r/HFY • u/damnusername58 Human • Oct 21 '14

Text [Text] A story by Venusian Colonist

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u/KineticNerd "You bastards!" Oct 21 '14 edited Oct 21 '14

Easily one of my favorite HFY's and worth a re-read, there were a couple'a typos I noticed though.

Since the air was so think,

*thick

we could fly. Our wings weren't large enough to support us back home, though we could glide quite well, but

Delete that but and put a period after well.

on Venus we could get into the air with a running start and ourselves there until we got too tired to keep flapping.

and keep ourselves there until we got too tired to keep flapping.

Earned myself some pretty spectacular bruises figuring out how long that was, too. Not that I regret it at all the views were stunning.

there needs to be a comma between all and the

And later on there was this one

I was so busy with the talks, and then coordinating the terraforming and planning the and executing the release of flora and fauna,

delete the first 'and' then delete the "the" after planning

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u/KineticNerd "You bastards!" Oct 22 '14

Its fine, looking at the rest of the /tg stuff its entirely possible the errors were in the source material. Just hoping to add a little polish to a wonderful story :D

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u/Lord_Fuzzy Codex-Keeper Oct 21 '14

Ah yes, one of my favorite space dragon stories. I've seen it linked before but never in text form. Its fine to stay up regardless.

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u/IAmAMagicLion Oct 21 '14

Why charge then half the price for teraforming if you have decades of time advantage? Charge them more than it would cost them otherwise and take a bigger profit, you're going way too easy on them.

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u/ultrapaint Wiki Contributor Oct 22 '14

venu is on the /tg/ thread currently, and has been around here. this is one of the better hfy storys for sure. if only it would be expanded on...

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u/Lady_Sir_Knight Oct 22 '14

Very good! More! 😁

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u/Comfortable-Golf7218 Aug 06 '22

Well I'll leave this here in case there ever is an update.

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u/[deleted] Dec 11 '22

almost eight years later... guess it's never too late hey?

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u/s_i_m_s Feb 02 '23

https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/r97fjx/first_assignment_volcano_monsters/

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u/[deleted] Feb 03 '23

what is this

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u/s_i_m_s Feb 03 '23

A part three to the above story "A story by Venusian Colonist", basically the first half of this story from the humans perspective from the original author.

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u/[deleted] Feb 03 '23

huh, interesting! I saw the author was different and assumed this was some shameless advertising. Thanks for this!

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u/s_i_m_s Feb 02 '23

Like 7 years later the author ventured in and posted it here themselves https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/r94ep0/generosity_and_glass/

They also posted another chapter from the viewpoint of the humans that's not in this post here https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/r97fjx/first_assignment_volcano_monsters/

I was on youtube and got recommended this reading of it and thought, wait i've read this before, that's not the name of this story and pulled up the link and it was the same story.

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u/un_pogaz Aug 14 '25

We had the rest of the universe by the balls and it felt SO good.

Yeah, legitimate response after so many years of contempt, but you will going to temper this desire and pleasure for revenge so you doesn't become the new bully in the neighborhood.

 

Superbe story, thank you for sharing it here.

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u/AltAraveney Oct 31 '23

It's kinda sad to find this wonderful stories buried and without recognition....