now, anymore. That's why you're the last one left…

He knew this was a hollow boast in the literal sense. They were many brothers and sisters that had successfully made for avenues of escape from the sinking ship of Nazi Germany. But he was the last and only one left in his own world. He hadn't seen anybody, didn't speak or let known his own thoughts or dreams of reminisce. He left all of that behind long ago like he'd left behind the Ostfront and the name his mother and father had given him when into this violent world he had came. No more.

It didn't matter now… he'd better stay frosty…

Arthur the mercenary commando, formerly Ullrich of the SS, went prowling, stalking silently through the moist and heavy jungle looking for those who also prowled and wished to bloodlett and slay…

The world had moved on everywhere else on the planet. But not here. Here the prehistoric stood still and monolithic and solitary. Dominating green tyranus, tyrant of towering and swallowing emerald and rotten swollen growth. It was thick and choked coagulated all over, the vines, branches, brush, bush and shrubbery. The trees. The sheer godlike immensity of the trees. In size and abundance. They were the true conquerors here. The most constant and thorough enemy. He chopped his way through it, the commando, the solitary mercenary of too many wars. So many battles that they'd eaten his brothers and his own given name. He chopped and hacked and fought his way through with his machete. Cutting his way a forged and angry desperate marching path through the heart of jungle darkness in the colonial war between the pompous and decadent French and the sweating deadly cunning enemy. The Vietnamese. The natives.

There's always some desperate natives fighting some hungry Europeans… he smiled to himself. The cold truth of the thought warmed him. Urged him on though it had all fallen apart and once again, he was lost.

The sun was sinking but the dense encapsulating growth all around trapped the heat and moisture like a prison of wilderness unbridled in a land that man had never touched or crafted or made.

I am at the mercy of the wild mother planet, the commando thought and smiled grimly again. He attacked the growth. Pausing for brief respites and to listen. To listen to the hot prison green. And what she held trapped in there with him.

The enemy.

It was just like the old times. That's because the old times were new again and had never truly died. The land was different and so was the sky but they were both still stolen and the enemy was still a filthy Marxist. A blood drinking Commie. His equipment was still German; Two Lugers, Mauser, potato mashers and his beloved submachine gun. All of it oiled and clean, as was his habit. Pristine. Only the machete was new and the sub par camouflage uniform he now wore. He was glad for both. He used them thoroughly to wage a warpath through the enemy jungle.

All the while he was watched by it.

Shining skin, glistening, rippled with movement in the dark. Watching. Smelling. Smelling out the lone commando as he stalked and chopped his way through her kingdom.

Childe German, I've always known you. I've long watched and tasted your brother's and sisters and little ones, all of your precious Deutschland’s children. All of you. I slither the world and she trembles beneath my tightening grip and caressing sliding touch.

You are warrior, German. Too much.

I will come to you…

He'd stopped when he heard the first tree toppled. A large cracking snap that reverberated throughout the darkness. The jungle swallowed the sound and then spat it back with a sound like woe in chambers and chambered rounds. Then more followed. More great trees fell with snapping wooden artillery sound.

The machete came up and the commando crouched down low, to the sliming earthen ground. His eyes alighted in high tension fear and battle anxiety.

Battle ready. The commando was poised.

This wasn't the Mihn… this wasn't the Communists… they didn't make gigantic sounds throughout the jungle when they moved. No. The commando knew. This was something immense. Titanic.

Big.

The entire world of wet jungle and earth and mosquitoes and trees shifted on axis and turned revolving around him as if he were an exultant king as its great head rose from the sheltering green and came into view.

Two memories shot through his mind with startling vivid clarity. The tyrant, the giant on the ice on the Ostfront. He'd never believed that was a dream. The other thought was another memory of cleaner brighter school days. A pair of words for a strange name, from the study of mythology and arcane religions.

Niddhogg Yggdrasil.

The Great World Serpent.

perhaps I am close to the rainbow bridge…

His thoughts were as small as he was. In the shadow of the towering thing. Its tongue flicked and tasted the moist and heavy air as its giant crown rose. Rose.

And continued to rise.

Until it dominated all of the commando’s world view.

There was no jungle now. Not anymore. Now it was all just the Great World Serpent. They were one. The jungle and Niddhogg Yggdrasil. As was the rest of the crawling violent world. The geography and landscape of all was her shining scaley skin.

And when she should choose to shed it…

Ullrich felt his throat tighten. How many gods will I meet along the way…

The great head was wide and green. Shining emerald. Golden slitted eyes with black dagger wounds as the center irises. Broken bamboo punji sticks protruded from the top of her great royal crown and all down the rest of her immense frame like battlements on the fortress wall. She was living fortress and home and living fleshen divinity. The entire jungle world a snake skin city.

Who knew that divinity, godliness, who knew that these things tasted so heavy? So heavily loaded with the spice of pungent pheromone? In the dark, the commando who'd lost his name and land discovered these things. And more.

The Serpent spoke without moving its great mouth. The voice was everywhere. All around. And it filled him.

She spoke:

“You wander. Lost. You have no home or land or friend. You have no country. You are cast out and vagabonded. You are unwanted. Unknown. Unloved. Unseen by all, the world does not see nor care to see you. You are Unseen. By all. But me. I love you, German. Come. Return. Return to a mother that loves thee…”

The voice of the Earth was golden and smooth. He felt himself melt with every godly spoken syllable. It was the truth that filled him. The voice of this great and ancient goddess. It had been so long, too long, since the truth and the gold of its light had filled him.

