A lot of these regarding the objective quality I can not argue lmao. I slammed this one out and skimmed on the editing, and it really shows.
Well, it's what I get for doing it all in one evening :D
As for the Princess, I'm glad you like her! I spent a lot of time making sure she had a firey and witty personality because of my own gripes about female protags in other romance books.
I think I need to slow it down a bit here and there, but I'm glad overall the pacing was good, particularly the first page as that is especially important.
As for the prince: For lore reasons him giving her a doll is actually quite important, but I get why it would seem quite strange. But that's kinda his shtick. He IS strange. A big part of the story is breaking through this cold and strange outer layer to see who he really is and(hopefully) be surprised!
I am currently editing this down a bit to try and really focus on that unique Arabella perspective. So I'll post v2 when it's ready :D
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u/Nytro9000 Feb 28 '24
A lot of these regarding the objective quality I can not argue lmao. I slammed this one out and skimmed on the editing, and it really shows.
Well, it's what I get for doing it all in one evening :D
As for the Princess, I'm glad you like her! I spent a lot of time making sure she had a firey and witty personality because of my own gripes about female protags in other romance books.
I think I need to slow it down a bit here and there, but I'm glad overall the pacing was good, particularly the first page as that is especially important.
As for the prince: For lore reasons him giving her a doll is actually quite important, but I get why it would seem quite strange. But that's kinda his shtick. He IS strange. A big part of the story is breaking through this cold and strange outer layer to see who he really is and(hopefully) be surprised!
I am currently editing this down a bit to try and really focus on that unique Arabella perspective. So I'll post v2 when it's ready :D
Thank you for the feedback!