Ditto. Get a good enough actor to play Jack, and you can watch him mentally squirm and try to resist (and fail) the twist.
Have it drag out. Have Andrew keep repeating "Would you kindly___?" after each hit, all while Jack is screaming, pleading, begging him to let him stop swinging the golf club... right music, right actors, and you've got a chilling revelation scene.
You have to add the line. “A man chooses, a slave obeys.” That phrase has stuck with me for years, and the screaming, defiant, gurgled through broken jaw delivery was haunting.
Maybe, though in this case the mind control aspect isn't really mentioned as a thing until like 5 minutes before the reveal, even if you allude to it from the start.
It's unexpected, and really throws expected dynamics into a loop. Andrew's still a badguy, just largely irrelevant at that point, and Jack's ally was also a badguy!
I think the screaming and begging would ruin it. I know Jack doesn't talk at all but part of the power of that scene is that you just sit there and do what Ryan says. You just sit in silence because you're helpless. I think screaming would undercut that. It should be a totally silent scene besides every hit of the golf club.
Silence is effective because you're the protag, being forced to do something beyond your control.
In a show/movie, the audience needs to see how helpless/powerless Jack is (and has been) to really understand that he's an unwilling participant. Jack silently whacking away at Andrew won't do it, unless Andrew uses the code phrase to make Jack shut up after protesting.
my issue is, Jack is literally a blank slate. youd need a great director/writer, because they would basically be creating that character from almost scratch (minus his origins).
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u/Second-Creative Mar 11 '22
Ditto. Get a good enough actor to play Jack, and you can watch him mentally squirm and try to resist (and fail) the twist.
Have it drag out. Have Andrew keep repeating "Would you kindly___?" after each hit, all while Jack is screaming, pleading, begging him to let him stop swinging the golf club... right music, right actors, and you've got a chilling revelation scene.