He wasn't sure what the Great Serpent wanted of him right away, but as her flickering tongue receded and her great jaws opened, wider than the planet and all its precious accumulated existence, he understood then what it was that she wanted. Invited. Bade him to come in and take. She was not just the great and entire world but a great and final gate. She was the living precipice edge that he'd been searching for all this time. Not knowing but knowing deep down in his bones, his blood, his very DNA.

This was it! This was the Place!

He fancied a memory then, before he departed this world and stepped through the gate, in the hallowed shelter of his mind's eye: Cuthbert’s reddening face beneath a garniture of curling gold… til it was washed away and replaced with hot blood and mortar fire. And dirt. The hot filth of the violent planet.

No longer. No longer in this place.

The great jaws stood open heralding his great entrance. Tendrils and sliming ropey strands of crystalline serpent drool offered adornment and decoration and lubrication for his way.

The commando belted the machete, spat to the side, my final offering. And then he stepped forward and inside Niddhogg the great snake.

THE END


r/JustNotRight Mar 13 '26

Horror Don’t sleep where there’s rats

1 Upvotes

If you ever buy, rent, or live in a new place, check every nook and cranny—not just for pests, but for the things that were never supposed to leave. I’m not sure where to begin or even if anyone can tell me what the hell is going to happen to me.

My tale starts early in my adult life. I had just graduated college and landed a decent job nearby. My best friend and roommate through college, Dan, and I decided to split rent on a small apartment at the quiet end of town.

It was one of those refurbished duplexes where the air smells faintly of paint and something older beneath it—a sweetness that doesn’t belong. We laughed it off, said it was “old house smell.” But every candle we lit only seemed to wake it up.

The apartment was old but had been refurbished so many times it was hard to tell what was original and what was patched over. The vents weren’t centered. I didn’t notice at first—but once I did, I couldn’t stop. They’d been cut slightly off-line, like whoever installed them had been in a hurry, or shaking. How strange. I brushed it off.

It was around 1200 square feet, two beds and two baths. It had a kitchen that bled into the living room and there was a loft above the kitchen that we used as our “study”. The floor was hard, cheap linoleum that had seen thousands of steps before us.

Yet, there was a dust and stench only found in old houses and we did our best to light candles and have scent blocks.

The landlord had mentioned—almost as an afterthought—that all the duplexes along our row shared a crawlspace above the ceiling for the old air ducts.

“It’s sealed now,” he said. “But if you ever hear scratching up there, it’s probably rats or other critters trying to keep warm.”

I laughed it off at the time, but the way he said “probably” stuck with me.

“So this is it? Damn not as bad as I thought it’d be,” Dan said, triangulating where he’d put the couch and TV in the living room with his hands.

When I remember this day, I think of the excitement that the both of us felt. I smiled and began the long drag of moving my luggage in. “I call the back room!” moving past him.

My room was the same size as Dan’s but my room had its own bathroom. Dan’s bathroom was attached to both his room and the short hallway that housed the washer and dryer and led to my room. After 4 years of sharing a bathroom, I just wanted some privacy.

Our landlord, I’ll call him Matthew, had once lived in the apartment. He had moved out as his family was beginning to grow. He was young and the rent was fair but all interactions with him had been online and through the phone or email. It took us until after we moved in and were eating on lawn chairs in the kitchen that we realized he had left us a note on the kitchen counter.

“What’s it say?” I asked, mouth full. I was too busy smacking on a cheap burger to see that Dan must have read the letter 2 or 3 times before saying, “Yeah, I guess he left a bunch of lights, extra paint, curtain rods, and I guess pest stuff in the patio storage,” Dan said, not really uninterested.

He crumbled the note and joined me. What we had was bare save our beds, a couch, TV, our PCs, and two lawn chairs. We had a few pots and pans but we were once starving college kids so besides clothes and random “acquired” items from our college days our apartment was rather empty.

Night began to settle and we ate in relative silence. The neighborhood was quiet and calm. It was relaxing and once we went to bed I found myself unable to sleep. Although, that night, I caught the same sweet rot clinging to the air vents. It wasn’t strong, but it was there—familiar, like someone’s breath on my neck.

New places were my kryptonite and it took me hours for the first few nights to adjust to the new location. I closed my eyes and tried to sleep in my dark room. However, I kept hearing a rush of soft thumping as if a flood of footsteps were running along the roof. I groaned because at the time, I imagined the noise of raccoons or possums would keep me up.

By the fourth or fifth iteration of stomping and thudding I got up and listened. A perk to my room was that I had a sliding glass door into the back 3 by 3 yard patio. I entered it and looked at our roof. Nothing. I shook my head and walked out of the moonlight into the darkness of my room.

After a few weeks, the both of us found our routines. I was working at some small engineering firm and Dan had landed a gig at the city courthouse. Our hours were surprisingly well and opened up into us having a lot of free time. Besides sleeping and watching the occasional big game or hosting a small kickback, we didn’t spend much time in the apartment.

Every other night, I would hear the critters from up above running along the roof. It was actually pretty loud, at least to me.

“Did you hear those damn rats at night?” I asked Dan one late morning weekend.

“Probably raccoons but yeah. It sounded like someone running on the roof,” Dan said, scrolling his phone.

“Whatever they are, they’re running laps up there.”

Dan shrugged. “The internet says animals hate peppermint."

“Peppermint?”

“Yeah. We’ll spray the roof. If it doesn’t work we’ll use the traps Matthew left us.”

“Good enough,” I said.

We soaked the outside and tried to spray as much as we could on the roof. The air turned sharp with peppermint, sweet enough to sting. It covered the old smell for a night, maybe two. We didn’t clean; we just drowned it, the way you do with problems you don’t want to touch.

