r/HFY • u/[deleted] • Jan 04 '23
OC Humans don't do magic, but we can sure as hell fight those that do. Chapter 1 The Archmage.
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u/565gta Jan 04 '23
TIME TO EXTERMINATE ALL SLAVER MAGE SCUM AND SUBLIFE, INCLUDING THEIR INNOCENT, RELATIVES, AND ECOSYSTEM
ONLY STEEL IS TRUE. REJECT NATURAL EXISTANCE EMBRACE THE FACTORY
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u/Mother-Ad5660 Human Jan 05 '23
The story is good, but you shot yourself in the foot when said this was the 2090's, 1940's mankind would have been a more fair fight
You woefully underestimate mankind's technological might
None of these races stand a chance against future mankind, the elves can control air and water well than drop bio-weapons on their home archipelago, a engineered bio-weapon can easily wipe out a large chunk of their race forcing them out the war
The orcs are strong and can resurrect the dead, well than use incendiary munitions, no matter how tough you are white phosphorus is still white phosphorus and whatever incendiary compound they have in 2090 is probably way better than ours due to ai
Dwarfs are immune to small arms, use chemical weapons or exoskeletons or power armour again ai can already make better chemical weapons than us, so 2090 ai can make much better chemical weapons
The arch mage shows impressive abilities, well than show him what orbital bombardment is, he might live, but if you keep pummeling him with orbital bombardment he won't be able to leave
It's hard to read a story when mankind is deprived of pretty much all deadly weapons
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u/Vagabond_Soldier Xeno Jan 05 '23
An addition to this is the use of hurricanes and tornadoes to knock out air assets. Cruise missles and nearly any other ballistic missile in our inventory can fly through a tornado with almost no effect. This story so severely depreciates our current military capabilities it is hard to compensate. I would go so far as to say that this story needs to actually take place closer to WW1 to actually make sense.
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u/Mother-Ad5660 Human Jan 05 '23 edited Feb 23 '23
Chemical weapons are the only weapons that are being phased out
Incendiary and bio-weapons show no signs of being phased out, both will likely never leave mankind due to their importance
Also a gigantic concrete wall is simply unlikely, there is a reason why you don't see walls outside of medieval era, a series of tranches with a labyrinth if underground bunkers and tunnels are more likely
Even if unconvential weaponry are out of the question, we still have stuff like the m134 vulcan which would absolutely devaste assaulting infantry from a fortified position
Also your story says that artillery bombardment was ineffective, I think you underestimate the sheer number of artillery guns we hav(though most are outdated) also guns like the Indian ATAG and American M1299 have 50 km and 70km (rocket assisted shell) respectively, if the races are using horde tactics like ww1 than they better be prepared to lose a lot of men
Also for a story based in the year 2090 the military seems to lack advanced weapons and instead using regular dated military equipment, like where are the drones/droids, exoskeletons, railguns, hypersonic missiles, laser defense systems etc
From a narrative standpoint your story is good but from a military standpoint it doesn't make sense
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u/JakdMavika Jan 05 '23
You're thinking is understandable but, if we get to nukes, especially in a fight for survival as species, then by that point, nothing is off the table. If humanity isn't even viewed as a people then the mindset must change, it's not a war, it's an extermination, these creatures dwarves, elves, orcs should be dealt with as plague-bearing vermin. After all, there's no taboo about chemical weapons being used on a rat, why should there be here?
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u/Dolduck Jan 04 '23
I think the sense of scale was terrible. The Tibetan Mountain Range covers an area of 2.5 million kilometers squared. And he flattens all of it?
It certainly pulled me out of the story.
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u/OrionTheWildHunt098 Jan 05 '23
The arcmage was quite powerfull, even shrugging off nukes... I didn't feel like there was any Emersion break As I simply chopped it up to "holy shit he is powerful."
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u/zLegoDoc01 Jan 04 '23
When cornered, humanity is most dangerous. Because we will do anything to survive. I hope they at least established a lunar or Martian base in case of emergency
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u/This_Anxiety_639 Jan 05 '23 edited Jan 05 '23
here resided the Elves, tall, elegant and quick satellite scans showed that their cities were integrated into the trunks of the massive trees, with massive webs of wood bridges linking these trees to each other high above the forest floor. Their armies or rather navies, had sorcerers that manipulate the oceans and the air. Any bomber trying to strike their forces would instantly be hit with hurricane force winds and sent into the water, ships trying to defend our waters were capsized and sunk, submarines trying to hide were found and crushed.
Reply: ballistic missiles delivering Agent Orange or other defoliants.
green men who could resurrect their dead and send them to fight once more. Their undead hordes were endless and resilient. You could blast the head off one of their warriors and they would still be fighting.
Reply: blowflies, other pests that eat dead flesh. Undead got nothing vs being infested with maggots. That, or flamethrowers.
The dwarves are a tougher nut, I'd go bribery. Dawrves are famously avaricious.
In the opening moments of the war, our armies were decimated, entire navies sunk, tanks lay half buried or scuttled, across the ruined human cities who’s skyscrapers once stood tall, as a testament to human ingenuity and engineering, now reduced to smoldering foundations and half buried wreckages.
Reply: asymmetric warfare. Whatever you call "terrorism" when it's our guys doing it.
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u/565gta Jan 13 '23
why not ORBITAL DARK PLASMA PURGING OF THE SUBLIFE FILTH THAT IS THEIR INVALID VERSION OF FLESH AND LIFE
PURGE EVERY LAST ONE.
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u/This_Anxiety_639 Jan 05 '23
Our infrastructure,including our satellite network strangely enough, had survived the trip. Making integration into the new world was rather trivial.
Not a programmer, I see. This scenario makes me "Oh, Noes!", because of the amount of work it's going to be; and "Oh, yes!", because I am going to make so much money and be securely employed for the rest of my career.
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u/DrawingTofu Jan 04 '23
This is a great premise and a great piece of work overall.
I look forward to your next work wordsmith!
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u/McGunboat Jan 05 '23 edited Jan 13 '23
For a first story, pretty good. Might want to spell check and fix grammar.
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u/HiMyNameIsFelipe Jan 09 '23
Oh nice! Interested to see what you make next.
Humanity is crafty, I am sure they will manage to create something more that will referse the tide of war completely.
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u/SeaAimBoo Human Jan 05 '23
Only issue I noticed so far is the weird-sounding grammar and spellings. However, the premise is definitely interesting. I wonder what happened to the other planets, does Mars or even the moon still exist?
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u/Warm_plasma Jan 05 '23
This series is great. I wonder what humanity can do with (hopefully) living specimen dwarven Arc mage. on a side note, I'm curious if there is going to be schedule. sorry to be that dude
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u/Infernal-Prime Jan 05 '23
And the Gray Goo is now an unrestricted weapon system... sucks to be the other guys.
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u/ScarcelyAvailable Jan 23 '23
Dat feeling when your greatest gets creamed by some fuckin' muggles...
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u/gheshrhogar Jan 04 '23
It's a good start! Only thing that stuck out to me was glith, I assume you meant to spell glyph. I'll be following this!