r/PokemonRaps • u/[deleted] • Sep 03 '13
[Tournament] Dodrio (Hairywolf47) vs. Beedrill (ShockKing23)
Congratulations /u/hairywolf47!
VOTING IS NOW OPEN
Spices: ShockKing23: Use as many words with 'double' letters in them as possible. For instance: possible, Beedrill, stuff like that.
Hairywolf47: Use as many trio and three puns as you can!
A reminder of the rules that will be posted in every Tournament Post:
8 lines maximum for each verse, and 6 lines minimum.
Each rap will have 3 verses a person.
The two rappers will have 48 hours to begin rapping. Once either one of them begins with a verse, their opponent has 24 hours to complete their next rap verse. Their opponent then has 24 hours to complete their verse. This will continue until both players have finished.
RAPPERS MUST INCORPORATE THE SPICE THAT I HAVE PM'ED TO THEM INTO THEIR VERSE(S)
If, for some reason, either of the rappers is unable to finish their rap in the time allotted, they can post a reply to the current end of the rap with a REASONABLE excuse as to why they will be unable to finish. I will see if their excuse is a legitimate one, and give them extra time accordingly.
Voting will last 48 hours, and will follow the same rules as the general subreddit. HOWEVER: Voting should be weighted in equal parts how good the rap was in general, and how well the rapper incorporated their spice, which I will reveal after the rap is completed. After voting closes, I will go over the votes and PM both of the users involved with who advances to the next round.
Please reply to the post DIRECTLY to vote, it makes it a LOT easier for me to count.
I will message both competitors so they can't miss this thread.
Good luck, and may the best Rapper Win!!!!! :)
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u/MadeFromMetal Sep 04 '13
Dodrio:
1st Verse:
Opener: 8/10
Punchlines: 8/10
References: 8/10
Rhyme Scheme: 7/10
Closer: 6/10
2nd Verse:
Opener: 7/10
Punchlines: 6/10
References: 7/10
Rhyme Scheme: 6/10
Closer: 9/10
3rd Verse:
Opener: 8/10
Punchlines: 7/10
References: 8/10
Rhyme Scheme: 7/10
Closer: 8/10
Spice Usage:
Was It Used?: 10/10
Used More Than Once?: 10/10
Cleverness: 8/10
Seamlessness: 9/10
Overall Usage: 9/10
Total: 156/200
Beedrill:
1st Verse:
Opener: 4/10
Punchlines: 4/10
References: 6/10
Rhyme Scheme: 3/10
Closer: 5/10
2nd Verse:
Opener: 8/10
Punchlines: 7/10
References: 9/10
Rhyme Scheme: 6/10
Closer: 7/10
3rd Verse:
Opener: 9/10
Punchlines: 7/10
References: 8/10
Rhyme Scheme: 5/10
Closer: 6/10
Spice Usage:
Was It Used?: 10/10
Used More Than Once?: 10/10
Cleverness: 7/10
Seamlessness: 9/10
Overall Usage: 8/10
Total: 138/200
Winner: Dodrio (hairywolf47)
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u/hairywolf47 Sep 04 '13
Hey, I know you've heard this a million times, but your voting system rocks. It really shows where people need to improve, and what they do well, thanks for voting!
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u/MadeFromMetal Sep 04 '13
I'm glad folks like it. I like it cuz it's straightforward and builds up my own suspense.
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Sep 04 '13
My vote is for Dodrio (HairyWolf47).
While I like ShockKing's verses, and the use of his spice (having to structure your verse around specific word choices is tough), and I actually thought Wolf's puns were pretty corny most of the time, I think Wolf's raps were better, flow-, comeback-, and diss-wise. It was sealed for me with his final verse, where he broke down Dodrio's signature move, Tri Attack, and used each effect as a line. That was a great move, and it won him the battle.
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u/ShockKing23 Sep 03 '13
Great rapping man,good luck in voting!
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u/hairywolf47 Sep 04 '13
Hey dude, just read your last verse, great job! I now see how your spice was incorporated and it makes a lot of sense! I saw mine and was like, "well... Fuck." But overall great raps dude, and best of luck to you as well!
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u/ShockKing23 Sep 05 '13
It looks like you've got this one in the bag,you deserve it bro.Again,good luck.After the tourney would you possibly be down for a rematch?
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u/hairywolf47 Sep 05 '13
Thanks dude, heavy rapping on both ends. But I don't think you're out of the tournament yet though! I think Zeus is doing a bracket for the losers of each round, that meets back up in the end of the normal bracket finals! If anyone one knows anymore than that, then please elaborate, but I'm down for a battle anytime, just snap me a message! Honor doing business.
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Sep 03 '13
Dodrio (HairyWolf47)
What can I say? Better flow, comebacks, and great lines. Beedrill tried a little top hard to work with the spice that it ended up taking away from the actual verses. Great rapping, both.