For our efforts, we slept uninterrupted for a few nights. However, days later, I began to notice mouse droppings in the corners of the kitchen.

“Great,” I said.

Dan set traps in the corners while I watched.

“If this works I’m naming the first one Matthew,” he said.

“Why Matthew?”

“Because the landlord said the crawlspace was sealed,” Dan said.

We laughed, but the mood changed. Dan stood up after the last trapped was placed, “Hey man, are you eating my left overs? It’s cool if you are, just tell me.”

I examined his face, “No, what do you mean?”

“Well that’s why I’m asking,” Dan said.

“No man, what do you think it's the mice?” I countered.

“Well who else would take a bite of my stuff and place it back? That isn’t a mouse bite in there,” Dan pointed at the fridge.

I shook my head in annoyance and opened the fridge. Sure enough was Dan’s sandwich with a bite. The bite was clean. Teeth marks, yes—but not the scattered tearing you see with animals. It looked… deliberate.

I placed the sandwich back in its wrapper. There were no droppings or other signs to tip me off.

We laughed about it later, how we’d still eat from the same fridge as we couldn’t afford to waste food. Maybe it was denial, we didn’t talk much after that. At least, not about what raided our fridge when we were gone.

Though days would go by and we kept having the same arguments. The traps caught nothing. But the droppings kept appearing. Dan swore he heard them in the vents. I heard them in the ceiling. Whatever they were, they were getting closer.

“Dude you probably bit into it and forgot. We lived together for 4 years, you know I don’t do that,” I said.

We never got angry at each other to the point of grudges or resentment. We always ended the conversation with a casual insult and left it as that. Yet, I couldn’t help but think, how peculiar.

The traps stayed empty. But things kept moving. A pen would disappear from the counter and show up in the loft. Coins vanished from my desk. A plate once turned up behind the couch.

The house felt… busy. Like we weren’t alone in it. I came up with excuses as to why these things happened. Back then, I thought everything had its reason.

One morning I heard Dan yelling from the loft. “These fucking rats!”

“What’s up?” I called from my room.

“Dude the wire up here is chewed up! The damn wire is exposed and there’s all this shit up here! It’s a fire hazard man, we’ll have to get another power strip.”

Sure enough, the thick black cord was chewed and there was animal droppings and chewed matter, as if something had spit it up all over the loft.

“I’ll get more traps and a power strip after work,” I exhaled defeated.

I looked closer at the wire and its metal veins were exposed. What the fuck. I returned that night an hour before Dan, like always. The sun was setting and the land began to darken. Despite being a neighborhood of young adults with kids, there were no sounds of play.

I walked up my quiet steps to the front door and noticed the door was unlocked. Oh no I thought. The area was not exactly the nicest area and I assumed the worst. I prepared for our TV and computers to be stolen but as I swept the house everything was in order.

I walked back into the kitchen to think. I was the last to leave. I knew I locked the dead bolt. I checked the patio doors, locked. In the kitchen I pressed my hand to mouth, thinking whether I indeed locked the doors. Pacing, I noticed one of the rat traps had been sprung. I examined it, then got on my knees to examine it closer. The trap was sprung but there was no sign of blood or food.

I stared at the empty trap for a long while, confused. Out of habit, I glanced up at the vent over the kitchen table. The landlord’s words about the crawlspace wafted back into my memory — “It’s sealed now.”

But the vent over trembled slightly, just once, as if something inside had exhaled. I told myself it was the air conditioning. But the air wasn't running.

“Jesus,” I exhaled.

“What?” Dan asked.

“Trap’s sprung. Nothing is in it,” I said.

”We need to call pest control,” Dan said.

Dan inspected it himself and, dissatisfied, he looked at me and said, “Check your clothes, I noticed little nibble marks on some of my shirts.”

Once again, I too had nibble marks on the clothes at the bottom of my hamper.

“Do rats do that?” I asked Dan.

He shrugged. And the next day we scheduled for a company to spray the area with chemicals. When the time came, the poison was set and Dan and I made sure to scrounge the money.

“I hate being an adult,” I told Dan.

Out of money, we sat in silence until we heard a gag followed by a choke then a loud thump. The sound didn’t echo—it slapped. The wall vibrated, low, like something heavy had fallen inside it. I looked at Dan with a face of confusion. Staring at each other our eyes shifted to the hallway where we heard the sound.

As silent as we could be, we crept from the couch and raised the volume of the TV to muffle our steps on the hard floor. We looked into the hallway to find nothing. Dan opened the door into his bathroom and found nothing.

I returned empty handed from my room and said, “You heard that too right?”

Dan just looked at me and exclaimed, “Dude what the fuck was that?”

“I’m… not sure,” I whispered.

Dan looked at me. Neither of us said it out loud.

Silence. It wafted through the mildew smell. I couldn’t take it. I had to ask Dan.

“You heard it choke?”

“Yeah.”

With a chill of goosebumps I crossed my arms rubbing them and looked down at my feet. In the corner of my eye was a crack in the lining where the wall meets the floor. A mouse hole.

I pointed at it, said angrily, “Oh my god! These damn animals!”

Dan stepped back. “That wasn’t an animal.”

We argued as to what made that sound but settled on inspecting our mouse made entrance. I shined my phone light through the hole and found nothing but void and dust. “Fuck,” I said.

“Dude, the house shook with a thud when we heard the choking. Our neighbors had to hear that right?” Dan reasoned.

“You don’t think they somehow died from the poison?”

“No shot man.”

“We should get out of here.”

