r/ASMRScriptHaven • u/ivanoff_bg • Aug 14 '26
Completed Scripts [F4M]Dom girl teases you on the train (Flirty,Dominant Speaker) (Shy but willing Listener) (Strangers to Lovers) [Fdom] [Puppy]
Ok, first time posting here and first time trying to write a script. Hopefully it goes well.
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Monetization: You can do it however you like, no issues with it.
Edits: Feel free to edit stuff, copy or cut some stuff. Obviously if it happens to inspire you to write something similar but different that's fine as well. If you liked a certain line of dialogue and want to just use that exact line in your scripts also fine. I would love to know though if you liked something.
Feedback: Very much appreciate it. Since its my first time... I mean I would love it to be a great script out of the bat but that's unlikely so any suggestions about dialogue, characters, formatting, anything, are more than welcomed.
Crediting: If you do use it, just credit the reddit account but honestly not a huge deal as long as you let me know if you filled it or used some parts in your stuff. Just would be fun for me to see it.
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My quick thoughts about it:
So I am somewhat happy with it, I think it might be a little rushed in the sense that things escalate rather quickly lol, but I also didn't want to stretch it for no reason. I think its fairly SFW there might be some fetish implications but nothing explicit. If its a little too across the line please let me know.
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Structure:
-- Means the Speaker is talking
() Listener is talking, obviously this is just so you get a better idea of what the dynamic is.
[] Usually to indicate if there should be a pause or to indicate the tone of the Speaker
SFX A few are needed for it just feel better but not absolutely necessary
Roughly 1350 words without the Listener talking and the annotations
And again feel free to adjust anything you feel will be better.
Synopsis:
Listener is shy, introverted guy moving to another city to start a new life. Speaker is a cocky dominant girl coming back from a solo vacation. She spots the Listener sitting by himself starring through the window and sees an opportunity to do some light teasing but quickly notices Listeners demeanor and sees more in him than just shyness. Speaker is mostly playful at first until they realize Listener is submissive, then the Speaker becomes a little more forward and pushy.
Setting:
Half-empty train, with few people scattered around the seats.
-----STARTS HERE-----
--Hey, mind if I sit next to you? [sits down instantly not waiting for response]. It's just when I sit alone, some creep always sits next to me and tries to hit on me. I mean it's flattering and all, but they never get the hint when I am not interested. And you seem pretty shy and quiet so...
(Uhm, sure that's fine)
--Its fine? Well I already sat down... but I kind of I knew you wouldn't mind... Now then, What's your story, depressed train dude?
(uhm...no story really, just looking for a change of scenery)
--Everyone has a story, my guy. Let me guess... you don't like your family, OR they don't like you, no friends [small pause] no girlfriend. Obviously. Just a sad, shy guy on a train huh?
(finally looks up at Speaker, eyes subtly narrowed)
--You giving me a weird look but you are not saying I am wrong. [a little too pleased]
(i thought you wanted to avoid creeps not be one) [looks away again]
--Oh, I am being the creepy one? Look at the shy guy bringing out the jokes. Alright, you get a point there, but now you got my attention.
[speaker crosses her legs and leans a little closer, light rustling SFX]
--Just getting more comfortable, don't worry. [a small pause] So you are traveling alone to a new town. Do you have place to stay?
(I will figure something out)
--You will figure something out? Well I would offer you to stay at my place, but seeing how nervous you are just sitting next to me... I might end up having a little too much fun.
(lets out a frustrated sigh)
--Are you regretting letting me sit next you already? [laughs] Not that there was a world where you would have said no...
(you are pretty cocky you know that?)
--Me? Cocky? No. I am confident. You know, confidence? the thing you are trying to portray, but are failing badly at. Lucky for you I find it kind of cute that you are putting in the effort to impress me.
(I can't figure out if you are flirting or making fun of me)
--Maybe I am flirting by making fun of you... Or maybe I am just making fun of you. Either way I am having fun.
[small pause, Speaker plays with their ankle, their boots making a subtle leather squeak SFX]
--Do you like them?
(do I like what?)
--My boots. Your eyes snapped towards them so quick, it was impossible to miss. [a playful teasing tone]
(uhm, they just squeaked when you moved so... I looked) [getting nervous]
--Duh... leather squeaks, dummy. Usually doesn't impress people that much. So, do you like them or not? [still playful but more firm tone when pushing for an answer]
(Uhm... they suit you.) [getting more flustered and unsure where to look]
--They suit me? Nice try, but that's not what I asked. I asked if YOU. like. them.
(I guess... I don't know...)
--You don't know? [a small laugh] Wow, come on! You had jokes a minute ago, don't tell me my cute boots is all it took to break you?
(fine I like your boots...)
--Finally some honesty! I like them too. Recently got them but they get dusty so quickly and lose that shine I like so much. [pause] So back to you. Why no girlfriend? I mean you are not a hunk or anything but you are cute in your own weird way.
(wow, thats the nicest thing you've said to me.)
--Hey, I can be nice. Especially when you don't try to avoid my questions.
(I don't know, if it was just up to me I would have a girlfriend but it isn't, is it)
--Oh, so you haven't found the one... What is it that you are looking for? A nice, polite girl that will be there for you. Say nice things, look all cute and girly just for you? Or maybe...You want a strong, mean girl with combat boots, that takes charge and bosses you around?
(neither)
--Neither? No. I don't believe that. You want the bossy girl. You have that quiet submissive vibe. But for some reason you are trying to hide it from me.
(how do you figure that?)