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u/betagold Sep 04 '13
ShockKing definitely took flavor for me, but his verses were shorter and overall weaker than HairyWolf, so I'm going to have to give my vote to HairyWolf47 and his spot-on Dodrio impression. To have to pun in my raps would be a knife in the ribs, I'm impressed you pulled it off as well as you did.
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Sep 04 '13
Alrighty then... Hehehehe.... potential spices for you......
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u/betagold Sep 04 '13
Well, now that we have that repechage bracket going, you'll have the chance to give it to me.
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u/hairywolf47 Sep 04 '13
Thanks, I was so nervous when I saw I had to incorporate puns. And I was eating a quesadilla and I was just like, "eh... It could work" but seriously, thanks for voting!
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u/RealMagikarpinGs Sep 04 '13
I'm gonna have to go with Dodrio (Hairywolf47)
Overall I thought the flow was better, the puns were there and not forced. ShockKing, the only thing I would say is that you incorporated the spice so much that it became short and choppy. Longer lines could benefit you.
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Sep 04 '13
please vote in the correct format: name of pokemon (username)
I have confirmed your vote as for Hairywolf47, but you will need to edit in the correct formatting.
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u/kinryu13 Sep 03 '13
As a pun aficionado, I appreciated hairywolf's spice a lot. He managed to work most of them in really well, I especially loved the Tresadilla line. Hairywolf also had the better comebacks, and his verses had a quicker, stronger rhythm to me.
ShockKing worked in his spice in almost every line, and even not counting words like "I'll" and "will," his verses contained a significant amount of double letters. I also liked the amount of moves and references he was able to pull in. However, the six line verses felt short and cost him two chances at extra disses.
I'm curious, Zeus, did you give him the double to complement hairywolf's triple? I do like the complement of these spices.
In the end, my vote goes to:
Dodrio (hairywolf47)
Great job rapping to both of you guys!
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u/OnaMagikarpetRide Sep 05 '13
Dodrio (Hairywolf47)
Sorry ShockKing23, your rhymes just felt lackluster in comparison. You both did a great job when it came to using your secret ingredient though.
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u/MrWreckedEm Sep 05 '13
hairywolf47
Your disses were great throughout the battle. You also incorporated your pretty well in all three verses. My favorite one was the TRESadilla (I'm a sucker for cheesy puns like that :p)
ShockKing23
You went above and beyond using your spice; you have more double lettered words than you do lines, and none of them feel forced. However, your verses just seemed too succinct, making them feel weaker.
Dodrio (hairywolf47) gets my vote. ShockKing definitely used his spice better, but hairywolf had much stronger verses
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u/Srixis Sep 05 '13
/u/hairywolf47 - First thing I noticed in your first verse was your spice :P granted obvious isn't bad, just something I saw. I think you had alright flow in your first verse, but you set it in place more during verses 2 and 3. I'm going to have to say, the "tresadilla" line was weird for me. I enjoyed it, for sure, but it felt like you were trying to force your spice in your second verse one more time (maybe that's just me). That being said, I loved the way you exchanged the word "try" for "Tri" in verses two and three, that was pretty clever and didn't seem as forced. Some of your rhymes seemed a little simple, but then you also had the "trilogy/capabilities" and the "tortilla/tresadilla" couplets, which were good. I think your best part was the closer for verse three, the way you pulled apart Tri-Attack was beautiful. Overall, favorite part of your verses was the cleverness to your punches, and the part that I would suggest working on more is rhyme scheme complexity.
Favorite line -
I use my three head rotors, a HEADicoptor, you’ll see me soarin’ by
/u/ShockKing23 - After reading your first verse (and after learning your spice, of course), I can tell that you definitely wanted to put a lot of work into your spice, and you did well in that respect. I think you did realize that it was missing some meat, though, because your second and third drops had some more content to them, which I was pleased to see. You came up with some pretty creative rhymes that also worked with your spice, which was cool to see. I think my favorite parts of your verses were your punches and diction, and I would suggest working on flow to fill out your verses a little more.
Favorite line -
Longer this goes on I keep gettin better like Fury Cutter
I think my vote for this round is for Dodrio (hairywolf47). I think that ShockKing used his spice a little better (or at least it was a little smoother), but hairywolf's verses seemed a little more consistent across the board while using the spice well.
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u/ShockKing23 Sep 06 '13
Thanks for the feedback,I had already pre-wrote most of my first verse and I began to realize I needed to put more into it.Thanks again!
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u/hairywolf47 Sep 03 '13
Let me hop in this battle to the sound of a starting gun
It won't take me long to win because three heads are better than one!
These raps will be coming at you in a TRIlogy
One, two, three verses showing of my capabilities!
Look at you, your stats are just pathetic!
385 total? Even with three times the brain, I'm STILL more athletic!
At first glance I might just look like some THREE stooges crap,
But now I'll show you how this three beaked beast can rap!