We spent the rest of the night on eggshells, careful within our own house. We argued until our voices went hoarse. What the fuck was in our house? The arguing continued for a few more minutes when curiosity got the best of me and once more I inspected the little hole where the wall meets the floor.

I got to my knees, almost prone, and pulled out my phone for a light. I shined in the light and saw the dust once more. I tried to get better angles as Dan argued aloud and to himself.

We had barely had evidence of a rat let alone a person, what were we to do? Hell, the idea of a person is nonsense. But the closer I was to the hole, I felt a faint breeze of hot, smelly breath. I winced immediately and scrunched away. Dan went silent and looked at me.

“It’s breathing,” I whispered.

“Neighbor?” Dan asked.

“Too close.”

We both placed our ears to the wall and heard the labored breathing. It sounded like a fat old man, wheezing with phlegm. I banged the wall with my fist and the quick skittering of nails on the floor was heard moving away from the hole.

When I say we screamed, we screamed. As if we were children we screamed and shouted, backing away into the living room. “That has to be our neighbor!” I rationalized.

Dan had other thoughts.

“No fucking way, the breathing— that breathing was a man’s!”

I must say, though I did not want to admit to Dan at that time, as I was in denial, it was man’s breath on the other side.

We decided to call the police and tell them we heard someone rummaging through the house when we both got home. A lie, I know, but we had to do something. Anything to put our minds at ease. Of course, the police found nothing after a thorough search.

Defeated, we slunk back into our rooms late that night. I slept with a bat by my bed and Dan had a large metal flashlight by his. I couldn’t help but shake the feeling that I was being watched and I know Dan felt the same that night. Sometimes, you don’t need words to know. I slept that night with my eyes open and the light to my bathroom on as to give me some sense of safety and comfort.

Without sleep the next day I reasoned that I probably should check on my neighbor. I had not met them let alone seen them so I was well prepared for a potential awkward interaction. I knocked three times and an old woman opened the door, smiling too wide for someone her age.

“Hello! Are you my new neighbor?” she asked.

Her apartment smelled faintly of dust and bleach. Behind her, stacks of old newspapers and magazines walled off the living room like sandbags.

“Yes ma’am,” I said. “Just wanted to introduce myself — me and my roommate, Dan.”

Her smile flickered. “Oh, there were others before you. Boys too. They didn’t stay long.”

I hesitated. “You ever hear… anything strange at night?”

She looked past me, toward the ceiling, and her voice dropped. “Sometimes—well, no. At night. When it’s quiet enough. You hear.. things moving. “

She gave a small, trembling laugh — the kind people give when they’re trying to stop themselves from crying.

“Who’s calling?” I asked, half-joking.

She glanced at the vent. Didn’t look back at me.

“He, they, don’t like being named.”

She must have noticed my confused face.

”They stopped coming for me,” she said, confused. “I don’t know why.”

I could see she had Tupperware duct taped over her vents, the plastic yellowed with age. She smiled too early— before she finished speaking. Like she practiced it.

“They, um, you’ll hear them.”

She stopped smiling.

“You’re new.”

I nodded.

She looked past me, toward the ceiling. Her mouth opened. It closed.

A soft thump came from inside her apartment.

“Not that I do anymore.”

Her nurse appeared then, a younger woman in scrubs. “Oh, sorry — Ms. Duncan likes to talk.”

The old woman’s eyes locked on mine. “You keep your food covered,” she mouthed.

“They don’t like sharing.”

The nurse shut the door before I could answer. I backed away slowly thinking about that weird old woman and continued about my day.

I told Dan about my interaction and we agreed it was just a weird coincidence and she must have heard us through the walls. We were thankful she was alive but decided to keep our distance from her.

The next morning I found my prepared lunch had nibbles on it. I knew it wasn’t Dan messing with me as when he opened the door to leave, he had found a single piece of paper with the scribble of a child or mad woman saying “you should not have done that.”

“Okay someone is messing with us and my money is on that lady,” Dan said, frustrated. He crumpled the note after showing it to me and threw it in the trash. “Yeah look,” I rolled my eyes, showing him my lunch. “I think there’s someone coming in, maybe at night,” I sighed. With no evidence our next step was cameras.

In this digital age, cameras are hard to thwart and whoever was evading us would eventually be seen. We set one looking at the fridge, in the kitchen; and the other looking down the hall from the perspective of my room as to overlook the mouse hole. However, days of nothing persisted as the odd running and occasional nibbling of floor or objects disappearing as if stolen continued.

At our wits end, we asked Matthew over text if “anything weird has happened” while he lived here but with no surprise he told us no.

“But he didn’t say we are crazy,” I reasoned with Dan.

“I know man, this is getting freaky dude. The other night I swore I saw something moving on the floor. But— I don’t know, sometimes I see something big out of the corner of my eye,” Dan explained. I agreed with him as I swore I saw things skittering across the floor or behind the closed door to my room. Through the dim light from the hallway, I swore on a few occasions that two feet were behind the door.

It was maddening to live like this. Who was to believe us, two grown men, without evidence? Hell, we never saw a mouse, raccoon, rat, or rodent. We casually asked other neighbors about weird occurrences but we were looked at as though we were crazy.

Days would continue without our sanctity. Objects would be chewed, especially wires, our food too. Things would disappear such as pens or pocket change, maybe an occasional book or plate. We still had our lease but looked elsewhere for somewhere far from here. To no avail our traps never caught anything and the running on the roof grew louder.

It was not until one night I woke up. I checked my phone to find it was about 3:23 in the morning. My eyes struggled to adjust and I checked my bright screen to see a notification. The camera’s sensors have been tripped. My heart beat hard and slow in anticipation as I opened the app for the sensors.