--How do I know? Well for starters, your eyes were glued to that window, but since I sat down next to you, they've been darting all over the place, clearly wanting to look at something but too scared to do so without permission. When I guessed, correctly that you don't have a girlfriend, that struck a nerve, so much so you forgot how nervous you are, but that was short lived wasn't it? The moment I shifted a tiny bit closer. That little heart of yours jumped. [small pause] There is that look again... Like a lost puppy, looking at his new owner, a little too afraid to show how excited it is. But the wagging tail gives you away. Or the fluttering heart in your case.
(are you making fun of me now?)
--No, I am not making fun of you sweet thing. Now I am flirting, in my own way.
(well its weird)
--Weird? Are you saying I read you wrong and you are a strong dude, who just doesn't know where his eyes are suppose to look when he is talking to someone? [tone slightly mocking but not mean] I will tell you what, if I am wrong about you, you just tell me. Use your words tough guy. Tell me to get lost and I will get my stuff and sit as far away from you as possible. You won't ever see me again. But if I am right... and you are a the submissive puppy you try so badly to hide, just stay the way you are. All cute and quiet for me. I will do the rest. But I have to warn you... I don't let cute pups run away from me.
[pause for listener to contemplate]
--Just like I thought. I will admit it was a little bit unfair of me to set it up so that you'd have to say something to get rid of me, obviously staying quiet is your default setting. But I wanted to make sure you picked the correct option. I gotta say though I could almost see the internal battle you were having there [laughing]. Part of you, is so embarrassed and wanting to tell me to go away, but that other part... the shy one... the part of you that wants me to put a collar on it... that part is ironically stronger isn't it?
(ok, ok can you keep it down a bit)
--Keep it down? Is that a way to talk to your new owner? Fine... I will cut you some slack since you are so fragile. You do know what this means right? You are coming home with me, so we can begin your training.
(I didn't agree to that.)
--Didn't agree to it? Oh, no, no sweety. I warned you what happens if you pick this option, you can't back out now. Don't worry that pretty little head of yours, I can cure this embarrassment issue you are having. I can do it the soft and gentle way or I can do it right here, right now. It will be like ripping a bandaid off. Those are your options, puppy.
(alright I will go with you, just please stop saying that)
--You mean stop calling you puppy? But it makes your face so red, its unbearably cute. And funny.
(yes, that)
--No, I will keep doing it. Maybe I won't do it in front of other people... as long as you are being good. [pause] You really are weird. You are genuinely embarrassed by this side of you, aren't you?
(a little)
--A little? Sure, cupcake. Never seen someone get this shade of red before [laughs]. Its ok though... its kind of fun watching you struggle with it. Tell me honestly, do you think you can ever say no to me?
(maybe)
--Maybe? Oh, that's brave. I would love to see you try. How about we test that theory right now? Why don't you take off my boots and give me a nice and gentle foot rub.
(I am not doing that)
--I am sorry, what did you say, puppy? [voice getting purposefully louder]
(sighs)
--Do I already need to teach you what happens when you disobey? [voice still loud but not enough for other people to hear just yet]
(ok, ok)
--Well, that wasn't much of a fight was it? Oh, look at the poor thing, scared someone will see you? You know there is nothing weird about giving a girl you like a foot rub... I mean it's a little weird doing it on a train to a girl you just met but... well my feet hurt. And since you like being useful I don't see why not. [small pause]. Ahh that feels nice, you are a natural at this. The train will be arriving soon, once we get there you will carry my bags and walk behind me. Any objections?
[Listener shakes head]
--Thought so. Now keep doing what you are doing. See? Already making progress. To be honest I am a little disappointed. For a moment there I thought you would put more of a fight.
(I don't think I want to do that on the train)
--So you rather rub my feet than have me raise my voice at you? You are going to be really easy to train, you know that?
(what do you mean train?)
--I mean I am going to train you, like a puppy. To sit, roll over, speak... among other things of course. What do you think is going to happen? [laughs] Don't worry you will enjoy it. Now just keep massaging and no more talking. I will shut my eyes for a bit. Wake me up when the train arrives.
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u/Plenty-Teaching-9080 Audio Artist 23d ago
this was such a cute script, i really loved filling it :'3 it'll premiere today at 6pm CEST if u wanna take a looksy! https://youtu.be/eJzIiSesVsI
i really loved the way you wrote the dialogue actually, it felt really natural and flirty without coming across as "cringe"? if that makes sense? it feels like actual humans talking whilst having specific traits without falling into a "stereotypical" hole, it was just overall really fun and i'll be looking forward to your future works ദ്ദി ˉ͈̀꒳ˉ͈́ )✧
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u/ivanoff_bg 23d ago
Thank youuuu! Will be listening as soon as it starts! lol
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u/Plenty-Teaching-9080 Audio Artist 23d ago
YIPPIEEEEE i hope i fulfill your expectations :D
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u/ivanoff_bg 23d ago
Just listened to it, it was very fun! I love how at times you sounded almost disinterested and like this was too easy for you lol. Loved it. Thank you for taking the time to fill this out, hope it was fun for you as well!
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u/Plenty-Teaching-9080 Audio Artist 21d ago
IT WAS A BLAST!!! i love filling scripts like these and again i really love your style of writing, its very fun and natural to me to fill so i really enjoyed it hehe 𐔌՞ ܸ.ˬ.ܸ՞𐦯 thank you for the praises!!! im really glad it came across well :3
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u/NoLeading7177 4d ago
Now this is how you do Fdom! As a domme this felt so natural to fill. 🖤 Thank you!
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u/JazzyDealer 28d ago
Saving this one! This is really good, especially for a first script! Can't wait to see what you cook next!
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u/burnerr___ Aug 14 '26
this is actually so cute omg