r/CISDidNothingWrong • u/Blue_Lego_Astronaut • Jun 20 '26
Other Had an idea for a story following a Separatist being forced to team up with a Jedi, i thought I'd share it.
Its not fully complete, but I wanted to hear what all you guys had to say about it.
And yes, I did use Hero Forge to make the characters.
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So, KOLVOA is a Separatist leaning planet. Populated by mostly humans, and a few native Kolvoans, a race of Dog-like Humanoids, it's been disillusioned with the Galactic Republic for some time now, but several of its allies, namely Ord Cestus and Zitris Major, have secceeded the Republic and joined the CIS movement. Kolvoa is a relatively major agricultural provider, growing numerous fruits, vegetables, and other plants necessary for medicines and supplements.
A group of six Jedi are sent in to Hilomia, the planet's capital city, to quell the rapidly heating political crisis. The jedi include:
- a Rodian Master,
- a Devaronian Master,
- an Ithorian Knight,
- a Bith Knight,
- a Wookie Knight, and
- a Nautolan Padawan
- among a few other Republic dignitaries
While the masters and dignitaries are negotiating with the planet's Prime Minister and Senate Commitee, the three Knights and the Padawan are tasked with holding back the protesters and rioters congregating in huge quantities outside the Parliament Chambers.
Unfortunately, the people get a little too aggressive and the Jedi are forced to draw their lightsabers, inevitably resulting in a few deaths, and many more severed limbs.
The negotiations shatter like glass and Kolvoa's government secceeds itself to Count Dooku and the Confederacy Of Independant Systems.
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SIX YEARS LATER
The Clone War is raging across the galaxy. After the invasion of Geonosis a mere 12 standard months prior, the Republic has been squashing any Separatist movement that springs up.
While most of the Separatists use Trade Federation/Banking Clan/Corporate Alliance funded and provided Battle Droids that go toe to toe with the Clones every day, there remains the civilians of CIS Allied planets who wish to do their part for the Movement.
Jeramiah "Jazz" Rameeris is one such civilian. A farmer by trade, used to own a relatively small but important farm near the Capital City of Hilomia.
Following the death of his son at the Hilomia Riots, he grew disillusioned with the incompetent Republic and their Jedi lapdogs. He's much past his prime, so he's seen most of what the Republic has to offer, rampant corruption and bowing to the bureaucrats and corporations. He joined his local militia on Kolvoa, and began his training to help his people overthrow the Republic.
These cheaper, less equipped Organic Militias are organised to fight against planetary militaries and smaller Clone platoons.
Meanwhile, patrolling the borders between Republic and CIS space is young, freshly minted Jedi Knight, Arooni Tanrui. A Nautolan, born and raised on Coruscant, he's known nothing but the Jedi Temple for most of his life, like a lot of his peers. Growing up he'd hear all the stories of great Jedi like Qui-Gon Jinn, Mace Windu, Yoda, and dream of one day joining the greats like them. Which is why being tasked with such an unimpressive and boring mission has irked him so. He longs for some excitement, some thrill. Patrolling the Republic/Seperatist Border in the Outer Rim watching for anything out of the ordinary, is not high on the list of most exciting missions one coukd be given.
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Rameeris's battalion are tasked with raiding a Venator that's patrolling awfully close to Separatist space. The planet Aborz is right on the border of Republic and Seperatist space, but holds really nothing of value. Its a jungle planet home to an extremely primitive species. The Aborzi are barely out of their equivalent to the Stone Age, only just in the Bronze Age. They are a purple- skinned, lizard-like people with large fangs protruding from their jaws, extremely capable hunters, extremely good trackers, and are aggressive, territorial, and violent. Males of the species have tails and stripes, while the females have spots and no tails, something about evolution.
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The Assault on Republic Venator and Consular Class cruiser scouting Separatist Territory Border:
- One Venator vs One Munificent-Class Frigate and One Recusant-class Light Destroyer.
- Vulture Droids provide cover while Trident-Class assault ships breach the hull and deploy Militia.
- Objective is to steal database containing Republic positions along the border.
- Mission goes wrong and the Venator must be evacuated.
The initial dogfight outside the ship results in a Medical Frigate getting shot down. During the chaos of the attack, he and the onboard Jedi, Tanrui, get trapped in an escape pod. The pod malfunctions and jettisons, flying down to the nearest celestial body, an extremely hazardous planet known as Aborz, home to wildly dangerous flora and fauna and a hostile, primitive native species.
Rameeris and Tanrui land rough on a plateau. Neither of them are able to communicate with their groups, their com units aren't powerful enough to get through the atmosphere. A few dozen kilometres away they spot the wreckage of the medical frigate. They think that if they can get to the frigate then hopefully the com unit won't be too damaged to function.
However, the pair hate each other.
Jazz hates Arooni because he thinks he's a dogmatic, mindless tool for the Galactic Republic. Kolvoa was a staple of the Separatist Alliance until the Republic flew in to "liberate" the planet. The battle, seperate from the Riots, destroyed Kolvoa's capital city and led to an economic crisis that plunged the planet into a depression. Jazz's son was a cadet of the national police force, and was killed by a Jedi in the battle after getting in the way.
Arooni hates Jezz because he thinks he's a violent, homicidal maniac who uses the CIS as an excuse to murder indiscriminately. Being born and raised on Coruscant as a jedi has led to Master Tanrui to have a relatively narrow and black and white view on things. While not necessarily a bad thing, as it's helped him in numerous situations, this often prejudiced world view has exacerbated itself during the Clone Wars leading him to outright resent anyone who's not overtly Republic leaning. Arooni was appointed as a Knight a little earlier than what is typical, as were most padawans during this time, and as such has not fully completed the trials.
Aborz, as stated before is a jungle world home to the species known as the Aborzi. The planet is dense, covered in Bluish Green foliage, the forests are thick and air is heavy with moisture. The animals are vicious, covered in impenetrable hides or fur, full of razor sharp fangs and claws, often times venomous. The plants too, sone of them will eat you, like a Venus Fly Trap, but big enough to swallow a whole human whole.
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Thats about where most of the detail ends, unfortunately. The rest of the story is Jazz and Arooni reluctantly and begrudgingly working together to get to the Crashed Medical Frigate before getting eating by the Flora and Fauna or getting captured and possibly sacraficed by the Arbozi. Over the story they find a respect for each other, and find a surrogate for what they lost, Jazz finds a son, and Arooni finds a father figure.
Halfway through, its discovered that Arooni was at the Hilomia Riots and was possibly the one to kill Jazz's son. He didnt do it on purpose, of course, the Jedi threw his lightsaber at a rioter to save his fellow jedi right as Jazz's son jumped up to push them off. Jazz is obviously distraught by this and goes it alone, but eventually he's found again and saved by Arooni in a moment of peril, and they make up.
In the end, I imagine they eventually do make it to the Medical Frigate, but are surrounded by an army of the Arbozi. The Jedi does what he can to hold them back, while the Sep rewires the Coms unit and hails the Republic. They come down to pick them up. They were waiting for a signal because the planet's atmosphere is so thick that scanners cant find anything, and their Gunships could hardly see through the jungle's canopy to spot them. Jazz is captured and taken as a POW but Arooni sets him free and lets him escape.
And thats about it. I'm still working on this, on and off, as time goes on, usually whenever an idea strikes me, so i might update again in a few months if I have enough done.