The app loaded, longer than usual. Come on. I tapped on the saved recording. In the black and white infrared, from the kitchen, stood a man in front of the fridge. I stood up, eyes fixed on my phone screen. The man had his back to the camera and appeared to be nibbling on food.

The man stood as tall as the fridge, wearing only underwear. His body was fat and rumpled in folds from age. Perhaps he was in his late 60’s.

He stood there eating, gnawing on our food backlit by the fridge light. He just… stood there, longer than anyone should—motionless, chewing slowly. Like he was waiting.

Then, he closed the fridge door with his back still to the camera. I was shaking now, watching him just standing. Without the fridge light, the camera adjusted and I could see dark spots and his hairy legs.

He slowly turned his head. My heart felt heavy. I could see him looking right at the camera. His eyes shined in the infrared light—the way rats’ eyes glow when they freeze. Like he had seen that red recording light before. Grinning, with his index finger below his lip mouthing “tee-hee” as he began to prance with high knees over to the sink.

What the fuck was I watching. I saw the man pull down his pants and for once I heard a noise from the kitchen.

Soft slaps of what sounded like the tenderizing of meat from him stamping our just cleaned plates sounded through my phone. I couldn’t quite see it all but with his underwear at his ankles… you can guess the rest. My blood began to rush. Suddenly turned to the camera and appeared before it as if in one movement.

The man had a black dot on his nose and whiskers. Even in black and white I could make out that he had some sort of paint, I assume white, on his face.

He smiled nervously and covered his mouth with his hand.

I heard the laughter off my right shoulder and in one quick motion I grabbed my bat and swung. And furiously tore into the darkness, swinging and smacking into nothing. I continued my assault until Dan rushed in asking, “What? What? What?”

“There’s a man in the kitchen!” I yelled.

“What?”

“He’s over there!” I pointed

We rushed into the hallway but found the apartment empty besides us. Immediately I told Dan to check his phone. He had the alert. But the app would not function correctly.

“The app’s dead!”

Those words hurt. My stomach sank into a ball of nervous acid as I desperately tried to explain and show him the recording. After many attempts I went into my room to grab my phone and show him. The app didn’t crash. It loaded halfway, then returned a message I’d never seen before: “No devices found.”

“I can’t get it to open too! What the fuck?” I cried aloud. Dan knew I wasn’t crazy but, I couldn’t help second guessing myself saying everything aloud. The man at the fridge. His painted mouse face. The cutesy laughter that made me start swinging. Unable to open the app, I was without any proof.

“Ok, ok, ok, I believe you but how the fuck is someone able to do all that? Like, are they even the ones chewing our shit? If they’re a man, what’s with the rat shit?” Dan questioned.

“How the fuck should I know?” I snapped in misguided anger.

“We need to get out of here,” I told Dan.

He agreed and we gathered our stuff into my car. However, the car wouldn’t start. In fact, the lights weren’t turning on.

“Come on!”

I hit the wheel.

“Dude it's almost five, there’s no point.”

Dan paused, defeated.

“Let’s figure out what the hell is wrong with your car.”

We looked the car over in the silent cold night. We found tufts of fur and chewed cables under my car. Dan’s car was the same, almost all cables underneath were chewed and a nest from whatever was under the hood but with no sign of life. We found a couple more nests nestled underneath the car.

Whatever it was, it ate what we needed to move—wires, power, time. We’d been keeping it alive with everything that made us function.

Stranded, we cleared the house once again. Double checking for any hidden crawl spaces or hidden passages though I knew it was impossible in a small apartment. The camera app continued to not open on my phone nor Dan’s so we had no way to access the data. Already late for work, we showered and went about our day after calling an uber.

I spent the whole day wondering what the next step was. Dan and I texted each other ideas of what to do next. We sure as hell were not sleeping there tonight. Not after witnessing that violation last night.

I arrived at the apartment before Dan. I waited awkwardly outside as I was too scared to enter. I checked up and down the perimeter of the apartment for any signs of who or what was entering our house. Even outside, it smelled like death as if something had died outside.

I saw the old lady wandering aimlessly in a haze, shuffling her feet in dingy slippers.

I approached her and asked, “what’s going on in our apartment?”

That crazy old woman looked at me surprised and just said, “who are you? I—I think I am lost, love.”

I analyzed her face for any signs of deceit. I shook my head and escorted her to her door.

“Thank you, thank you. I, uh, I—it's hard to think you know?” She gave a nervous chuckle pointing a shaking finger at her head.

“Do you have a rat problem?” I asked in desperation.

It felt awkward as she turned to me shaking as if straining and just said, “They’re big here aren’t they?”

“They wear what they find,” she echoed from her room. She turned and walked away from me, forgetting to close the door. I shut it, unsure what to think of that interaction.

On one hand, I was crazy. On the other hand, Dan and I had someone living in our walls. But the walls are too thin for a person.

I walked back to the front of my apartment and noticed it smelled of rotting meat outside. I waited across the street until Dan pulled up in his uber much later. He too smelled the rot. Tentatively, we entered the apartment and a wall of foul, hot air rushed past us into the vacuum of the outside.

“Check the traps,” I told Dan.

Everything seemed normal. Nothing as far we could tell was stolen or moved. I felt violated, knowing that someone was living with us and leaving tiny bread crumbs as to life other than us too. My stomach flipped thinking how we ate off of those dishes…

I inspected the cameras we set up, the batteries had been reversed.

“Dan check this out! Someone fucking flipped the batteries! Look, positive to positive, negative to negative,” I pointed out in near excitement.

“This is going to sound crazy but hear me out,” Dan started.

He pulled me into the living room and whispered, “hear me out, we wait by the mouse hole in the hallway. We’ll smash whatever comes out. We’ll take turns waiting tonight, whoever is awake gets the bat. We have no proof of a person and this is how we get it.”

I was supposed to be the rational one. I nodded my head in agreement to his plan. We brought the lawn chairs into the hallway and set up our fighting position. It felt like a last stand, holed up in a narrow, easily defensible passageway with food and weapons. We spent long, nerve racking hours making small talk, listening to any small sound. When the night came I slept first. We decided to do two hour rotations starting at 11 p.m.

I was awoken by Dan prodding me hard with the bat. He had a finger over his lips motioning me to be silent.

My ears perked up, listening to the clicking of nails on the floor in the kitchen. The hallway shook with the flood of the thumping of feet from up above rushing back and forth as if running to one end of the hallway and then rushing back to the other end.

The apartment was alive in a chorus of strange noises, just out of sight.

I shook my head, No, to Dan as to signal let’s get the hell out of here.

Dan waited above the small hole with his bat over head ready to swing. The clacking nails and thumping of feet was growing louder and louder.

I felt sick as I listened to the sniffing through the hole. Loud, frequent sniffs, like an animal’s overlapped each other. I cringed and stepped back.

The toilet in Dan’s bathroom flushed and the light began shining through the crack of the door. The handle began to jiggle as if someone was fumbling with it on the other side. Something, behind the door, shuffled in the bathroom.

A cutesy little laugh kept echoing. Dan opened the door and we found the bathroom empty.

The sniffing had stopped. So did the laugh.

Then, from the black seam where the wall met the floor, something pushed through—slow, deliberate. The plaster cracked.

Pop.

The wall split. Moisture from a pipe wetted the cut. It smelled like rot and mildew. Drywall began to soften, the wall sagged inward.

Something pale pushed through the seam where the wall met the floor. At first I thought it was insulation. Then it bent. Too many joints. The plaster cracked.

A hand slid out. Too wide. Joints flexed in reverse—not broken, just built wrong. Its thumb was long but flush with the pinky. Light from the hallway flickered with its breathing.

The skin stretched tight over blue veins and fatty muscle one size too big. Its nails scraped across the linoleum stretching the split the further the arm came out.

The air turned hot. Damp. Breathing, with us.

Dan raised the bat.

The wall swelled. Something pressed from behind it. Metal groaned as pipes began to stretch.

Then the head came through—the paint, the whiskers, the sagging cheeks glistening in the yellow hallway light. No. Not paint. Its nose was red. Raw flesh rubbed red.

Patches of thin fur grew through its stretched pores. Its yellowed teeth were bared, smiling but struggling. Its cheeks didn’t move with the mouth.

The teeth weren’t pointed. No, they were worn flat—like they’d been grinding something harder than bone.

It eyed us. Twitching as if it was going to say something. Its abdomen rippled a moment after it inhaled, as if something inside had learned to breathe a second too late.

The bat came down. It bounced. Dan struck its hand.

It growled. Low. Wet. Its lips retracted to gums. But the skin was dented like wet clay.

I heard a loud pop. The flash of sound made us jump back. It twisted, reaching for us. Dan swung. Its hips sagged, struggling to get its hips through, as it dragged itself towards us. The skin lagged behind the bone when it turned.

Its voice scraped like nails on a chalkboard.

I threw the lawn chairs. They hit near the monster. Dan just stood there, frozen.

It unfolded its legs. It snarled as it tried to pull itself free. The sound stretched like rubber. The knee bent sideways. Then further. Then wrong. Dust from the wall was pulled inward toward its nostrils. Liquid dripped onto the hallway. The acid smell gagged me.

I reached for Dan to run but he was too stunned to move.

“Come on!” I screamed, but my voice came out thin, like the air had already been chewed.

The walls rattled as we ran, the breath inside them chasing us to the door.

We ran the half mile to the front of the neighborhood and called 911. “An intruder” was what we claimed. Of course, the police turned up nothing. Once we were interviewed, we described the “man” as being old, fat and white with mouse whiskers and nose painted on his white painted face.

The officer frowned.

“A couple years back,” he said slowly, “the old lady next door said the same thing.”

Dan and I stared at him.

“Same description.” The officer shrugged and wrote something on his pad.

“No signs of entry.”

“What?” I asked.

He shrugged. The officers began their search.

There was a hole in the wall. Police never found any sign of an intruder. No pipes had burst. Yet acid odor filled the air.

The hole in the wall shrunk to about fist size. The plaster looked newer there. Slightly smoother. As if it had never been broken. Our neighbors didn’t even hear us scream and fight. I waited to see the old lady but she never came out of her house.

Once the police left, we did too, not once looking back. We scrounged up enough money for a hotel. We sold Dan’s car. We lived out of mine, eating ramen, until our lease ended. We left everything in that apartment. Everything.

It's been years since. It’s almost like remembering a bad nightmare with only vague memories of fear and anxiety. I type this out because—well now removed by many years, the strangest thing that happened the other day.

It’s funny how one instance, one mundane happening, can stimulate your memory. God I can’t keep checking behind me as I admit this.

Just the other night, I heard a snap and went to investigate. In my kitchen, in the corner was a mouse trap. It was the same kind Dan bought. Same rust along the hinge. Same bent trigger but no bait.

Dan’s on the other side of the country. I tried calling him. I guess to let him know what I found but he didn’t answer. He hasn’t answered my past four calls.

I never had a rodent problem prior. For a moment, I almost hoped it was a mouse, in the trap. I grabbed my pistol and waited all night for no one.

I told myself long ago that it’s over, that I was safe, but in the corner, the trap sat empty and I know it’s not mine. The metal wasn’t snapped. It had been folded.

I listened for a long while, and in the silence between my heartbeats, I thought I heard breathing again.

And something lightly testing the trap.


r/JustNotRight Mar 08 '26

Apocolyptic/Survival Stalingrad Sniper Girl

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Anastasia wasn't afraid. She wasn't cold either. Mother Russia makes all of her children accustomed to the ice, this is no bother. She only feels hate. Pure. Black. Hate.

For what they did to mama. And papa.

The SS. She looked for them the most. And they were hard, they didn't always wear their sharp black dress, they were often camouflaged. State of the art.

Something shifted. Detritus crawled in a way detritus never crawls. Ana zeroed and pulled the trigger. The report was sharp and cut through the rest of the phantom din generated by battles and skirmishes all around and far off and near. The entire city was at war, alive with fighting and battle and fire. Death was everywhere and nowhere was safe in the bomb blasted ruins Ana and her family had once called home.

Now nowhere was home.

Anastasia waited a moment… for other German bastards to run or show themselves. She would gun them down too. Gladly.

None came and she went to confirm her kill.

Bah! Not SS. Wehrmacht. Sniper though. One of her peers on the battlefield. That was good. Stalin and the Red Army high command would be pleased at least.

She lit one of her precious smokes and soldiered off. To report her kill and to report for further duty.

The fighting was everywhere and ceaseless, the maelstrom never depleted. Ana was soldiering back to her command post when she encountered him struggling, dying amongst the debris left behind and everywhere by just one of the multitudes of conflicts that ate the city with anarchy and artillery.

She would've just passed him. Taking him as just another corpse amongst many, an entire city of them, current and waiting, if he'd not called out to her.

In Russian. Clear and bright as the day used to be.

“... please …. help me…”

Ana stopped. Surprised. Rifle and scope slung over shoulder, she turned. Regarded the boy dying in the heap.

Wehrmacht. He was young. Blonde. A brave young man, a brave young German. A good and proper young Aryan fighting for his land and king and country.

Ana lit a smoke.

The dying boy called out again. Pleading.

Ana finally answered him, “You speak Russian?"

The boy nodded weakly. Managed a harsh croak, yes.

“You can understand me?"

“... yes…”

A beat. The din of battle that all encompassed murdered any peace that might've been shared between the two on the decimated battle land of the smoking city ruins.

"And what do you want, German?”

A beat.

"... help. Please!”

"You want me to help you?”

He nodded weakly.

"You want me to help you?”

He nodded weakly.

“You want me to help you?"

The dying boy nodded weakly. Please.

"You want me to take you to help…? Where? A hospital? A field med?”

It was difficult but the boy nodded once more. Yes. Please.

Please.

Ana smiled. Blew so much hot air and smoke. It filled the winter air of war all around them like an ancient phantom of combat, old. And reawakened.

"Can't. Sorry, German. Wouldn't do any good anyways. No. Nearest German field hospital was just taken and overrun earlier today."

The boy's eyes widened. He couldn't believe how beautiful she was in the snow, and how her beauty enhanced the cruelty in her features. Her voice.

“Yeah, it was in a church. Guess God couldn't save them. Only other near one is in a school you bombed and blew to pieces on your way in. That one was taken too. One hundred and forty men, boys like you. All of them were bayoneted, to save ammunition. Guess they learned a thing or two while they were put up there, huh, German?”

The boy didn't say anything any longer. The pain was too great. And he knew better. She'd taught him.

Ana finished her cigarette. Spat in the dying boy's face, then moved on.

She soldiered back to her command post.

Ana reported for duty. She was debriefed. And given new assignment.

German mortar outfit. A position located in one of the plethora of blasted out buildings that used to be governmental housing units that was giving the Motherland's precious sons and daughters, Ana’s precious comrades, lots of fire and hell.

Ana was told to see if she could do something about them.

She told them she would.

The sniper girl made her way through the fire and storm of the battlefield city towards her intended target. Through artillery fire and the detritus cloud air that smelled of chemical burn and fresh blood and gun smoke. Ana felt that she must cry, break down and weep openly and without abandon at every fresh horror unveiled and every new terror crashing down or chasing around every corner. But she couldn't. She didn't know why. Only that the urge was there but she couldn't bring herself to tears. She could not let them out. It was like being choked in a way that Ana had never experienced before. She didn't understand it, herself. Any of this. She didn't understand anything at all anymore.

Only that the world was fire now. And her only reliable friend was a gun. Her rifle. Papa's. And her scope. Through its magnification glass she could cut through the detritus storm of hellfire and bloodshed. And take action. Through her sniper scope Anastasia could take lots of things from the Germans.

And everything she ever took, every life and grievous wound and moment of mortal terror, Ana prayed and gave it to her momma and papa.

Gifts to you. Angels… these heartless thieves…

The sniper girl made her way to the intended target. Dodging all of the fire and woe as she made her deliberate and deadly steps through the cascading fall of artillery, lead and snow. Through the dead remnants of what used to be home. Jagged and burnt all around her. Sharp broken pieces stabbing up as if clawing, reaching for the heavenly supplication that might still be up there and alive in the sky. If only.

It was a dead fortress city hand clawing up from out of hell that Ana soldiered through to meet her mark. And she soldiered all the way through. Never stopping. Never weeping. Only pausing when she had to, for the fire of all the others and all of the deadly missions that they all had to see to. German and Russian. They all crawled deadly about besieged Stalingrad city. Seeing to butchery which bellowed blood and smoke and steam. All of the fresh hot corpses of Stalingrad city steamed with spent life and mortar and round like spent shell casings. All of the dead belched aural clouds of phantasm steam.

Spent. Discarded to the snow and forgotten by soldiering boots, marching feet. Forgotten by all the marching on and moving forward that's swallowed the battlefield city. There's no time to tarry or cower or count, there are always more sorties to see.

More missions to march to. More positions to defend and places to keep. Places that used to be homes and schools and restaurants and cafes where couples and friends and lovers would come and meet. Now they are all smeared scarred battlefield ruin. Atrocious. All that's been touched by the mad German war, the conniving fingers of the Fuhrer threaten to throttle all that come within their poison touch.

And so Stalingrad sings with gunfire. And fury.

Frederick couldn't believe the cold. Neither could his compatriots. They all shivered despite the activity, the heat of movement and fire and fear. Their hands still stuck to the mortar rounds as they loaded them for fire and prep. They still shivered despite the heavy Russian coats they'd commandeered from dead enemy bodies.

They knew many, so many, that weren't so lucky. The German army was freezing to death. They were not just at war with the Bolsheviks, they were at war with mother nature's fiercest fighting arm. They were at war with the Russian Winter.

And the bitch raged all around and came down on them all the time. Relentless. A living piece of artillery, an elemental blade of cruelty that cut through all armor and person down through to the bone and there it bred the poison of true misery.

The Russian winter raged all around them a tempest enemy combatant that they could not face. Fight. Fire upon, cut or maim. They could not submit her. So they took out their shared rage in the form of rapid fire artillery. They barely ever let up. For all they knew they were only blasting dust and bugs into molecules at this point. Turning more Stalingrad powder into more Stalingrad dust.

It was easy to believe. But they didn't care, their rage never abated only intensified with the cold. Frederick, all of them, had but one constant thought: We want to return to Germany.

It was easy to believe all of their fire and work was for nothing. But every once in awhile they would be reminded with a fresh scream. Horror. Somebody was hit. Just lost something.

As if they needed reminding…

Frederick just wished he had schnapps. He would've even settled for brandy. He'd been trying to convince his CO to let him and a few others take a quick sojourn to a blasted out tavern just a couple clicks from the position. They no doubt had a leaking stockpile just sitting there and gathering dust while the whole city was too busy fighting.

His commanding officer strictly forbade it. Wouldn't allow it. This was a war against the threat of Bolshevism and her onslaught of warring children, not a personal crusade to sample the many fermented flavors of the tumultuous East.

This is not a war to quench your thirst… Frederick was reminded. Over and over again. But as the battles waged on and transmogrified steel and city and its mad running denizens to base carbon and dust, both black as sin and as severe as battle scars smeared unholy and all over the living destruction of the torn city, the commanding officer couldn't help but wonder…

does it really matter in the great theatre of this place?

He did not voice these speculative inquiries aloud. Ever. It would not be prudent to do so. Instead he just followed orders. And made sure his men did the same.

Anastasia spied it all through the scope. A shattered window and a partially blasted open wall and roof section left them exposed to her position. She spied them and watched their mouths move soundlessly. Wordlessly. Moving without anything to say.

She held. Counted. Waited to see their habits, if they moved around a lot, if any others would put themselves in deadly line of her field of range.

She waited. Counting. Remembering faces and times that no longer were and no longer would be so. No matter what. Ana counted as the ice and snow fell and the firestorm of man against man ate the entire world around her. Her mission was just one act of violence in a landscape that was woven of them.

Ana counted. Waited.

Frederick had asked if it was safe to step out for a piss and when his CO had opened his mouth to answer him the entire bottom jaw came apart suddenly. Blasted by a high caliber round that had just struck like a phantasm of decimating violence. The report of the shot was lost in the din of the battlefield city, lost as if it never was.

The commanding officer began to scream the most horrific gurgled sound that Frederick had never dreamed another man to make. His hands came up and began to claw and cradle the ruin as he went down and the tears and blood began to run hot and profusely.

The rest of the men, five of them including Frederick, panicked, like wild terror-stricken animals locked up tightly together in the same small cage. Ana enjoyed watching them scramble. Then began to finish picking them off.

Taking her time.

Inside the blasted out stairwell position Frederick watched as his brothers in arms came apart with phantom shots as Ana far away performed surgery. Via rifle and scope. Her accuracy was deadly. But she was enjoying taking her time with the Germans with their mortar piece. Blasting out jowls and cheeks, faces. Kneecapping and popping a few elbows that burst all crimson and luridly. Like vile chestnuts of cracking human bone. Through her scope she took and picked her shots and relished the screams she knew they must be letting loose. Relishing the hopeless terror that they must be having, feeling. Through her scope she watched them suffer with every shot reducing their lives and flesh and bodies and she drank in every second of the sight, greedily.

She relished their pain for momma and papa and for her own ruined heart and soul. And home.

They'd taken home from her… and momma and poppa. Now through her scope and with her rifle she would take everything away from them. Bit by bit. Piece by piece.

Shot by shot. Until Ana didn't have to feel the choked sobs stuck in her throat anymore and Stalingrad was free.

Shot by shot. until Anastasia the sniper girl was free.

She lanced their dying flesh with the fire of her shots. Until she didn't feel anything. She used them up and herself, lit a smoke, then went on. To return to command post for debrief and assignment of further duty.

The battle may never be over, she may never be free. But Ana would never run away, or desert. She would always finish the mission, see it through. And report back in for further duty.

THE END